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A modern sonnet on life's twists and turns.74 total reviews
Comment from dreaming
Rings nice and clear with a great message, would we really want to know which days are about to be good or bad. Life is truly an adventure, with its twists and turns unknown from moment to moment. I think that's nice. It also challenges us to do the right thing no matter what type of day we strike.
Love the hands, very nice, and the poem reads well aloud.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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Rings nice and clear with a great message, would we really want to know which days are about to be good or bad. Life is truly an adventure, with its twists and turns unknown from moment to moment. I think that's nice. It also challenges us to do the right thing no matter what type of day we strike.
Love the hands, very nice, and the poem reads well aloud.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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I'm glad the meaning of this poem resonates with you - thank you for your thoughtful comments. :-) Brooke
Comment from bluefly
Hi Brooke,
This is a nicely crafted and beautifully presented sonnet. I agree, knowing what's to come may sound like a gift, but would it really make life better? Probably not. Better we just complain when things go wrong. LOL.
Scott
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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Hi Brooke,
This is a nicely crafted and beautifully presented sonnet. I agree, knowing what's to come may sound like a gift, but would it really make life better? Probably not. Better we just complain when things go wrong. LOL.
Scott
Comment Written 23-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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Complaining is always my plan! Thanks so much for a thoughtful and humorous review. :-) Brooke
Comment from honeytree
The hands sketch really tells us about life.
No-one can tell when one is to be born or die.
I really wouldn't want to know when I was to die.
I liked this read very much.
Honeytree.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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The hands sketch really tells us about life.
No-one can tell when one is to be born or die.
I really wouldn't want to know when I was to die.
I liked this read very much.
Honeytree.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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I'm glad the meaning of the poem resonated with you. Thank you! Brooke :-)
Comment from jshep
So many good questions asked in this poem. Also, I could hide,emerge, project, and engage were excellent word choices to your thoughts. I guess I agree, all in all, we don't really want to know. Where would the challenge be then? Great thought provoker. No changes to recommend and the form and flow worked very well. Very nicely done. Joyce
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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So many good questions asked in this poem. Also, I could hide,emerge, project, and engage were excellent word choices to your thoughts. I guess I agree, all in all, we don't really want to know. Where would the challenge be then? Great thought provoker. No changes to recommend and the form and flow worked very well. Very nicely done. Joyce
Comment Written 23-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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Joyce, thanks so much for your kind review and thoughts. Peace, Brooke
Comment from brightside1099
A scale functions on the premise that when the weight on either side is the same, it will balance. Life is like that. To reach that 'balance' in our lives, we need to have equal parts of joy and disappointment. If we knew everything in advance, who would ever choose disappointment? Life would be out of balance.
Nice work. No problems. You make me think.
BB
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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A scale functions on the premise that when the weight on either side is the same, it will balance. Life is like that. To reach that 'balance' in our lives, we need to have equal parts of joy and disappointment. If we knew everything in advance, who would ever choose disappointment? Life would be out of balance.
Nice work. No problems. You make me think.
BB
Comment Written 23-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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Glad this was thought-provoking - thank you for your perceptive comments. Peace, Brooke :-)
Comment from Fish
Ha! Yes, there are guarantees in life! For instance,
these endangered salamander skins dipped in snail sauce,
washed down with a bottle of delicious pinot noir.
That's guaranteed! Unless, of course, I have a sudden
heart attack or stroke or someone detonates a dirty-
bomb within ten miles or so. Considering there's
scarcely a breeze today, my chances are greatly
improved with that latter possibility. Though, I should
pull out the ole cracked crystal ball and take a look,
just in case.
No problem! The screen lit up with one word: guaranteed!
For a moment there, you scared the shit out of me!
I mean, I thought I might not be in control of my own destiny. Please don't do that again, or I'll have to
contact the site administrator.
Yours, Fish
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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Ha! Yes, there are guarantees in life! For instance,
these endangered salamander skins dipped in snail sauce,
washed down with a bottle of delicious pinot noir.
That's guaranteed! Unless, of course, I have a sudden
heart attack or stroke or someone detonates a dirty-
bomb within ten miles or so. Considering there's
scarcely a breeze today, my chances are greatly
improved with that latter possibility. Though, I should
pull out the ole cracked crystal ball and take a look,
just in case.
No problem! The screen lit up with one word: guaranteed!
For a moment there, you scared the shit out of me!
I mean, I thought I might not be in control of my own destiny. Please don't do that again, or I'll have to
contact the site administrator.
Yours, Fish
Comment Written 23-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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I get to line two and I start grinning - it must be Fish!!!
You honestly do just delight the hell out of me - I had better not sound too forward or you'll contact the site administrator to report I'm a stalker, and then I might come after you with a dirty bomb in the oversized bag I always carry, which nobody would suspect because it has blown up photos of my children when toddlers on it :-) I do love you, Fish. Peace, Brooke :-)
Comment from eraserlynch
Lovely poem here my friend. I wish it was so easy as asking the crystal ball what is going to happen!! I like my fairy godmother personally!! tee - hee!! Here's praying for a better world in 2009 for all.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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Lovely poem here my friend. I wish it was so easy as asking the crystal ball what is going to happen!! I like my fairy godmother personally!! tee - hee!! Here's praying for a better world in 2009 for all.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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Here's to fairy godmothers and world peace! :-) Brooke
Comment from Signaler
Brooke, This sonnet is written so well, I accepted it as an Shaksperian Sonnet. Fooled me, but not of the content. I really enjoyed the reasoning in this special sonnet. Bravo!
Angels, Signaler
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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Brooke, This sonnet is written so well, I accepted it as an Shaksperian Sonnet. Fooled me, but not of the content. I really enjoyed the reasoning in this special sonnet. Bravo!
Angels, Signaler
Comment Written 23-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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you are most kind - I don't care what kind of sonnet people call it of if they call it a sonnet at all - I just write poetry :-) thank you! Brooke
Comment from starman
Great last line and a thoughtful look at the ebb and flow of life and how we react to it. I loved your choice of negative and positive words. They blended so well.
:)s
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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Great last line and a thoughtful look at the ebb and flow of life and how we react to it. I loved your choice of negative and positive words. They blended so well.
:)s
Comment Written 23-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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thank you for a perceptive analysis and a kind rating - Peace, Brooke :-)
Comment from mushroom
nothing is certain in this life, i do believe in fate though and i think when you say if only we could know what lies ahead you speak for all of us, i suppose there has to be some surprises left in life.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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nothing is certain in this life, i do believe in fate though and i think when you say if only we could know what lies ahead you speak for all of us, i suppose there has to be some surprises left in life.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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yes, without surprises, it pretty much all evens out to blandness - thank you for your review :-) Brooke
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you're welcome
