Twelve Little Grains of Sparkly Sand
counting rhyme in 8/6/8/6 meter119 total reviews
Comment from butterfly4265
The personification of the grains of sand is very cute and clever. As always, the rhyming and flow are excellent. As always the adorable photograph of your grandson is just the icing on the cake. Very well done, and much enjoyed! Thank you so much for sharing.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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The personification of the grains of sand is very cute and clever. As always, the rhyming and flow are excellent. As always the adorable photograph of your grandson is just the icing on the cake. Very well done, and much enjoyed! Thank you so much for sharing.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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butterfly, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from GeraldS
This was thoughtfully written, and I liked the little twist at the end. I think this is the best of the 'counting' poems you've posted recently. And as always, the piece was nicely presented with an assist from Sawyer.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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This was thoughtfully written, and I liked the little twist at the end. I think this is the best of the 'counting' poems you've posted recently. And as always, the piece was nicely presented with an assist from Sawyer.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Gerald, thank you so much :-) I truly appreciate your generous and gracious review :-) Brooke
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Brooke,
Twelve Little Grains of Sparkly Sand - The poem has been crafted very beautifully!
Wording is simple having smooth and captivating flow from top to bottom with lovely rhyming scheme and lively imagery.
Such a theme in such a musical style - really deserves to be honored with SIX STARS!
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Hello Brooke,
Twelve Little Grains of Sparkly Sand - The poem has been crafted very beautifully!
Wording is simple having smooth and captivating flow from top to bottom with lovely rhyming scheme and lively imagery.
Such a theme in such a musical style - really deserves to be honored with SIX STARS!
Comment Written 24-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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RP, thank you so much, my generous friend :-) Brooke
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Yet another of your terrific counting poems. You're on a roll! I love how Sawyer is building a huge moat around a tiny little castle. When you think about it though, I guess it's wise to have the moat in place BEFORE finishing the castle. It's a vulnerable baby right now. :)
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Yet another of your terrific counting poems. You're on a roll! I love how Sawyer is building a huge moat around a tiny little castle. When you think about it though, I guess it's wise to have the moat in place BEFORE finishing the castle. It's a vulnerable baby right now. :)
Comment Written 24-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Thanks so much, Phyllis - I'm sure he'll move on to more impressive castles as he grows older - he was only two in this picture LOL Brooke
Comment from chasennov
counting rhyme in 8/6/8/6 meter Twelve Little Grains of Sparkly Sand.' Phew! I'm dead tired counting all the grains of sand on the beach. I bet Sawyer was having a problem with it as well. Lovely poem, Brooke. Well done.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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counting rhyme in 8/6/8/6 meter Twelve Little Grains of Sparkly Sand.' Phew! I'm dead tired counting all the grains of sand on the beach. I bet Sawyer was having a problem with it as well. Lovely poem, Brooke. Well done.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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chasennov, thanks so much :-) Brooke
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You are most welcome, Brooke.
Comment from nomi338
Lose in order to win. Stop and start all over again. The beauty of surviving loss is that there is so much appreciation afterwards. I love how your excellent poems entertain and teach at the same time. Great work my friend.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Lose in order to win. Stop and start all over again. The beauty of surviving loss is that there is so much appreciation afterwards. I love how your excellent poems entertain and teach at the same time. Great work my friend.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Thank you so much, nomi :-) Brooke
Comment from persevere
Another delightful read! How creative you are to choose diminutive grains of sand as your theme.You have cleverly covered a multitude of beach activities from a webbed footed seagull to a child buried up to his neck in sand.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Another delightful read! How creative you are to choose diminutive grains of sand as your theme.You have cleverly covered a multitude of beach activities from a webbed footed seagull to a child buried up to his neck in sand.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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persevere, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Charlene0513
To adewpearl,
A sweet little poem addressing the life of a grain of sand.
Very explicit in their dubious disappearances.
Good use of alliteration throughout and excellent cadence.
I truly enjoyed your ending as it seemed to sneak up on you.
Charlene
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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To adewpearl,
A sweet little poem addressing the life of a grain of sand.
Very explicit in their dubious disappearances.
Good use of alliteration throughout and excellent cadence.
I truly enjoyed your ending as it seemed to sneak up on you.
Charlene
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Charlene, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from bob cullen
I have just one complaint. I enjoyed this so much I just wish there had been twenty grains of sand.
How does one address the Poet Laureate? Brooke I am no longer amzed by your skill, I just sit back and admire it.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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I have just one complaint. I enjoyed this so much I just wish there had been twenty grains of sand.
How does one address the Poet Laureate? Brooke I am no longer amzed by your skill, I just sit back and admire it.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Thank you so very much, Bob - you are most gracious and generous :-) Brooke
Comment from Trybuck
Another well written count down
that turns a little frown
Into a great big smile
Adewpearl style
I reckon when you get to twenty, they'll depart by two's
Well done, Buck
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Another well written count down
that turns a little frown
Into a great big smile
Adewpearl style
I reckon when you get to twenty, they'll depart by two's
Well done, Buck
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Thank you, Buck, for your poetry and your generous sixth star :-) Brooke
