Creator of the Universe
a poem of thanks83 total reviews
Comment from --Turtle.
Hi brooke,
Kind of neat that this poem instills the Creator in everything. In all the beauty all around, that in itself acting as an acknowledgment in things big and small, from the stars to the simple enjoyment of jelly. This poem effectively employs the baited string (at least I call it the baited string, where it starts the thought, and continues the thought with the punchline at the end of the string, but you aren't allowed to catch the end of the string until the end, which keeps you moving through the poem all the way to the end, without allowing you to lose track of the string. (I tend to get sad when I lose track of the string before the end when it seems the poem is using the baited string, but that didn't happen here)
You are a plethora of poems, But sometimes there's only so many ways to say this was enjoyable to read. At least the reasons are different, each new arrangement to ping a thought.
--Turtle.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2010
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Hi brooke,
Kind of neat that this poem instills the Creator in everything. In all the beauty all around, that in itself acting as an acknowledgment in things big and small, from the stars to the simple enjoyment of jelly. This poem effectively employs the baited string (at least I call it the baited string, where it starts the thought, and continues the thought with the punchline at the end of the string, but you aren't allowed to catch the end of the string until the end, which keeps you moving through the poem all the way to the end, without allowing you to lose track of the string. (I tend to get sad when I lose track of the string before the end when it seems the poem is using the baited string, but that didn't happen here)
You are a plethora of poems, But sometimes there's only so many ways to say this was enjoyable to read. At least the reasons are different, each new arrangement to ping a thought.
--Turtle.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2010
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I like the concept of the baited string - thanks, Turtle, and I'm so glad you didn't get lost :-) Brooke
Comment from AnnaLinda
Brooke,
I think that you did a most excellent job
on your faith poem and entry! It seems like
you have added various subjects from your other
fine poems here in this one. Very interesting.
(waves, tides, tangerine, buttercup...)
I liked your grateful and thankful ending as
well:
"I ask that I might live to serve,
a life of gratitude my prayer"
I also the the form that you have used in this
poem.
Sincerely,
Linda
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2010
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Brooke,
I think that you did a most excellent job
on your faith poem and entry! It seems like
you have added various subjects from your other
fine poems here in this one. Very interesting.
(waves, tides, tangerine, buttercup...)
I liked your grateful and thankful ending as
well:
"I ask that I might live to serve,
a life of gratitude my prayer"
I also the the form that you have used in this
poem.
Sincerely,
Linda
Comment Written 25-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Linda. I'm so pleased you found meaning in my faith poem. Brooke :-)
Comment from sgalletti
Gorgeous poem Brooke and I find I am finally able to give you a six! Yeah! The art work is stunning and I love the approach you took in this Faith contest entry. Great quatrains with lovely rhyme in the second and 4th lines. What I appreciated most, however, is the images you chose to demonstrate God's gifts to all of us. Beautiful...Sue
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2010
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Gorgeous poem Brooke and I find I am finally able to give you a six! Yeah! The art work is stunning and I love the approach you took in this Faith contest entry. Great quatrains with lovely rhyme in the second and 4th lines. What I appreciated most, however, is the images you chose to demonstrate God's gifts to all of us. Beautiful...Sue
Comment Written 25-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2010
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Thank you, thank you, Sue :-) I spent far more time than any sane person should trying to find art for this one, so God bless you for liking it. LOL You are generous, gracious, and I am appreciative :-) Brooke
Comment from Susanne M. Psyris
Brooke, such a lovely and inspirational piece for the "Faith" contest. Great rhythm and rhyme and the imagery is awesome. Absolutely love the second verse, the mention of "mason jars" made me remember my great grandmother...she used to do everything natural. A great entry! Hugs and smiles, Susanne
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2010
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Brooke, such a lovely and inspirational piece for the "Faith" contest. Great rhythm and rhyme and the imagery is awesome. Absolutely love the second verse, the mention of "mason jars" made me remember my great grandmother...she used to do everything natural. A great entry! Hugs and smiles, Susanne
Comment Written 25-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Susanne, for this most gracious and generous review of my faith poem :-) This one holds great meaning for me, so your response is especially appreciated :-) My oldest sister and her daughter still make preserves in mason jars - they're the ones with the family's domestic genes. LOL
Brooke
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You are so very welcome, Brooke...I lack domestic genes, as well. Thanks be to God I have a husband who is a great cook! lol...hugs and smiles, Susanne
Comment from bayoupoet
Brooke, this is such a beautiful, thought filled poem of very lovely imagery and deep emotion. It is an absolute pleasure to read for you!
sandra
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2010
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Brooke, this is such a beautiful, thought filled poem of very lovely imagery and deep emotion. It is an absolute pleasure to read for you!
sandra
Comment Written 25-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Sandra, for your most gracious review :-) Brooke
Comment from Sasha
This is lovely. I enjoyed it immensely. Beautifully written and an excellent entry for this contest. I sincerely wish you all the best. BTW I really like the illustration you used for this one too.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2010
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This is lovely. I enjoyed it immensely. Beautifully written and an excellent entry for this contest. I sincerely wish you all the best. BTW I really like the illustration you used for this one too.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Valerie :-) I searched forever for an illustration for this one, so thank goodness you didn't complain about it! LOL Brooke
Comment from mtngalofnc
Hi Brooke,
Outstanding poem of faith and how I wish, I were allowed to give you those 6 stars. It is a lovely poem and I especially liked those last two stanzas where you speak of a mother's dream and the life of gratitude my prayer.
Best wishes with the contest and thank you for sharing.
Becky
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2010
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Hi Brooke,
Outstanding poem of faith and how I wish, I were allowed to give you those 6 stars. It is a lovely poem and I especially liked those last two stanzas where you speak of a mother's dream and the life of gratitude my prayer.
Best wishes with the contest and thank you for sharing.
Becky
Comment Written 25-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Becky. I am moved by your desire to award this a six :-) Brooke
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Wonderful job writing this poem. It's nice to remember that God is the Creator of all and you reminded us in a very nicely flowing easy to read poem. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2010
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Wonderful job writing this poem. It's nice to remember that God is the Creator of all and you reminded us in a very nicely flowing easy to read poem. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2010
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Thanks, Barbara :-) I'm so glad you enjoyed :-) Brooke
Comment from patmedium
Brooke, this is a lovely poem and I absolutely adore the way you jump from example to example. This is a write with a difference. Pat.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2010
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Brooke, this is a lovely poem and I absolutely adore the way you jump from example to example. This is a write with a difference. Pat.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Pat. So glad you enjoyed :-) Brooke
Comment from missy98writer
Brooke,
I so want to give your exceptional poem a six but the system only allow me to giver you five. Another beautifully written poem. Your well crafted poem is an awesome entry in the faith contest. Lovely art work and presentation. Outstanding imagery, writing and rhyme. The stanza I loved the best:
Creator of the buttercup
reflecting gold from sunlight's gleam,
the possibility of peace
still held within each mother's dream
creatively you described God and defined poetically how he graced Mother Earth and nature. Any poet who can write about tangerine and flowers is a winner in my book. Keep up the stellar writing. . .Melissa!
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2010
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Brooke,
I so want to give your exceptional poem a six but the system only allow me to giver you five. Another beautifully written poem. Your well crafted poem is an awesome entry in the faith contest. Lovely art work and presentation. Outstanding imagery, writing and rhyme. The stanza I loved the best:
Creator of the buttercup
reflecting gold from sunlight's gleam,
the possibility of peace
still held within each mother's dream
creatively you described God and defined poetically how he graced Mother Earth and nature. Any poet who can write about tangerine and flowers is a winner in my book. Keep up the stellar writing. . .Melissa!
Comment Written 25-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Melissa - I do appreciate your wish for a six and your most thoughtful comments :-) Brooke
