Comment from padumachitta

Excellent

Hi You. The picture is esquiset. The poem is a beautiful explanation of this angel with pain. Have you seen Wings of Desire? It sort of has that feel.
I like the end verse, it is a more ositive end than I imagined.
Ciao,
paumachitta

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 05-Mar-2014

Thank you so much, pad. I haven't seen Wings of Desire. What is it?

reply by padumachitta on 05-Mar-2014

Hi. It is a German movie...in English. It was kind of big in Canada a long while ago. It is about Angels, but very non Hollywood. It's filmed in black and white. Set, I believe in Berlin. It is worth seeing.
bye for now, off to my day job, for 5 a.m. padumachitta

Comment from omerta16

Exceptional

What a poem you have here. I love that you own and shown the inspiration for this work. It has a good flow but refuses to run boringly into dull rhyme. excellent job.

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 05-Mar-2014

I truly appreciate that sixer, omertá, and your great review. Thank you so much.

Comment from vapros

Excellent

Good poetry, David, as you ponder the posture and propensities of the sculpture. I note that you own this piece - I imagine that you can go back to it multiple times, and have a source for many thoughts and creations. I enjoyed this one.

Bill

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 05-Mar-2014

Thanks so much, Bill. It's in my writing room, and I draw from it often. I appreciate the great thoughts, my friend.

Comment from Orphan33

Exceptional

Good morning. Love your poem about this work of art. In fact, you could write volumes about this and explore many scenarios and still have plenty of room left over to write more. I like the stanza about this "fallen" Angel possibly being Lucifer. Once more my friend you have penned a fine poem. Well done. Continued success.

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 05-Mar-2014

Hi there! Thank so much, my friend, for your sixer, and the great review. You're right, I could go on and on about the origin. I appreciate it! David

Comment from Righteous Riter

Excellent

Good use of the abab rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with fell/hell. Good alliteration with wings/were...doubting/decision...pay/penance...flames/forevermore...wet/with...form/fated...perhaps/prayer. Good complimentary photo followed by a clear message.

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 05-Mar-2014

Thank you, RR.

Comment from expressions9

Exceptional

Your poem is written in excellent meter and rhyme Marillion. Based on the knowledge of the fall of Lucifer, etc, it's an interesting reflection of your musings on this sculpture and your development of `possible scenarios' related to it - all with good use of alliteration throughout. Thanks for sharing :)

God bless,
Christine

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 05-Mar-2014

Thank you so much, Christine, for your wonderful review, and your generous sixer. I really appreciate your kind words.

reply by expressions9 on 09-Mar-2014

You're very welcome :)

Comment from Rondeno

Excellent

Great, David. The piece of sculpture looks remarkable, and you have more than done it justice. It's very hard for any poet to write in a tight rhyme scheme (don't I know!) and successfully resist the pull on his meaning, exerted by the exigencies of rhyme. Here, however, your sense is crystal clear and natural, and the rhyme is your servant, never your master. Superb.

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 05-Mar-2014

Thanks so much, Mike. As always, your kind words are validating and so appreciated.

Comment from Dirus

Excellent

Hi there,
Nice job. I liked the second part the most. All grammar looks good. Good meaning. Keep up the nice work and thank you. :)

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 05-Mar-2014

Thank you so much, Dirus. I appreciate it.

Comment from Patricia0129

Excellent

Both are great pieces of art... poem and sculpture. Your rhyming tale of this Angel is interesting and holds the reader at attention. Now you have me pondering his reason. I choose to see him in prayer, placing a plee for humanity and it vast unmorality . "One more day of grace Lord " Blessing.

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 05-Mar-2014

Thank you so much, Patricia, for a great review. I like your interpretation, too.

Comment from 24chas

Exceptional

This is fantastic, Marillion. Take a sixer. I think this was an absolutely perfect write to match the sculpture subject. It seems everything you write is primo.

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 05-Mar-2014

Thanks so much, Chas!