Full Pockets--Empty Heads
Big oil, small brains73 total reviews
Comment from Perp Ihebom
This is a brilliant satirical story that tries to paint a picture of the mess in which all the players in the current gulf oil palaver have found themselves. Very brilliantly executed. kudos
reply by the author on 22-May-2010
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This is a brilliant satirical story that tries to paint a picture of the mess in which all the players in the current gulf oil palaver have found themselves. Very brilliantly executed. kudos
Comment Written 22-May-2010
reply by the author on 22-May-2010
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Thanks so much, Perp...I appreciate your review and your time....
Comment from Diny
What about...
she had dimpled cheeks that you wanted to pinch.
she had dimpled cheeks that begged for pinching.
Hey love your colorful discriptions and wonder if any of the folks that matter should read this!- Geeze- somethings gotta give!- Fork in the road- seems more like a ladel! haha good luck- loved it- Di
reply by the author on 22-May-2010
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What about...
she had dimpled cheeks that you wanted to pinch.
she had dimpled cheeks that begged for pinching.
Hey love your colorful discriptions and wonder if any of the folks that matter should read this!- Geeze- somethings gotta give!- Fork in the road- seems more like a ladel! haha good luck- loved it- Di
Comment Written 22-May-2010
reply by the author on 22-May-2010
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Thanks, Diny. I really appreciate your support as usual...
Comment from jwlee211
Great work. I like the line hemorrhoidal distress. I also like the golf balls. I understand it will be Tuesday before they try to plug the well. What a crock
reply by the author on 22-May-2010
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Great work. I like the line hemorrhoidal distress. I also like the golf balls. I understand it will be Tuesday before they try to plug the well. What a crock
Comment Written 22-May-2010
reply by the author on 22-May-2010
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You've got that right, Jwlee. We have to stand by and watch....Arrrgh! Thanks for your review...
Comment from bluedragon776
Nice contribution to the contest you entered.
Funny and sarcastic. I like this line:
"Yeah. I swear, BP and trouble seem to go together like shit and stink."
Good Luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 22-May-2010
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Nice contribution to the contest you entered.
Funny and sarcastic. I like this line:
"Yeah. I swear, BP and trouble seem to go together like shit and stink."
Good Luck in the contest.
Comment Written 22-May-2010
reply by the author on 22-May-2010
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Hi, Bluedragon...Welcome aboard Fanstory. Uuuuh, I am a bit confused. As you didn't point out anything you DIDN"T like about the piece, I am wondering why you only figured it for a six. Please do yourself a favor and read the rating codes for stars and you will see what I mean. I would appreciate it, if you concur to upgrade my stars. Thanks so much, author
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ok, I'll take another look at the rating system.
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Thanks so much...I really appreciate it. Bob
Comment from writerwithdogs
Good strong dialog. Characters are written so you can visualize them. Strong language fits the piece. Still no solution. How so like life. More political than I am used to, but extremely well done.
reply by the author on 22-May-2010
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Good strong dialog. Characters are written so you can visualize them. Strong language fits the piece. Still no solution. How so like life. More political than I am used to, but extremely well done.
Comment Written 22-May-2010
reply by the author on 22-May-2010
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Thank you, Barbara. Welcome to Fanstory. I appreciate your review very much.
Comment from wrdtrctr
A biting, satirical look at big business but not sure what you were aiming for. It is more mean spirited than funny and ended right were it began: nothing being done. You have a clean writing style but I don't think this was the best use of your talents.
reply by the author on 21-May-2010
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A biting, satirical look at big business but not sure what you were aiming for. It is more mean spirited than funny and ended right were it began: nothing being done. You have a clean writing style but I don't think this was the best use of your talents.
Comment Written 21-May-2010
reply by the author on 21-May-2010
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Thanks
Comment from Shirley McLain
A very timely story. Your characters certainly sounded real and you wrote in a lot of action. I did not find any spag during the read. Good job.
reply by the author on 21-May-2010
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A very timely story. Your characters certainly sounded real and you wrote in a lot of action. I did not find any spag during the read. Good job.
Comment Written 21-May-2010
reply by the author on 21-May-2010
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Thank you
Comment from gerry26
A Very true to life story. Your ending was right on the spot. Your writing is interesting and you take on the oil company was very good. Clear and concise.
gerry
reply by the author on 21-May-2010
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A Very true to life story. Your ending was right on the spot. Your writing is interesting and you take on the oil company was very good. Clear and concise.
gerry
Comment Written 21-May-2010
reply by the author on 21-May-2010
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Thankyou. Could you please tell me what you thought of Betsy in this story, gerry? LOL...Bob
Comment from LadyNyx
To be honest, other than saying that they were at a juncture I didn't really see where the juncture was and some of your descriptive phrases were either confusing, didn't make much sense or seemed out of place. An example of this would be Betsy's butt being shaped as a Golden Delicious apple. While it showed that yes, Betsy was rounded in certain places, it suggested something more than just a description. Also the first two paragraphs were really shaky. Lastly, there wasn't really anything interesting about this story, just another day in a crisis.
I would suggest that this idea, which could have potential with a bit more development, should go back to the drawing board.
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reply by the author on 21-May-2010
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To be honest, other than saying that they were at a juncture I didn't really see where the juncture was and some of your descriptive phrases were either confusing, didn't make much sense or seemed out of place. An example of this would be Betsy's butt being shaped as a Golden Delicious apple. While it showed that yes, Betsy was rounded in certain places, it suggested something more than just a description. Also the first two paragraphs were really shaky. Lastly, there wasn't really anything interesting about this story, just another day in a crisis.
I would suggest that this idea, which could have potential with a bit more development, should go back to the drawing board.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 21-May-2010
reply by the author on 21-May-2010
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Thanks
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Thanks
Comment from cheyennewy
I heard on the news that they are going to try the golf ball thing and I didn't think it was a joke! Sometimes the more simple a plan is the better it works. Anyway, I like the way you wrote this. You have good characters and the dialogue is smart and believable. Also your descriptions of the board members is vivid. Well done and good luck in the contest....chey
reply by the author on 21-May-2010
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I heard on the news that they are going to try the golf ball thing and I didn't think it was a joke! Sometimes the more simple a plan is the better it works. Anyway, I like the way you wrote this. You have good characters and the dialogue is smart and believable. Also your descriptions of the board members is vivid. Well done and good luck in the contest....chey
Comment Written 21-May-2010
reply by the author on 21-May-2010
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Thanks so much, Chey. I appreciate that very much.
