On Waves of Deepest Blue...
Cinquain: Second place winner...47 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
This is a simple and short poem of love and mourning. It seems like things have changed in a relationship. Either a breakup or a death.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing
Joan
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
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This is a simple and short poem of love and mourning. It seems like things have changed in a relationship. Either a breakup or a death.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 23-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
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Hello Joan!
Thank you for your excellent rating and review!
So pleased you stopped by!
diane
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No problem, Diane. Enjoy your day.
Joan
Comment from The Death
You've used this form effectively to convey the picture of a beautiful night by the sea. One can easily relate to the thoughts here. The ending makes it more personal and appealing. Nice presentation, too. Good luck!
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
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You've used this form effectively to convey the picture of a beautiful night by the sea. One can easily relate to the thoughts here. The ending makes it more personal and appealing. Nice presentation, too. Good luck!
Comment Written 23-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
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Hello Friend,
Thank you for stopping by and your excellent rating and review!
diane
Comment from RGstar
"was us"
Beautiful. A beautiful diversion, yet nicely joined in both theme and vision.
A calming write.
Have a great day.
RGstar
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
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"was us"
Beautiful. A beautiful diversion, yet nicely joined in both theme and vision.
A calming write.
Have a great day.
RGstar
Comment Written 23-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
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Hello Friend,
Thank you for your excellent rating and thoughtful review.
I enjoyed penning this piece...
diane
Comment from Lulube
A well thought out poem being of a strict style with not many lines. Tenderness is felt with definite claim for a solution.
good penning
lulube
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
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A well thought out poem being of a strict style with not many lines. Tenderness is felt with definite claim for a solution.
good penning
lulube
Comment Written 23-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
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Hello Lulube,
So pleased you stopped by!
Thank you for your excellent rating and thoughtful review!
diane
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welcome
lulube
Comment from Spitfire
Oh to be young and in love again. Actually this expresses the way I still feel about hubby after fifty-one years of marriage and his declining memory. Excellent line breaks. Assonance with deep and need; alliteration with memory's and make. Consonance with 's' sound.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
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Oh to be young and in love again. Actually this expresses the way I still feel about hubby after fifty-one years of marriage and his declining memory. Excellent line breaks. Assonance with deep and need; alliteration with memory's and make. Consonance with 's' sound.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
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Hello Spitfire!
To be "old" and still in love is pretty neat, too! :)
Thank you for your excellent rating and review!
diane
Comment from meeshu
beautifully written, KT. an even flow and perfectly suited to cinquain formed poetry. lovely sentiment in emotional verse..............meeshu
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
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beautifully written, KT. an even flow and perfectly suited to cinquain formed poetry. lovely sentiment in emotional verse..............meeshu
Comment Written 22-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
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Hello meeshu!
I enjoyed penning this piece...
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review!
diane
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"On Waves of Deepest Blue.....", is short, succinct and very much to the point. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. You KEEP WRITING and I'll KEEP READING. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
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"On Waves of Deepest Blue.....", is short, succinct and very much to the point. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. You KEEP WRITING and I'll KEEP READING. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
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Hello Duchess!
So pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review!
diane
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Hello diane!
You're very welcome.
Take care, best wishes and God bless you,
the Duchess
Comment from ameen786
Cinquain is my favorite form to write and you did great in penning this meaningful poem in simple down to earth vocabulary; the 'Us' finish says it all about any relationship; thanks for sharing and good luck!
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
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Cinquain is my favorite form to write and you did great in penning this meaningful poem in simple down to earth vocabulary; the 'Us' finish says it all about any relationship; thanks for sharing and good luck!
Comment Written 22-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
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Hello ameen!
So pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review!
diane
Comment from Marge Setzer
First, congratulations on your your honor as Recognized Writer of the Month. I have always enjoyed your work. As for the poem above, I found it very moving, in fact, the ending took my breath away. I looked up cinquain and found there are several variations. I couldn't find one that matched yours, but this does have five lines and the syllables per line were 2,4,5, 7,2. Whatever the variation, I found the poem a realistic rendering of loss, an epiphany, and acceptance. I'm not sure I sense the hope that you described in your introductory sentence. Marge
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2018
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First, congratulations on your your honor as Recognized Writer of the Month. I have always enjoyed your work. As for the poem above, I found it very moving, in fact, the ending took my breath away. I looked up cinquain and found there are several variations. I couldn't find one that matched yours, but this does have five lines and the syllables per line were 2,4,5, 7,2. Whatever the variation, I found the poem a realistic rendering of loss, an epiphany, and acceptance. I'm not sure I sense the hope that you described in your introductory sentence. Marge
Comment Written 22-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2018
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Hello Marge,
I am always so honored when you stop by. This is a traditional cinquain: 2/4/6/8/2
A/drift =2
on/waves/deep/with = 4
mem/or/y's cher/ished /nights = 6
when/all/life/need/ed/to/make/sense =8
was/us = 2
Thank you for your excellent rating and thoughtful review. Also, the Recognized Writer recognition remains surreal. I was, and still am, deeply humbled by the recognition.
Thank you again!
diane
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Thanks for the reply. My syllable count was off. So embarrassed! Marge
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No worries, Marge!
Keeps me on my toes!
:)
diane
Comment from lyenochka
Ooooh. I do like the feeling this describes. Memories can send us adrift in our minds. It's a positive realization that just the "us" relationship is all that was needed to figure life out.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
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Ooooh. I do like the feeling this describes. Memories can send us adrift in our minds. It's a positive realization that just the "us" relationship is all that was needed to figure life out.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
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Hello Friend,
So pleased my offering resonates with you!
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review!
diane