(buttercup) haiku
3/5/3 nature haiku93 total reviews
Comment from Artasylum
and the nectar is as sweet as the lovely flower is...thanks for a nice read and a trip to nature which i don't take nearly enough...yours, diana
reply by the author on 15-May-2009
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and the nectar is as sweet as the lovely flower is...thanks for a nice read and a trip to nature which i don't take nearly enough...yours, diana
Comment Written 15-May-2009
reply by the author on 15-May-2009
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Diana, thank you and good evening :-) Brooke
Comment from Carol D Parker
This is an excellent birthday gift. It's so lovely. She's so lucky. I love "sun-soaked gold." You make me remember how we used to hold them under one another's chin to see if they were in love. I never see them anymore. Thanks for the picture of this one.
Carol
reply by the author on 15-May-2009
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This is an excellent birthday gift. It's so lovely. She's so lucky. I love "sun-soaked gold." You make me remember how we used to hold them under one another's chin to see if they were in love. I never see them anymore. Thanks for the picture of this one.
Carol
Comment Written 15-May-2009
reply by the author on 15-May-2009
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Oh, they grow around here all over - they're outside my door in the apartment complex. Thanks, Brooke :-)
Comment from jmyron
SO! This is a true Haiku, and a true Senryu. And, although I prefer the 5-7-5 format, this one is very well done. Good syllable count, good content and good Satori - Write on.
reply by the author on 15-May-2009
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SO! This is a true Haiku, and a true Senryu. And, although I prefer the 5-7-5 format, this one is very well done. Good syllable count, good content and good Satori - Write on.
Comment Written 15-May-2009
reply by the author on 15-May-2009
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Thanks so much - I prefer 5/7/5 too - 3/5/3 barely allows one any words at all!!! Brooke
Comment from S.Yocom
What a sweet haiku, Brooke. I'm sure that your line, "Gem of joy" is meant to apply to your little girl as well as to the flower. She sounds like the flower of your heart.
Sally
reply by the author on 15-May-2009
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What a sweet haiku, Brooke. I'm sure that your line, "Gem of joy" is meant to apply to your little girl as well as to the flower. She sounds like the flower of your heart.
Sally
Comment Written 15-May-2009
reply by the author on 15-May-2009
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Sally, thank you :-) She most definitely is the flower of my heart!! Brooke
Comment from boberto
Guess you didn't miss me. Not here much anymore--thought I'd drop by for a visit, and see if I had been missed. Ha.So much for that. Nice little b'day greeting. I'll take grapes in a glass instead of flowers.
Take care.
Rob
reply by the author on 16-May-2009
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Guess you didn't miss me. Not here much anymore--thought I'd drop by for a visit, and see if I had been missed. Ha.So much for that. Nice little b'day greeting. I'll take grapes in a glass instead of flowers.
Take care.
Rob
Comment Written 15-May-2009
reply by the author on 16-May-2009
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Rob, of course I miss you when you're absent :-) Thanks so much - I enjoyed reading your 3/5/3 haiku earlier :-) Brooke
Comment from Sardinesandsucker
Hello adewpearl,
The poem itself is short and 'cute' - a gentle thank you to nature for her lovely gift, both the flower and the child. Lovely tribute to your little buttercup. Peace to you and yours. Sandina
reply by the author on 15-May-2009
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Hello adewpearl,
The poem itself is short and 'cute' - a gentle thank you to nature for her lovely gift, both the flower and the child. Lovely tribute to your little buttercup. Peace to you and yours. Sandina
Comment Written 15-May-2009
reply by the author on 15-May-2009
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Sandina - thank you - cute is what I was going for :-) Brooke
Comment from adamlipert
Brooke
i mean this sincerely, you always bring a smile to my face. i love reading your poems and then the authors note. your never without reasonand your write with real meaning. i really love it. you really put Brooke on everything. thats why i love your poetry. im not gunna use words like good, beautiful, amazing, flowing. its not needed. i just see your poems and i know, something is ticking inside your head like a watch and with infinite meaning is getting some done.
kol hacovod (hebrew for much respect)
love,
adam :)
reply by the author on 15-May-2009
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Brooke
i mean this sincerely, you always bring a smile to my face. i love reading your poems and then the authors note. your never without reasonand your write with real meaning. i really love it. you really put Brooke on everything. thats why i love your poetry. im not gunna use words like good, beautiful, amazing, flowing. its not needed. i just see your poems and i know, something is ticking inside your head like a watch and with infinite meaning is getting some done.
kol hacovod (hebrew for much respect)
love,
adam :)
Comment Written 15-May-2009
reply by the author on 15-May-2009
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Adam, kol hacovod - what a lovely new term for me to learn - thank you! This is just a lovely review and I am indebted to you for such kindness. Brooke :-)
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Brooke,
you brought back tasty memories of the butter cup.
My mom told me when I put a butter cup under my chin and I saw a spot of yellow beneath it that told me I loved butter.
You haiku was so much fun to read
Gert
reply by the author on 15-May-2009
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Hello Brooke,
you brought back tasty memories of the butter cup.
My mom told me when I put a butter cup under my chin and I saw a spot of yellow beneath it that told me I loved butter.
You haiku was so much fun to read
Gert
Comment Written 15-May-2009
reply by the author on 15-May-2009
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Gert, thanks so much :-) Hope you're having a good evening. Brooke
Comment from EddieB
I am warming to this Haiku thing. My writer's group facilitator just loves them and composes them every day for contests on web sites. So, I am beginning to question her about them, learning how to interpret them, and most importantly how to get my mind out of the way so I really 'get' them.
Now, after all that dubious introduction, if the reader is still reading this review, my comments are as simple as the poem is itself. Warm, joyful, and a big smile!
reply by the author on 15-May-2009
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I am warming to this Haiku thing. My writer's group facilitator just loves them and composes them every day for contests on web sites. So, I am beginning to question her about them, learning how to interpret them, and most importantly how to get my mind out of the way so I really 'get' them.
Now, after all that dubious introduction, if the reader is still reading this review, my comments are as simple as the poem is itself. Warm, joyful, and a big smile!
Comment Written 15-May-2009
reply by the author on 15-May-2009
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Of course I'm still reading, silly! Thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from redrider6612
This one is well crafted too, though I think I liked the prior one better. I think it's so sweet that you write poetry for your daughter. I have a wonderful daughter too--though I can't write poetry like this for her. Perfect 3-5-3 form, good concluding line, great word choices. Best wishes in the contest.
Diane :)
reply by the author on 15-May-2009
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This one is well crafted too, though I think I liked the prior one better. I think it's so sweet that you write poetry for your daughter. I have a wonderful daughter too--though I can't write poetry like this for her. Perfect 3-5-3 form, good concluding line, great word choices. Best wishes in the contest.
Diane :)
Comment Written 15-May-2009
reply by the author on 15-May-2009
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Three in a row - this is pretty nice!!! Thank you. 3/5/3 is too short a form - I understand you'd like the prior one better :-) Brooke
