Comment from Winslow

Excellent

Dear Brooke,

A day in time when the sun stood still, birds trilled in the trees, bees hummed only happy tunes, all the flowers bloomed at once, and the fragrance of love burst forth.

Is this a true story?

Good luck in the contest.

Warm regards,

Winslow

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2009

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2009

This is a composite of memories of days with my ex-husband - from decades ago. Thank you for your positive review, Brooke

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

A very well written love poem. I admit that I know little of this style, but the words flowed smoothly. Very good imagery and descriptive scheme.

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2009

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2009

I had heard of the style but never tried one, so I looked it up, and it turns out it dates back to the 1300's, which makes it even older than you, my dear friend! :-D Thank you for your kind comments, Brooke :-)

reply by c_lucas on 06-Mar-2009

You're welcome, Brooke. Charlie

Comment from redrider6612

Excellent

This was really wonderful. You make this demanding poetic form seem effortless. The subject matter was sweet and well expressed, great rhymes, nice flow. Excellent job. Best wishes in the contest.

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2009

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2009

Thanks so much - it's my one and only ever triolet, so I am glad you think it turned out well. :-) Brooke

Comment from mstad55

Excellent

The rhyme scheme is ABAAABAB
The only thing that comes to mind, is Abbot and Costello,
Ay Aaabott! The poem reminds me of a time when under the bleachers on the fourth of July I first used the line, "Hey, baby do you want to start the fireworks early?"

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2009

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2009

Mike, this is a romantic triolet, a form of poetry going back to the 1300's and you're trying to make a comedy routine out of it??? LOL Have some respect for an old woman's memories of passionate days gone by when someone remembered her lips had some function beyond hiding her teeth! :-) Oh, and thanks for the positive review, Brooke :-D

reply by mstad55 on 06-Mar-2009

I know your older but, even the Abott and Costello reference would be contemporary in regard to your poem. Now you have me trying not to think of you without lips. You are very funny tonight. Are we hitting the wine and cheese tonight as we write? Mike

reply by the author on 06-Mar-2009

If you want to believe this or not, I do not partake of alcoholic beverages and never have - not even as a wild youth in the 60's. It smells bad, it tastes bad, it's expensive, and it makes people act boorish. :-) I am just a naturally funny person!

reply by mstad55 on 06-Mar-2009

That being said, and I believe you, maybe check the experation date on the milk. Okay, so enough with the silly talk, let's get serious for a minute. . . What the heck is going on with Idol? I'm watching it on tape because I had to work last night. They are ready to announce the last contestant and my program ended. Then I am reading the 12 finalists on Yahoo and find out that we have 13, What is going on? I still don't know most of the names and there are a couple I would not have picked, in fact since I didn't vote, I guess I didn't pick them. Mike

Comment from Kentucky Sweet Pea

Excellent

Great Triolet, Brooke. Flows magically, and effortlessly down the page so that the reader hardly catches the repetition. Now that is talent. Good luck in the contest!

Pen

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2009

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2009

Pen, it is my first one, so I'm glad it worked out! Thanks, Brooke :-)

Comment from earthlybeing

Excellent

Great poem. Wouldn't it be nice to be able to control time. As it is it slips by way to fast. Enjoyed the poem. Thanks, Jeanette

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2009

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2009

Jeanette, yes, it would be a handy little power! Thanks, Brooke

Comment from P1

Excellent

hi brooke, i find this format very
interesting and i have tried it and also
found it impossible. you have done it oh
so well. controling time...wouldnt it be
wonderful...i am always late. good luck
with this well written verse. hugs lynda.

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2009

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2009

Lynda, this is my first attempt at the form - it's not easy to find lines you can repeat in such a short poem and fit them in logically and still say something. It's a matter of luck, I think, at finding those two lines that bear repeating. Thank you, Brooke

Comment from Carol D Parker

Excellent

Very beautiful. You followed the rules of the form and it just made it all the more eloquent. You leave nothing to the imagination yet it is a little cryptic. Lovely.
Carol

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2009

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2009

Carol, thank you for making it even better - especially in contests, illustrations help! Brooke :-)

Comment from RADIO

Excellent

memories of romance and time gone
by. Yes this is one I think we
all could relate to, it only,
we could control the hands of time.
Very nice adewpearl.
Radio

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2009

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2009

Radio, thanks for your positive review :-) Brooke

Comment from Aussie

Excellent

And the day that you would recreate? I guess it would be the day you met your soul mate. I loved your poem it has so much meaning; we can't turn back the hands of time, but oh, the memories sublime. Thank you for sharing your heart's desire.

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2009

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2009

Well, the day I met my husband was in German class in high school, so I wouldn't go with the day we met. LOL This is more a composite of days that I was thinking of. Thanks so much for your kind review of my first triolet. Brooke :-)

reply by Aussie on 06-Mar-2009

Dearest Brooke, We all pine for our loved ones that have passed over and wish we could be with them; they watch over us and wait. Sometimes the lonliness is so great it is unbearable. But then you look at your grandson and see the love that produced the line. Your other - half is smiling too. Love and Care from Kay XX
PS: what is LOL?

reply by the author on 06-Mar-2009

LOL means laughing out loud - sometimes if something is super funny, I go with ROTFLMAO which is rolling on the floor laughing my ass off - I take it you don't email a lot as people use these email expressions all the time. :-)

reply by Aussie on 06-Mar-2009

You are so right; I do basically email within Australia and those shortening of words that you guys use - we do not have. The American language is quite different to Australian. Mind you, we have 'slang' and I guess I would call LOL slang in a sense. I find when Americans write back on reviews I have done on their work, I sometimes scratch my head wondering what the hell they are talking about - it comes out in general chit-chat (like we are doing now) not so much in work posted. Except there is one cowboy who writes in his local language - I just think about John Wayne and work my way through it! There will always be annoying little words that get us riled - yours is 'very' "I thought your work was 'very good."And my pet hate is a small i instead of starting sentences with a capital! See ya round like a rissole! Now that is slang.