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Comment from Helen Tan
SOAR! This is the word I think of when I read this poem and I find it liberating. It's a cinquain am I right?
and over barriers bound,
This gives me an image of an athlete jumping over hurdles " of life". The choice of "bound" is great - bound as in confined by "bonds". I have another sense of bound - you are "bound" for something greater beyond these "barriers bound".
I'll blaze new paths till freedom have
I like the fire of commitment in this line,"blaze new paths". You dare to be a pioneer, you are fervent in achieving your goal even if it means going to a place or doing things which no man has gone or done before.
Bravo for you! I will be there too maybe taking a different path but I guess our ultimate goal is the same to
break loose my bonds,
and SOAR!
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2008
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SOAR! This is the word I think of when I read this poem and I find it liberating. It's a cinquain am I right?
and over barriers bound,
This gives me an image of an athlete jumping over hurdles " of life". The choice of "bound" is great - bound as in confined by "bonds". I have another sense of bound - you are "bound" for something greater beyond these "barriers bound".
I'll blaze new paths till freedom have
I like the fire of commitment in this line,"blaze new paths". You dare to be a pioneer, you are fervent in achieving your goal even if it means going to a place or doing things which no man has gone or done before.
Bravo for you! I will be there too maybe taking a different path but I guess our ultimate goal is the same to
break loose my bonds,
and SOAR!
Comment Written 31-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2008
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yep, it's a cinquain, my new favorite form :-) thank you for your beautiful and enthusiastic response, Brooke
Comment from Eaglewolf
Now, this could not have come at a much better time. I've been thinking about how I feel bound by certain things and I need to break free and move on. The artwork that you put with the poem goes perfectly as well. It brings up the image of someone who's been downtrodden but suddenly they stand up, break free of what's holding them back and strive forward towards a new life. Apt for the beginning of the new year I think.
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Now, this could not have come at a much better time. I've been thinking about how I feel bound by certain things and I need to break free and move on. The artwork that you put with the poem goes perfectly as well. It brings up the image of someone who's been downtrodden but suddenly they stand up, break free of what's holding them back and strive forward towards a new life. Apt for the beginning of the new year I think.
Comment Written 31-Dec-2008
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This is the time of year that you and I and many others get introspective, it would seem - thank you for relating to my poem and letting me know about it, Brooke
Comment from EllenV
I love the idea of blazing new paths this year, whether for freedom or for self fulfillment or for service to others ... I guess bonds to break might be bad habits or unhealthy relationships .
Much food for thought in this poem. Enjoyed the read.
ellen
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2008
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I love the idea of blazing new paths this year, whether for freedom or for self fulfillment or for service to others ... I guess bonds to break might be bad habits or unhealthy relationships .
Much food for thought in this poem. Enjoyed the read.
ellen
Comment Written 31-Dec-2008
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You totally "get" what I am saying - thank you for sharing your thoughts with me, Brooke
Comment from Jendowoz
I think we all have some form of bonds to break, and not always in the literal sense. Nice concise poem, Brooke. Great picture for enhancing that feel of freedom, well done.
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I think we all have some form of bonds to break, and not always in the literal sense. Nice concise poem, Brooke. Great picture for enhancing that feel of freedom, well done.
Comment Written 31-Dec-2008
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You totally understand what I am saying! Thank you, Brooke
Comment from teafor2
adewpearl--An excellent pledge for any and
all hampered by some type of albatross. This
is sage and sound uplifting advice. teafor2
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adewpearl--An excellent pledge for any and
all hampered by some type of albatross. This
is sage and sound uplifting advice. teafor2
Comment Written 31-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2008
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and many of us have an albatross or two! thank you, Brooke
Comment from Peter@Poole
That's my brave woman. And you'll do it too; you're a fighter. This is an excellent cinquain, a form which I've already said, suits your poetic attributes so well. Peter
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That's my brave woman. And you'll do it too; you're a fighter. This is an excellent cinquain, a form which I've already said, suits your poetic attributes so well. Peter
Comment Written 31-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2008
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thank you for this most thoughtful review, Peter, which I did not expect from you today! Margaret got to a computer in Portugal to wish me a happy new year - it is lovely to have friends who do such things. Happy New Year!! Brooke
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Happy New Year, cara mia. I'm watching over you, angel rather than fairy.
Comment from Firefly54
I love that blue background with the black and white photo. "I'll blaze new paths till freedom have
I found." is a beautiful phrase in this uplifting poem
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I love that blue background with the black and white photo. "I'll blaze new paths till freedom have
I found." is a beautiful phrase in this uplifting poem
Comment Written 31-Dec-2008
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thank you for your most positive comments, Brooke
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Adewpearl ....
Under a really beautiful picture, you have presented these few words attractively but, listening to the rhythm of what you have written, this could well be a four-line verse with a 3-3-3-3 metre - which is the way I found myself reading it.
Thank you for sharing this with us.
With love from ...... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2008
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Hullo Adewpearl ....
Under a really beautiful picture, you have presented these few words attractively but, listening to the rhythm of what you have written, this could well be a four-line verse with a 3-3-3-3 metre - which is the way I found myself reading it.
Thank you for sharing this with us.
With love from ...... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 31-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2008
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Nanette Mary - thank you for your kind comments - I will look at it again in light of your comments about line breaks. Brooke
Comment from Showboat
Hi Brooke,
Wow, really liked that one.
Makes me think of horses when they're first turned out in a pasture.
Thanks for the big smile,
Hugs,
Gayle
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2008
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Hi Brooke,
Wow, really liked that one.
Makes me think of horses when they're first turned out in a pasture.
Thanks for the big smile,
Hugs,
Gayle
Comment Written 31-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2008
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Gayle, thank you - what a different perspective you've given me with your image! Brooke
Comment from mamre07
This is a wonderful expression of your faith and dreams for the future. Your belief shines through in this one. All the best!!
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This is a wonderful expression of your faith and dreams for the future. Your belief shines through in this one. All the best!!
Comment Written 31-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2008
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Thank you so very much!! Brooke
