Huginn and Muninn
A Shakespearean Sonnet for the contest34 total reviews
Comment from DR DIP
What a great write Tony I may have said this before but you have a wonderful way with words. Making the ravens, Huginn and Muninn to represent Memory and wisdom Is very well done indeed. Thank you for sharing this great poem
A well deserved 6
dip
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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What a great write Tony I may have said this before but you have a wonderful way with words. Making the ravens, Huginn and Muninn to represent Memory and wisdom Is very well done indeed. Thank you for sharing this great poem
A well deserved 6
dip
Comment Written 15-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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Thanks, Dip. Kind words and six stars! Very much appreciated. I'm reading a new edition of the Norse myths at the moment and was fascinated by the concept of the two ravens on Odin's shoulder. I immediately thought how sad that we mere mortals never seem to have them land on us at the same time!
Best wishes, Tony
Comment from rama devi
This is deep, unique and impressively penned. Great theme and substance.
Great presentation too.
Masterful meter and rhyming and phonetics (I'll let my ix stars applaud all those phonetics without listing them).
A couple of minor suggestions...
NOTES
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When I was young(,) he whispered in my ear,(;)
Love the rhymes here (note one nit):
I knew it all, and with that knowledge(,) built
a citadel of great magnificence
upon the bones of others, without guilt,
whilst barely understanding my offence.
Outstanding volta. Eloquent and masterful---especially the C and s sounds:
When wisdom came, he cocked his wise old head
and settled on my shoulder with a caw
that raised a spectral phalanx of the dead,
which should have brought my conscience to the fore,
Pitch perfect closing note in the couplet... and well voiced.
LOVED READING THIS ALOUD!
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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This is deep, unique and impressively penned. Great theme and substance.
Great presentation too.
Masterful meter and rhyming and phonetics (I'll let my ix stars applaud all those phonetics without listing them).
A couple of minor suggestions...
NOTES
*
When I was young(,) he whispered in my ear,(;)
Love the rhymes here (note one nit):
I knew it all, and with that knowledge(,) built
a citadel of great magnificence
upon the bones of others, without guilt,
whilst barely understanding my offence.
Outstanding volta. Eloquent and masterful---especially the C and s sounds:
When wisdom came, he cocked his wise old head
and settled on my shoulder with a caw
that raised a spectral phalanx of the dead,
which should have brought my conscience to the fore,
Pitch perfect closing note in the couplet... and well voiced.
LOVED READING THIS ALOUD!
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 15-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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Thanks, RD! Those commas have all wriggled into their right places now! Delighted that you thought this worth six stars. Great validation! Best wishes, Tony
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Comment from Asem.inspirations
Good morning fawcus: This is a great mythological poem. I know that I could always depend on you to share your wisdom and intellect in your posts. I never heard of these two ravens and I used to read a lot of mythology. Thank you for sharing this post.
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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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Good morning fawcus: This is a great mythological poem. I know that I could always depend on you to share your wisdom and intellect in your posts. I never heard of these two ravens and I used to read a lot of mythology. Thank you for sharing this post.
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Comment Written 15-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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Thanks, Tier. Kind words and very much appreciated. I'm reading a new edition of the Norse myths at the moment and was fascinated by the concept of the two ravens on Odin's shoulder. I immediately thought how sad that we mere mortals never seem to have them land on us at the same time!
Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Sonnet and interesting mythology about memory and wisdom. When we grow older we seem to gain wisdom but the memory.seems to fly away.
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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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A very well-written Sonnet and interesting mythology about memory and wisdom. When we grow older we seem to gain wisdom but the memory.seems to fly away.
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Comment Written 15-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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Thanks, Sandra. Kind words and much appreciated. I'm reading a new edition of the Norse myths at the moment and was fascinated by the concept of the two ravens on Odin's shoulder. I immediately thought how sad that we mere mortals never seem to have them land on us at the same time!
Best wishes, Tony
