Comment from Nanette Mary

Excellent

Hullo Barbara.wilkey ...

As this is the first chapter of your book that I have read, I cannot fully grasp the story but, as it is well written, I enjoyed it.
There are just two small corrections needed ...

* You have - in your Background paragraph -
seceret ... which should be secret ...
* You have - and stared the hacienda ... this should be -
stared at the hacienda ...

Thank you for sharing this with us.
With love from ..... Nanette Mary.

 Comment Written 11-Nov-2009

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reply by the author on 11-Nov-2009

Thank you for catching those. I am taking care of them. I appreciate your review.

Comment from thewriter1970

Excellent

Another great chapter!

I cannot wait to see what happens between Leya and Steven. Great hanger for the end of this chapter.

Is the family name Vargas or Vegas? I thought it was Vargas in other chapters but it is Vegas in this one.

I look forward to reading more of this story!

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 Comment Written 11-Nov-2009

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reply by the author on 11-Nov-2009

It has been Vegas in all my chapters. To include Her Pretty Little Neck. Thank you for your review.

reply by thewriter1970 on 11-Nov-2009

I'm sorry... I must be getting Vargas from someone else's story. I read a lot on here.

Comment from c_lucas

Exceptional

This is very well written with excellent descritive scheme and imagery. You did a good job of returning Leya to safety. I did not see any errors.

 Comment Written 11-Nov-2009

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reply by the author on 11-Nov-2009

Thank you very much for your review, kind words, and continued support.

reply by c_lucas on 11-Nov-2009

You're welcome, Barbara. LYF, Charlie