Comment from Sharesy

Excellent

The road to recovery is a long, twisted, painful path after the loss of a loved one. This was a sweet a gentle treatment of dealing with loss. Family support at a time like that, means everything. A beautiful story, Carol. I liked it a lot.

Best regards,
Sharesy

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reply by the author on 15-May-2010

Sharesy,

As always, I truly appreciate the time you took to read my story and for your gracious comments. Thank you...Carol

Comment from Juliette Chamberlain

Excellent

This is a lovely story! I was really pleased to read that it is a work of fiction.
You really do have a way of taking the reader right into the minute. In the midst of the sadness, I loved the touch of humour. Well written.


Juliette

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reply by the author on 15-May-2010

Juliette,

Thank you for reading, enjoying and offering such a warm response. Carol

Comment from cheyennewy

Excellent

Hi Carol,

There is so much to like about this story. I could feel the pain of loss deeply and my heart went out to 'mommy.' You described the stress of pregnancy so well that it took me back to when I was pregnant. A little sad but a well written and delightful story. Good luck in the contest. Blessings, chey

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reply by the author on 15-May-2010

Chey,

You can always tell when so many emotions are bursting to come out of me..I tend to try and blend them all together. Glad it was enjoyable. Smiles, Carol

Comment from vandawalker

Excellent

A very nice story full of an interesting plot and wonderful characters. I really like the descriptive details of the pregnancy. It brought back many memories. Learning something special about her father through her own daughter is a special gift.

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reply by the author on 15-May-2010

vandawalker,

Yes, looking through the innocent eyes of a child can give us a tjotally different outlook on life. Carol

Comment from jadapenn

Excellent

This little girl is precious. I loved the beginning of the story. You had lots of good emotion and inner conflict going on here. Katie developed well and again the interacion between her and he mom was priceless.
Best wishes for the contest, smiles.
Luv jada

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reply by the author on 15-May-2010

Jada,

I enjoyed the exchange between mother and daughter as well. Thanks so much..CArol

Comment from Earthwriter

Excellent

for a fiction piece this one really felt like it was written from the heart of experience and many will be able to relate with it excellent job my friend

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reply by the author on 12-May-2010

Earthwriter.

Thank you for the generous comments.I am pleased that you felt the connection with my characters and thought they could be real. Appreciate the review.
smiles, Carol

Comment from dmjones

Excellent

A good start to a novel. This could go a lot of different ways. I love Katie. She seems so real and adorable.

(this should be we or he instead of you)You hoped I was carrying a son.

Mommy really needs to get busy(.)"

deep in thought. "(A)and he says

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reply by the author on 12-May-2010

Donna,

It started out as just an idea, but now I love the characters too. Could become quite an adventure for the family. Thanks...Carol

Comment from Krugerrand

Excellent

Solid opening for a novel. You can really take this intro in any direction, in just about any genre.

Really nice touch with the little girl seeing that her Mom's shoes were on backwards. And you've already begun to develop the characters of all mentioned.

Well done as usual.

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reply by the author on 12-May-2010

Krugerrand,

Thanks for all the encouragement. Glad that you enjoyed the chapter. Smiles, Carol

Comment from ladybird

Exceptional

This is so very good, great writing. Sad, but with a message of hope, life goes on. The part where the little girl pointed out her mum had her shoes on the wrong feet was a good touch, made this reader smile. I'd really like to see this opening made into a book. And the artwork is beautiful.How do you go about putting artwork at the top of a posting, and does it cost anything?
Ps I really wish you luck with this entry.

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reply by the author on 12-May-2010

Ladybird,

First of all, I want to thank you so much for always being so encouraging and for the great comments, I really appreciate the thoughts and stars.

Secondly, it's really simple to add artwork. When you are posting a story, at the very top of the page it asks if you want to select fan art review or import from your own computer. Choose fan art review...once there you cn select or searchfor a picture that suits your story. To add it to your story, push the select button on top of the particular picture you want to choose. It will be imported to your posting.

Hope that helps...If you need additonal info feel free to pm me.

smiles, Carol

reply by ladybird on 12-May-2010

You're welcome. And thank you for explaining about the fan art.

Comment from 1ClosetWriter

Excellent

Thank you for a wonderful story. Sorrow can provide some bittersweet moments. This sounds like a healing moment. Kate's innocence in portrayed so well.

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Closetwriter,

I hope that the future is a fairytale for all of them...Carol