Seeing Behind the Eyes
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "The Volunteer"A book of poems on people.
56 total reviews
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
I like these observational poems that you create.
The free verse nature allows for a more descriptive quality I think. These are thought provoking and more about perception than fact.
Nice one
GMG
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
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Hi there,
I like these observational poems that you create.
The free verse nature allows for a more descriptive quality I think. These are thought provoking and more about perception than fact.
Nice one
GMG
Comment Written 05-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
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Thank you GMG:)
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Thank you GMG:)
Comment from Janet7053
this free verse is thought provoking in that you have fully described her. The guide is easily in my mind's eye. Love this phrase in her wrinkled long time smoker's skin. - very vivid.
Did you mean "bobcat's back end..."
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
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this free verse is thought provoking in that you have fully described her. The guide is easily in my mind's eye. Love this phrase in her wrinkled long time smoker's skin. - very vivid.
Did you mean "bobcat's back end..."
Comment Written 05-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
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Yes, back end, thanks so much!
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Yes, back end, thanks so much!
Comment from watergirl
This is an interesting poem that conveys the concern about the snake and all things wild. You write of people well, easily portraying something about them and we see them in the mind's eye. A good poem, good luck with it.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2015
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This is an interesting poem that conveys the concern about the snake and all things wild. You write of people well, easily portraying something about them and we see them in the mind's eye. A good poem, good luck with it.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2015
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thank you:)
Comment from judester
I like your style. You create a single snapshot of simple yet interesting moments in your life and put them into free verse poems. The woman you describe comes to life in just a few words. I guess that is what writing is about, cheers judester
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2015
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I like your style. You create a single snapshot of simple yet interesting moments in your life and put them into free verse poems. The woman you describe comes to life in just a few words. I guess that is what writing is about, cheers judester
Comment Written 04-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2015
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thanks:)
Comment from happykat4
Very good free verse. It tells a story, brings the adventure to the reader, allows the reader to see the observations of the writer and leaves us almost knowing this women. I also read you notes and I am very happy you did not get close where the snake felt threaten. Thanks for sharing. Kat
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2015
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Very good free verse. It tells a story, brings the adventure to the reader, allows the reader to see the observations of the writer and leaves us almost knowing this women. I also read you notes and I am very happy you did not get close where the snake felt threaten. Thanks for sharing. Kat
Comment Written 04-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2015
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thanks kat:)
Comment from petalangela
The write was a lovely look into people and places
and the amount information we can glean on faces
I am from Africa where snakes are prolific and wilderness areas not hard to find.
I know the feeling of the that woman I am one unable to leave my home. It's terrible to age
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2015
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The write was a lovely look into people and places
and the amount information we can glean on faces
I am from Africa where snakes are prolific and wilderness areas not hard to find.
I know the feeling of the that woman I am one unable to leave my home. It's terrible to age
Comment Written 04-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2015
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thanks for the great review:)
Comment from Lovinia
Hi Teresa
You've captured your subject extremely well ... great observations in your descriptions. Nice of you to relay some of your adventure to the dear lady. So sad when old age takes away some of our passions. Sounds like she enjoyed her hiking ... now not strong enough. At least she can revisit her memories with the tales of young hikers and keeps her hand in with volunteering.
I've seen the average size rattle snake on various wild-life documentaries. Just last week I saw a huge one ... I had no idea they grew that large. We don't have them in Australia ... though we have our share of venomous snakes. Yikes. Sorry you didn't get the shot you would have liked ... creatures of the wild, so evasive.
I'v really enjoyed your free verse. excellent flow created by use of effective enjambment. You've captured the essence of your hiking experience relating to this elderly woman. I enjoyed your use of alliteration, assonance and consonance throughout .. gave a melodic lilt to the reading. Well done. Hugs - Lovi xoxo
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2015
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Hi Teresa
You've captured your subject extremely well ... great observations in your descriptions. Nice of you to relay some of your adventure to the dear lady. So sad when old age takes away some of our passions. Sounds like she enjoyed her hiking ... now not strong enough. At least she can revisit her memories with the tales of young hikers and keeps her hand in with volunteering.
I've seen the average size rattle snake on various wild-life documentaries. Just last week I saw a huge one ... I had no idea they grew that large. We don't have them in Australia ... though we have our share of venomous snakes. Yikes. Sorry you didn't get the shot you would have liked ... creatures of the wild, so evasive.
I'v really enjoyed your free verse. excellent flow created by use of effective enjambment. You've captured the essence of your hiking experience relating to this elderly woman. I enjoyed your use of alliteration, assonance and consonance throughout .. gave a melodic lilt to the reading. Well done. Hugs - Lovi xoxo
Comment Written 04-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2015
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thanks Lovi for the most wonderful review:)
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My pleasure ... I enjoyed the read. ;]
Comment from patcelaw
Teresa this is an interesting poem about the hike. If I were to come close to a rattle snake of any size I would be backing away. I am glad you weren't hurt. Patricia
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2015
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Teresa this is an interesting poem about the hike. If I were to come close to a rattle snake of any size I would be backing away. I am glad you weren't hurt. Patricia
Comment Written 04-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2015
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thank you Patricia:)
Comment from JourneyHolm
Nice poem. It had some lovely imagery that helped define the characters and wild scene. I enjoyed the lady spoken of throughout the poem. She seems like a little spitfire, which I adore. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2015
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Nice poem. It had some lovely imagery that helped define the characters and wild scene. I enjoyed the lady spoken of throughout the poem. She seems like a little spitfire, which I adore. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2015
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thank you. spitfire is a good term for her. I like spitfires too:)
Comment from angel123
I enjoyed reading your poem the Volunteer. It was interesting and it held my attention. It flows with some humor and I'm glad you had fun on your vacation. I know it was scary seeing a huge snake. Thank you for providing your author notes.
Angel123
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2015
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I enjoyed reading your poem the Volunteer. It was interesting and it held my attention. It flows with some humor and I'm glad you had fun on your vacation. I know it was scary seeing a huge snake. Thank you for providing your author notes.
Angel123
Comment Written 04-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2015
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thank you angel:)
