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Comment from WRITER1
This is a very nice piece. All the dead, thanks to war. I like the vision that this one give of leaves wrapping each loved one to stave off the cold.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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This is a very nice piece. All the dead, thanks to war. I like the vision that this one give of leaves wrapping each loved one to stave off the cold.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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Thank you, Donna - I appreciate your thoughtful review of this prayerful poem. Brooke
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Such sensitive, heart-felt
words, my friend.
We had two minutes silence again
yesterday -- everyone on the
supermarket floor stood perfectly
still -- we felt so united in our
rememberance.
Margaret.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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Such sensitive, heart-felt
words, my friend.
We had two minutes silence again
yesterday -- everyone on the
supermarket floor stood perfectly
still -- we felt so united in our
rememberance.
Margaret.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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Thank you, Margaret - that must be moving to have everyone fall silent in the middle of shopping - I cannot imagine people's doing that here. Brooke
Comment from another jim
What a fitting tribute to our fallen vets, Brooke. My heart goes out to their families and friends.
Wonderful imagery in your cinquain, as always. A very timely and moving poem. Well done! Thanks for sharing...Jim.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2009
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What a fitting tribute to our fallen vets, Brooke. My heart goes out to their families and friends.
Wonderful imagery in your cinquain, as always. A very timely and moving poem. Well done! Thanks for sharing...Jim.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2009
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Thank you, Jim - good to hear from you :-) Brooke
Comment from Adri7enne
There is no comfort for the loss of a young life. Your last line is drenched in pain. You have the knack of capturing emotions in just a few apt words.
Good luck in the contest, Brooke.
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There is no comfort for the loss of a young life. Your last line is drenched in pain. You have the knack of capturing emotions in just a few apt words.
Good luck in the contest, Brooke.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2009
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Thank you, Adrienne, and good morning :-) I appreciate your kind comments. Brooke
Comment from DecrepitOldBag
Oh, Brooke, this is so powerful. It immediately brought tears to my eyes. You write so well. Your imagery is very strong as always. A sad piece but brilliantly written.
Warm wishes
Kat
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Oh, Brooke, this is so powerful. It immediately brought tears to my eyes. You write so well. Your imagery is very strong as always. A sad piece but brilliantly written.
Warm wishes
Kat
Comment Written 12-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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Thank you, Kat - I truly appreciate your thoughtful response to this prayerful poem. Brooke
Comment from Loyd C. Taylor, Sr
Hello there and a very good Thursday morning to you Brooke.
A great poem my friend, touching the hearts of your readers and giving great tribute to those who have sacrificed. Loyd
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2009
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Hello there and a very good Thursday morning to you Brooke.
A great poem my friend, touching the hearts of your readers and giving great tribute to those who have sacrificed. Loyd
Comment Written 12-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2009
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Thank you, Loyd. Good morning! I appreciate your kind response. Brooke
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My pleasure, Loyd
Comment from tony bronk
As A viet Nam vet, I thank you so much for remembering and giving tribute to the "fallen" I think of those who I knew who did. One in particul. The guy from my hometown, who I went in at the same time, and he stepped on a landmine and died. I was first trained in Ifantry (light weapons specialist) but, later transfered to S-3 Intelligence (communications) It was a bit safer and cushier but, we had to avoid being bombed, so we had to stay on the move, for it was the enemies goal to put out all communications. We missed a few bombings by just a few feet. Thanks again and a very good write. Tony
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As A viet Nam vet, I thank you so much for remembering and giving tribute to the "fallen" I think of those who I knew who did. One in particul. The guy from my hometown, who I went in at the same time, and he stepped on a landmine and died. I was first trained in Ifantry (light weapons specialist) but, later transfered to S-3 Intelligence (communications) It was a bit safer and cushier but, we had to avoid being bombed, so we had to stay on the move, for it was the enemies goal to put out all communications. We missed a few bombings by just a few feet. Thanks again and a very good write. Tony
Comment Written 12-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2009
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Tony, how horrible to lose a friend that way and to live in constant fear. And you must have been so young then. I always remember soldiers on this day - my family has had many fight in wars, including my dad in WWII. Thanks so much for your kind review. Brooke : -)
Comment from rhymelord
Ah Brooke,
If only I could have thoughts such as yours to turn into poetry. You really must have the soul of an angel to have such pure feelings.
Best Regards
Reg
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Ah Brooke,
If only I could have thoughts such as yours to turn into poetry. You really must have the soul of an angel to have such pure feelings.
Best Regards
Reg
Comment Written 12-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2009
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Thank you, Reg. What lovely, kind words to start my day. You are a dear dear man. :-) Brooke
Comment from Debbie0
This is absolutely beautiful, it brought a lump to my throat and a tear to my eye.
Very well written, every word is perfect, I would not change one single bit.
Great work
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This is absolutely beautiful, it brought a lump to my throat and a tear to my eye.
Very well written, every word is perfect, I would not change one single bit.
Great work
Comment Written 12-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2009
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Thank you so much, Debbie :-) I am moved by your most generous and gracious response to my prayerful poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Sally Carter
Impeccable imagery and the perfect metaphor for the season. Alliteration and rhyme add to the reader's enjoyment. If I were to be very picky, I was not sure about the comma after "stones". I think it could disappear, but if it stays, perhaps another is needed at the end of the first line? A great poem. Sally
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2009
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Impeccable imagery and the perfect metaphor for the season. Alliteration and rhyme add to the reader's enjoyment. If I were to be very picky, I was not sure about the comma after "stones". I think it could disappear, but if it stays, perhaps another is needed at the end of the first line? A great poem. Sally
Comment Written 12-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2009
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Thank you, Sally. I'm considering Tall trees above slate stones as the "people" to whom I'm addressing the prayer, the ones I want to drop their leaves to keep the boys warm - thus, the comma is there to show direct address that separates the person being spoken to from the request being made to that person :-) Brooke
