Comment from kingskid

Excellent

I will have to give you a cyber 6. This was one of my best reads today.
Such a happy poem, with a touch of evil and sadness. Luckily though good overcomes evil and we have a happy endings.
Beautiful beat and flow to this poem.
Amazing imagery as well.
Presentation very pleasing to the eye.
I really enjoyed this today.
love
Norms

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2010

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2010

Thank you, Norms, for the cyber six - I accept them gratefully :-) Brooke

Comment from Rick Koestler

Exceptional

and his love was so strong when he held out his hand
that all evil and wrong washed away from this land.

Okay, last time it was hope, now it's love. I just know 'Faith's-a-comin'

Brilliant poem!!!!!!!!

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2010

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2010

Thank you, Rick - you've made me laugh at your comment and smile at your generous rating - what a nice man you are :-) brooke

Comment from Oatmeal

Excellent

adewpearl,

Very nice poem. The theme was strong. The story line flowed very well.

I only spotted a couple of errors-

But this girl** with a smile that** could light up the skies
**put a comma in both places

Everything else looked grand.

I look forward to seeing you again.

Love you,

Oatmeal

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2010

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2010

Thanks, Oatmeal, for your thoughtful review and input. Brooke

Comment from E Vin Smyth

Excellent

Once again, you've blown me away with your great choice of words, and story line. This is just a very sweet enjoyable poem that I will read to my Grandchildren the next time they come over.

E Vin Smyth

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2010

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2010

Thank you, E Vin Smyth. I'm so pleased you want to read this to your grandchildren :-) Brooke

Comment from ms. cardshark

Excellent

Really liked this one! Took me back to the days when Grimm's Fairy Tales were my favorite read. Loved the last verse. Beautiful poem.
MM

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2010

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2010

Thank you, MM - I had fun with this one, so I'm glad you enjoyed it too :-) Brooke

Comment from Donovan

Excellent

..and then came the diapers and mortgages, the in-laws and the light bills. Children turned into teen ages and she again longed for the days of yore.

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2010

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2010

Donovan, you are too much. Maybe they became rich and had model children and lived surrounded by love forever and ever. Hey, I figure that must happen to someone! LOL Thanks, my friend. Brooke :-)

Comment from mstad55

Excellent

All it needs is illustration and it can be a great childrens bedtime story. It has all the classics combined. Love, witches, sadness, beauty and a happy ending. Love conquers all and endureth many travails. Mike

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2010

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2010

Thank you, Mike - I so wish I were an artist :-) Brooke

reply by mstad55 on 06-Mar-2010

I'm having my nephew do my Melvin book. The illustrations are coming out really nice. You'll get a real kick out of some of them. He's doing a great job, and captured the essence of the stories. Maybe you can find someone on FanArt. Mike

Comment from fictionwriter

Excellent

What a wonderful little story in this poem. It also hold that sing-song quality that I so enjoy in poems. So very wonderful, wish I could give you a six, but limited again. So sad, this one deserves it.

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2010

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2010

Thank you, Joy :-) So glad you enjoyed. I appreciate your generous impulses :-) Brooke

Comment from FredCollingwood

Excellent

Everybody probaly tells you this but you're poetry is exceptional. I think a collection of these should be in print. I really enjoy reading your poems.

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2010

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2010

Thanks so much, Fred - that is a lovely thing to say. Brooke :-)

Comment from El.Marjie

Excellent

Brooke, I love your story poem, a sweet boy-girl tale showing how love can overcome hate. I always love your choice of words.

In a faraway place in a faraway time, lived a girl filled with grace with a face so sublime. In her eyes shone the stars, in her cheeks blushed a rose, In her laugh played guitars to the notes gods composed.

After reading that description, I'm hooked! Thanks again for sharing your lovely words with all of us on FanStory. God bless! Marjie

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2010

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2010

Thank you, Marjie :-) I appreciate your most gracious review :-) Brooke