Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 45 "Fragrance of First Night"A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from cece4life
I loved the way u describe this poem its just how u made the details so real that I could picture it in my find I love the way u wrote this poem how much detail u have of description u have of describing it and u made it so complex u are amazing u did that and I love this poem for it also one more thing I liked how u talked about the flowers. Loved the poem
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I loved the way u describe this poem its just how u made the details so real that I could picture it in my find I love the way u wrote this poem how much detail u have of description u have of describing it and u made it so complex u are amazing u did that and I love this poem for it also one more thing I liked how u talked about the flowers. Loved the poem
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Thank you
Comment from GWHARGIS
All of your writing has an air of romance to it, even the piees about war. But this was pure romance at its best. The sweetness of the first encounter was clearly an earth moving event. I enjoyed the imagery of the moonlight and the moments before the dawn. Beautiuflly written.
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All of your writing has an air of romance to it, even the piees about war. But this was pure romance at its best. The sweetness of the first encounter was clearly an earth moving event. I enjoyed the imagery of the moonlight and the moments before the dawn. Beautiuflly written.
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Thank you
Comment from OLA THOMAS
Putting the contest vibes aside, this is a wonderfully penned romance poem. So alluring in words and strings of love phrases running on a platter of elements of nature like 'silent night', 'moonlight', 'rays of the moon' and 'dawn.' I love the metaphor in "A ring of gold lay on your hand."
ola thomas
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Putting the contest vibes aside, this is a wonderfully penned romance poem. So alluring in words and strings of love phrases running on a platter of elements of nature like 'silent night', 'moonlight', 'rays of the moon' and 'dawn.' I love the metaphor in "A ring of gold lay on your hand."
ola thomas
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Thanks oLA
Comment from MisinformedPoet
A very sweet, ever-so-slightly erotic poem of first encounters. An interesting reference to marriage and purity makes this poem feel as if it is situated sometime in the past. Some lovely lines and incidental rhyming.
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A very sweet, ever-so-slightly erotic poem of first encounters. An interesting reference to marriage and purity makes this poem feel as if it is situated sometime in the past. Some lovely lines and incidental rhyming.
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Comment from Sanku
This is a poem as beautiful as the feelings that you portray.'My fav. Line is 'whisper of love so entangled the night ,so pure with no ambition'- All the best for the contest.
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This is a poem as beautiful as the feelings that you portray.'My fav. Line is 'whisper of love so entangled the night ,so pure with no ambition'- All the best for the contest.
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Thanks Sanku
Comment from Lastamen
The joy and wonder of love's first encounter is beautifully depicted in this heartfelt piece. The pacing and balance is delicate enough to create an even flow through the entire rendition. Well done.
Till the last amen
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The joy and wonder of love's first encounter is beautifully depicted in this heartfelt piece. The pacing and balance is delicate enough to create an even flow through the entire rendition. Well done.
Till the last amen
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Thanks last
Comment from Carole Rosa
Gary, What a gorgeous presentation. Just beautiful. I remember my first love after fifty five years. Everything about this poem is perfect. The font reflects a softness and the rose purifies it. Just lovely, Carole
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Gary, What a gorgeous presentation. Just beautiful. I remember my first love after fifty five years. Everything about this poem is perfect. The font reflects a softness and the rose purifies it. Just lovely, Carole
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Thank you Carole
Comment from Shirley B
Dear deepwater. This is a well written poem. It is so romantic. I enjoy reading poems like this. It makes my heart smile. Best of luck to you in the contest. You used great imagery to convey your message. Great job, Shirley
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2014
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Dear deepwater. This is a well written poem. It is so romantic. I enjoy reading poems like this. It makes my heart smile. Best of luck to you in the contest. You used great imagery to convey your message. Great job, Shirley
Comment Written 04-Aug-2014
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Comment from CALLAHANMR
I've always heard that the first night of deep intimacy provide a nostalgic memory that lasts for ever. I know this was true for me. Your poem creates that wonderful atmosphere and reinforces my personal first night.
I love the vivid mental and emotional images you capture in this tender poem of pure love. Thank you sharing this special night with an easy flow that reaches deep into one
s mind.
This poem looks like a winner to me.
Roger aka Marilyn's writing partner
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I've always heard that the first night of deep intimacy provide a nostalgic memory that lasts for ever. I know this was true for me. Your poem creates that wonderful atmosphere and reinforces my personal first night.
I love the vivid mental and emotional images you capture in this tender poem of pure love. Thank you sharing this special night with an easy flow that reaches deep into one
s mind.
This poem looks like a winner to me.
Roger aka Marilyn's writing partner
Comment Written 04-Aug-2014
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Thank you for this
Comment from ArtGal
Another beautiful poem you have written, and I enjoyed reading. I did find a lot of rhyme though, so when this happens, I just say free verse and rhyme mix, but you can do whatever you choose. The love exchanged between these two is described so sensually and in good taste. And the passion is definitely there. Your choice of wording is great, as always, and I wish you the best of luck. . .Sharon
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Another beautiful poem you have written, and I enjoyed reading. I did find a lot of rhyme though, so when this happens, I just say free verse and rhyme mix, but you can do whatever you choose. The love exchanged between these two is described so sensually and in good taste. And the passion is definitely there. Your choice of wording is great, as always, and I wish you the best of luck. . .Sharon
Comment Written 04-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2014
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Thank you Sharon for this
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You're so very welcome.
