I Once Believed
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Comment from flyboy130
This is a wonderful poem you wrote adewpearl. Nothing was wrong with anything in the poem. My favorite lines in the whole intire poem is
Experience has taught me well that more then hope on wings can fly and so ive come to bid farewell. That was a great Idea.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2010
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This is a wonderful poem you wrote adewpearl. Nothing was wrong with anything in the poem. My favorite lines in the whole intire poem is
Experience has taught me well that more then hope on wings can fly and so ive come to bid farewell. That was a great Idea.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2010
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Thank you, James - it is so good to hear from you :-) Brooke
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me too.
Comment from rhymelord
Dear Brooke,
Again a gem and, in particular, the line that really shines is:
to love that paused but passed me by.
The flow and the gentle alliteration is great.
Regards
Reg
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2010
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Dear Brooke,
Again a gem and, in particular, the line that really shines is:
to love that paused but passed me by.
The flow and the gentle alliteration is great.
Regards
Reg
Comment Written 18-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2010
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Thank you, Reg. I'm so pleased you like this and that particular line, which took me quite a while to come up with! Brooke :-)
Comment from chaswriter
Brooke - You make it sound so easy to write this poem, but I know otherwise. It has such a natural feel in its flow and rhyme. Kind of lke a conversation. I'm impressed.
Charlie
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2010
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Brooke - You make it sound so easy to write this poem, but I know otherwise. It has such a natural feel in its flow and rhyme. Kind of lke a conversation. I'm impressed.
Charlie
Comment Written 18-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2010
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Thank you, Charlie - I appreciate your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Amicus
This is a superb Dickensonian-like poem, Brooke...and one which contains a surprisingly poignant sentiment from you. I loved the flow and rhymes in this one as well as the haunting tone of resignation.
Dear friend, do wallow a bit in whatever loneliness and disappointment surrounds you, as we all must from time to time, but then please remember love does prevail...love is a verb, something one does; not a noun, something one gets...and you are, I have no doubt, still a lover...and the dance ain't over until the music stops. :>)
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2010
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This is a superb Dickensonian-like poem, Brooke...and one which contains a surprisingly poignant sentiment from you. I loved the flow and rhymes in this one as well as the haunting tone of resignation.
Dear friend, do wallow a bit in whatever loneliness and disappointment surrounds you, as we all must from time to time, but then please remember love does prevail...love is a verb, something one does; not a noun, something one gets...and you are, I have no doubt, still a lover...and the dance ain't over until the music stops. :>)
Comment Written 17-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2010
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Thank you, Amicus - I truly do appreciate your comments. You're not only a psychologist/psychiatrist? I forget which, but a very nice man :-) Brooke
Comment from Queenise
A very enchanting and touching poem that I liked very much. Good imagery,flow,pace. I can just feel this. Would recommend to others. Into each life some pain must come. I once believed also. Now I believe in someone much stronger and loving. My Lord and Savior Jesus. Queenise
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2010
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A very enchanting and touching poem that I liked very much. Good imagery,flow,pace. I can just feel this. Would recommend to others. Into each life some pain must come. I once believed also. Now I believe in someone much stronger and loving. My Lord and Savior Jesus. Queenise
Comment Written 17-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2010
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Thank you, Queenise. I always appreciate hearing from you :-) Brooke
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You're welcome,Brooke. Queenise
Comment from flygirl254
What an awesome little poem. I really think it is one of those poems that we can read a lot into, but then again, it has its own surface quality that works as well. I still do believe in fairy tales, by the way. I like the line, "more than hope on wings can fly." It leaves open so many possibilities, yet we get the impression that whatever is flying on those wings, it is a possitive thing because it is there in place of the hope. The idea of "love that paused but passed me by" is quite sad. I guess some feel it's better to have loved and lost, but I'd rather love and keep him. Great work on this poem. Your meter is perfect, and keeps the piece flowing nicely to the end. Very nice!
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2010
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What an awesome little poem. I really think it is one of those poems that we can read a lot into, but then again, it has its own surface quality that works as well. I still do believe in fairy tales, by the way. I like the line, "more than hope on wings can fly." It leaves open so many possibilities, yet we get the impression that whatever is flying on those wings, it is a possitive thing because it is there in place of the hope. The idea of "love that paused but passed me by" is quite sad. I guess some feel it's better to have loved and lost, but I'd rather love and keep him. Great work on this poem. Your meter is perfect, and keeps the piece flowing nicely to the end. Very nice!
Comment Written 17-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2010
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I'd rather love and have kept him too! :-) I so appreciate your sensitive response to this poem of love lost long ago. Brooke
Comment from Poetry Beginnings
Outstanding. Very interesting that I was just writing about that as well, not as powerful as your and not in rhyme at all. I just worry to post it here, since I get slammed.
You words are fling on wings!
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2010
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Outstanding. Very interesting that I was just writing about that as well, not as powerful as your and not in rhyme at all. I just worry to post it here, since I get slammed.
You words are fling on wings!
Comment Written 17-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2010
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Thank you so much, my friend. I am sorry that you've been "slammed." I dislike reviewers who are not constructive and tactful in their criticism. You are most kind and generous. Brooke :-)
Comment from MissMerri
Your poetry so often reminds me of Emily Dickinson's and this is one that definitely does. Your lines and rhymes are more consistently even than hers, but your thoughtful word selections and deep thoughts so uniquely expressed, as well as the metaphors from nature, are definitely Dickinson. This is beautifully done and such a pleasure to read and to hear.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2010
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Your poetry so often reminds me of Emily Dickinson's and this is one that definitely does. Your lines and rhymes are more consistently even than hers, but your thoughtful word selections and deep thoughts so uniquely expressed, as well as the metaphors from nature, are definitely Dickinson. This is beautifully done and such a pleasure to read and to hear.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2010
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Thank you, Miss Merri - that is the best compliment I can receive as she has long been my favorite poet :-) Brooke
Comment from NightWriter
"I Once Believed" is another beautifully written quatrains poem. Perfect rhythm and rhyme throughout. Reads very smooth. Well done!
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2010
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"I Once Believed" is another beautifully written quatrains poem. Perfect rhythm and rhyme throughout. Reads very smooth. Well done!
Comment Written 17-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2010
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Thank you, my friend. I so appreciate your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Dave M
Brooke,
This is an excellent poem about someone who loved passed by. I enjoyed this post and couldn't find anything to criticize. We all start out sorta green, or wet behind the ears.
Dave
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2010
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Brooke,
This is an excellent poem about someone who loved passed by. I enjoyed this post and couldn't find anything to criticize. We all start out sorta green, or wet behind the ears.
Dave
Comment Written 17-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2010
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Thank you, Dave - you're most thoughtful :-) Brooke
