Mom's Magic Vision
Guess what I just discovered?40 total reviews
Comment from Minglement
I love this poem form, but have never attempted it. You've used it well in this humorous Loop poem contest entry. it was a fun read, something all moms can probably relatr to lol. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2020
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I love this poem form, but have never attempted it. You've used it well in this humorous Loop poem contest entry. it was a fun read, something all moms can probably relatr to lol. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2020
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Loops are usually a pain in my a**, Marcia - I've skipped contests out of frustration in trying to 'make it work' and not sound 'forced' (not even kidding)! ;) Glad you enjoyed this one, my lady -- take care this week! ;) Yvette
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That's why I skip them lol. Well done.
Comment from Debbie Pope
Amazing, Yvette. I have given up on writing loop poems. I find them impossible. You have used that silly format to your advantage. It's almost like there are two of you talking to each other, one repeating the other's last word. Maybe it's your two eyes talking to each other.
Seriously, you have created a witty slice of your life in isolation. It's delightful. I hope your migraine has gone for good.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2020
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Amazing, Yvette. I have given up on writing loop poems. I find them impossible. You have used that silly format to your advantage. It's almost like there are two of you talking to each other, one repeating the other's last word. Maybe it's your two eyes talking to each other.
Seriously, you have created a witty slice of your life in isolation. It's delightful. I hope your migraine has gone for good.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2020
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Oh, MQ, this is such a wonderful surprise - you've put a smile on my face in the rain!! ;) :) You know, usually loops are my nemesis and there have been contests I've skipped out of frustration in trying to make it sound 'unforced', but this one just 'happened' after I cleaned up the kitchen that night -- think the Lord knew I needed something to just 'go smoothly' without questions or queries and here it is! I didn't have a lot of time and I had determined that if it was in the least starting to annoy me, I'd quit - soooo... here it is!! ;) :) And I couldn't pass up the owl when I went looking for a pic - love owls to start with and he's so 'bright and bold' ... just the way I like things!! ;) Hope all's well - you take care down there this week! ;) Yvette
Comment from Precious Owuamalam
Superb and wonderful! A very interesting piece of poetry, beautified with a grand cover image. Just beautiful! You've as well wonderfully executed within the laid out rules for the contest.
However, I was just wondering, "Say the truth" might just be a better replacement for "Say truth," following the context with which the former was used. Just a suggestion though.
My very best wishes in the contest. Cheers!
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2020
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Superb and wonderful! A very interesting piece of poetry, beautified with a grand cover image. Just beautiful! You've as well wonderfully executed within the laid out rules for the contest.
However, I was just wondering, "Say the truth" might just be a better replacement for "Say truth," following the context with which the former was used. Just a suggestion though.
My very best wishes in the contest. Cheers!
Comment Written 16-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2020
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Thanx for your review and your suggestion, Precious, but I'm thinking I'll leave it as is because it fits the meter correctly... ;) But thanx so much for the second set of eyes - always welcome! Thanx for stopping by on this one and be sure to drop in again! ;) Take care this week... ;) Yvette ;)
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Wow, quite a nice poem, tonight you are like Merlin, take a little bit of this and mixed up with a little bit of that, and here you go, you got yourself a lovely rhyming loop:) "Saw other folks just pass on by -
By that fifteenth time 'twas clear...
Clear your mind 'cause here's the fact:
Fact is... I've magic sight, my dear", thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2020
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Wow, quite a nice poem, tonight you are like Merlin, take a little bit of this and mixed up with a little bit of that, and here you go, you got yourself a lovely rhyming loop:) "Saw other folks just pass on by -
By that fifteenth time 'twas clear...
Clear your mind 'cause here's the fact:
Fact is... I've magic sight, my dear", thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest
Comment Written 16-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2020
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Wow - thanx for the compliments, Iza - glad you enjoyed! ;) You get used to 'nobody' around except the husband that leaves things, but now... lol! :) :) Thanx so much, my lady - have a wonderful week ahead! ;) Yvette
Comment from Mrs. KT
I declare this Loop Poem the ultimate winner!
What a delight in form and content, Yvette!
Can you hear my laughter or see my smile!
It's a "hoot" of a poetic delight!
Flows so well - and believe me, the content is "spot on!"
Thank you for sharing!
Best Wishes!
diane
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2020
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I declare this Loop Poem the ultimate winner!
What a delight in form and content, Yvette!
Can you hear my laughter or see my smile!
It's a "hoot" of a poetic delight!
Flows so well - and believe me, the content is "spot on!"
Thank you for sharing!
Best Wishes!
diane
Comment Written 16-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2020
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LOL! Yeah, not gonna 'hold my breath', Beautiful Friend, but it is what it is... I'm so glad you enjoyed this, Diane - usually loops are my nemesis and there have been contests I've skipped out of frustration in trying to make it sound 'unforced', but this one just 'happened' after I cleaned up the kitchen that night -- think the Lord knew I needed something to just 'go smoothly' without questions or queries and here it is! I didn't have a lot of time and I had determined that if it was in the least starting to annoy me, I'd quit - soooo... here it is!! ;) :) And I couldn't pass up the owl when I went looking for a pic - love owls to start with and he's so 'bright and bold' ... just the way I like things!! ;) Hope all's well - you take care this week! ;) Yvette
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
This is a great loop poem, Yvette! Now who is the mom with the magic vision -- you, your mother, or some imaginary mom?
I love the artwork; that owl is awesome. I have somehow missed the message in your Note, and wouldn't mind a bit of explanation on that.
Writing a meaningful loop poem that rhymes is a lovely accomplishment!
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2020
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This is a great loop poem, Yvette! Now who is the mom with the magic vision -- you, your mother, or some imaginary mom?
I love the artwork; that owl is awesome. I have somehow missed the message in your Note, and wouldn't mind a bit of explanation on that.
Writing a meaningful loop poem that rhymes is a lovely accomplishment!
Comment Written 16-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2020
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LOL - that would be me, my lady!! ;) You get used to 'nobody' around except the husband that leaves things, but now... lol! :) :) Thanx so much for the review - have a wonderful week ahead! ;) Yvette
Comment from susand3022
Hi BLOTS!!! Sounds like somebody there has 20/20 vision and wishes she had the hindsight to have rented herself a deluxe suite at the local Hilton the day before the big shutdown... lol "Oh, I'll be here for about a week..." she said with a grin and her husbands AmEx... knowing the kids would all be home shortly and she wouldn't be allowed out after tomorrow. ;) Now that sounds like a good story! LOL
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2020
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Hi BLOTS!!! Sounds like somebody there has 20/20 vision and wishes she had the hindsight to have rented herself a deluxe suite at the local Hilton the day before the big shutdown... lol "Oh, I'll be here for about a week..." she said with a grin and her husbands AmEx... knowing the kids would all be home shortly and she wouldn't be allowed out after tomorrow. ;) Now that sounds like a good story! LOL
Comment Written 16-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2020
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LOL!! Yes, I'd like a do-over, please... ;) :) :) You get used to 'nobody' around except the husband that leaves things, but now... ugh! :) :) It's mantra you repeat in your head: I do love them, I do love them... lol! ;) Take care up there, BLOTN!! :) Yvette
Comment from lyenochka
So, as some moms do you have "eyes in the back of your head?" Or is it that your order-preserving mind helps you see everything that is out of place? Excellent loop poem form! Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2020
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So, as some moms do you have "eyes in the back of your head?" Or is it that your order-preserving mind helps you see everything that is out of place? Excellent loop poem form! Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 16-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2020
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Both! ;) You get used to 'nobody' around except the husband that leaves things, but now... lol! :) :) Thanx so much, Helen - have a wonderful week ahead! ;) Yvette
Comment from Janetsue
I LOVE this picture! You have written a super poem as its companion giving the reader a lot to ponder over. Way back in the olden days, we used to have fifteen acres of woods behind our house. It was a magic place with so many critters...of course, night owls, as well. I enjoyed this so much, Yvette!
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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2020
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I LOVE this picture! You have written a super poem as its companion giving the reader a lot to ponder over. Way back in the olden days, we used to have fifteen acres of woods behind our house. It was a magic place with so many critters...of course, night owls, as well. I enjoyed this so much, Yvette!
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Comment Written 16-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2020
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Thanx so much for your review, Janet -- there have been a few people that say that cannot see the pic... sad, he's such a cool owl!! ;) Take care! :) Yvette
Comment from BeasPeas
Sometimes we see too much and at other times, not enough. Image is striking. I'm interpreting this poem to reflect how we notice things when in close proximity, perhaps due to quarantine. A very good loop poem. The repeating word is subtle when beginning the new line. Marilyn
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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2020
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Sometimes we see too much and at other times, not enough. Image is striking. I'm interpreting this poem to reflect how we notice things when in close proximity, perhaps due to quarantine. A very good loop poem. The repeating word is subtle when beginning the new line. Marilyn
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Comment Written 16-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2020
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You get used to 'nobody' around except the husband that leaves things, but now... lol! :) :) Thanx so much, Marilyn - have a wonderful week ahead! ;) Yvette
