Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "Part 1, Chapter 5"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from gramalot8
Barbara, I hope that she is ok and with the woman who came into the hospital room. Hopefully she is in hiding in a very safe place, but also hope she lets her friends know if she can.
Keep writing for us.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2011
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Barbara, I hope that she is ok and with the woman who came into the hospital room. Hopefully she is in hiding in a very safe place, but also hope she lets her friends know if she can.
Keep writing for us.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Herb
Another good chapter. It reads easy enough and most importantly deals with a sensitive issue. An issue which writing about can only help. :)
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2011
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Another good chapter. It reads easy enough and most importantly deals with a sensitive issue. An issue which writing about can only help. :)
Comment Written 06-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
A good chapter, Barbara, with Troy doing his best to find Anna, before her brute of a husband does... a well presented write, my friend.
typically American(,) one-story(,) white house
is "story" right, Barbara?.. as here that's a tale.. should it not be "storey"?
A short(,) attractive woman
Please(,) if you
Margaret
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2011
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A good chapter, Barbara, with Troy doing his best to find Anna, before her brute of a husband does... a well presented write, my friend.
typically American(,) one-story(,) white house
is "story" right, Barbara?.. as here that's a tale.. should it not be "storey"?
A short(,) attractive woman
Please(,) if you
Margaret
Comment Written 06-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2011
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In US English, story is correct. I will take care of those comma issues. Comma's drive me crazy. I appreciate your kind review.
Comment from writerwish
Keep it up Holds interest well. I even sit up more in my seat for this one. I like the way you handled the dialogues when Troy meet her parents. It paints a good picture of them.
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Keep it up Holds interest well. I even sit up more in my seat for this one. I like the way you handled the dialogues when Troy meet her parents. It paints a good picture of them.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Writeaway...
A new novel Barabara, yay. Your writing is excellent, it is well-written, cleverly constructed and I cannot sugggest anything for improvment, an excellent job,keep writing!! :)
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2011
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A new novel Barabara, yay. Your writing is excellent, it is well-written, cleverly constructed and I cannot sugggest anything for improvment, an excellent job,keep writing!! :)
Comment Written 06-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and support.
Comment from jadapenn
Hi girlfriend. I loved this interactive chapter. You developed the old fart well and I love that his bark is worse than his bite. I didn't see any gremlins. I only worry about where Anna could be. Hope Troy finds her before long.
Take care. luv jada
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2011
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Hi girlfriend. I loved this interactive chapter. You developed the old fart well and I love that his bark is worse than his bite. I didn't see any gremlins. I only worry about where Anna could be. Hope Troy finds her before long.
Take care. luv jada
Comment Written 06-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and continued support.
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My pleasure, sweetness. Luv jada
Comment from teacherdub
Barbara, this is a great addition to the book. The thoughtfulness and caring attitude seen in Troy is enhancing the reader's connection to the story. Meeting Anna's parents explains a great deal more about the dilemma she truly faces. Flows well, no gaps in continuing storyline. The image change works as the story unfolds. Anna is slowly changing also. td
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2011
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Barbara, this is a great addition to the book. The thoughtfulness and caring attitude seen in Troy is enhancing the reader's connection to the story. Meeting Anna's parents explains a great deal more about the dilemma she truly faces. Flows well, no gaps in continuing storyline. The image change works as the story unfolds. Anna is slowly changing also. td
Comment Written 06-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from patwannabe
barbara, this is a wonderful part of the story. I can't imagine a parent NOT really caring about his/her child. Good for Mr. White.
Congrats on youngest son. End of an era. Bittersweet, right?
I'm enjoying your story. pat
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2011
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barbara, this is a wonderful part of the story. I can't imagine a parent NOT really caring about his/her child. Good for Mr. White.
Congrats on youngest son. End of an era. Bittersweet, right?
I'm enjoying your story. pat
Comment Written 06-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2011
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Someone suggested, I have Mr. White totally write off Anna. I couldn't do it. I agree with you, especially a father and his daughter. I'm a daddy's girl, it can't happen in my world. I appreciate your kind review.
Comment from Deejharrington
You have been busy! Congrats to your son. And the chapter came through just fine.
It seems like a dead end in finding Anna and her son. But at least the "old fart" does care about his daughter. Now what or where will Troy look? Shelters? But they usually will not reveal who is there. The next few chapters will be interesting. If you have time! LOL
deb
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2011
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You have been busy! Congrats to your son. And the chapter came through just fine.
It seems like a dead end in finding Anna and her son. But at least the "old fart" does care about his daughter. Now what or where will Troy look? Shelters? But they usually will not reveal who is there. The next few chapters will be interesting. If you have time! LOL
deb
Comment Written 06-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2011
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Thank you for the kind review. Things have calmed down a little. My last house guest, my second youngest son, left yesterday around 4. Thank you for the kind review.
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You're very welcome
deb
Comment from moyramouse
To begin with Anna's parents were how Troy expected them to be, but her mother was clearly concerned. I was glad her dad caught up with Troy later and you laid the way for a reconciliation once Anna is found.
I loved how you let us know the meal in the diner was not as good as Troy hoped - antacid tablets hopefully did the trick:):)
Enjoy being with your family and have a good summer. xxxxxmouse
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2011
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To begin with Anna's parents were how Troy expected them to be, but her mother was clearly concerned. I was glad her dad caught up with Troy later and you laid the way for a reconciliation once Anna is found.
I loved how you let us know the meal in the diner was not as good as Troy hoped - antacid tablets hopefully did the trick:):)
Enjoy being with your family and have a good summer. xxxxxmouse
Comment Written 06-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and support.