That summer
Sonnet47 total reviews
Comment from Dawn Munro
I read this for the pure pleasure of it - a perfect sonnet, in my humble opinion, and although I seldom follow form, this is one of my favorites. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2014
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I read this for the pure pleasure of it - a perfect sonnet, in my humble opinion, and although I seldom follow form, this is one of my favorites. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2014
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Thanks, Dawn - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
Comment from nancy_e_davis
What a lovely loving sonnet telling of a summer love. A very well written entry for the contest. It adheres to all the requirement of a sonnet with the turn in the last stanza and the couplet summery. Well done my friend. Good luck xx Nancy
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2014
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What a lovely loving sonnet telling of a summer love. A very well written entry for the contest. It adheres to all the requirement of a sonnet with the turn in the last stanza and the couplet summery. Well done my friend. Good luck xx Nancy
Comment Written 10-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2014
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Thanks, Nancy!
Steve
Comment from Neonewman
This is a fantastic piece of artwork above to compliment this wonderfully crafted Sonnet you have delivered. I feel you will do well in the contest with this one. God bless!
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2014
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This is a fantastic piece of artwork above to compliment this wonderfully crafted Sonnet you have delivered. I feel you will do well in the contest with this one. God bless!
Comment Written 10-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2014
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Thank you!
Steve
Comment from Wendyanne
Hi Steve this is a truly lovely well written piece of poetry in sonnet style. You have used some beautiful examples of imagery such as We roamed the sunburnt hillsides hand in hand;
It's soooo romantic. Good luck.
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Hi Steve this is a truly lovely well written piece of poetry in sonnet style. You have used some beautiful examples of imagery such as We roamed the sunburnt hillsides hand in hand;
It's soooo romantic. Good luck.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2014
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Thank you - what's a sonnet for if not a bit of mushy romance?
Steve
Comment from Ridley Williams
Hi Steve,
Ah, those summer romances. But, as you say, all things in life are bound to a season, love being not the least. You did a nice job establishing the setting and emotion in this piece.
Everything in life has a beginning and an ending. Our memories hold the key to immortality, (key to immortality, hey, that's not bad...I may have to do something with that, lol), but still, loneliness is a frigged bedfellow and little comfort when the winds of pain assail.
Solid rhyme and meter...looks tight.
Nice job with this entry...hope you've penned a winner! Bill
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2014
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Hi Steve,
Ah, those summer romances. But, as you say, all things in life are bound to a season, love being not the least. You did a nice job establishing the setting and emotion in this piece.
Everything in life has a beginning and an ending. Our memories hold the key to immortality, (key to immortality, hey, that's not bad...I may have to do something with that, lol), but still, loneliness is a frigged bedfellow and little comfort when the winds of pain assail.
Solid rhyme and meter...looks tight.
Nice job with this entry...hope you've penned a winner! Bill
Comment Written 10-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2014
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Thanks, Bill. I hope it's a winner too - I need some of that funny money to promote my next couple of pieces!
Steve
Comment from Eternal Muse
Steve, this is such amazing sonnet, perfect in structure, expression, presentation and the visuals it evokes. Your perfect picturw took me on an amazing journey.
You describe a perfect bliss of two people meeting, falling in love and becoming life's partners.
Such a perfect idyll, until I get to the last two lines. Here it could be interpreted in different ways.
This composition amazing, it stays with the readet and will stay with me for a long time.
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2014
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Steve, this is such amazing sonnet, perfect in structure, expression, presentation and the visuals it evokes. Your perfect picturw took me on an amazing journey.
You describe a perfect bliss of two people meeting, falling in love and becoming life's partners.
Such a perfect idyll, until I get to the last two lines. Here it could be interpreted in different ways.
This composition amazing, it stays with the readet and will stay with me for a long time.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2014
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Yelena, thanks so much for the warm review of my sonnet. I was disqualified from my last contest entry so I took a bit of extra care with this one!
Steve
Comment from poetbear
Great visual.
This is touching and beautifully written.
Many will relate and understand.nice use of poetic license and creativ writing.
Reads well and makes sense.
Beautifully crafted.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2014
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Great visual.
This is touching and beautifully written.
Many will relate and understand.nice use of poetic license and creativ writing.
Reads well and makes sense.
Beautifully crafted.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2014
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Thank you for the arm review.
Steve
Comment from Jackarrie
I love this sonnet you have written for the contest. Well paired with photo. I enjoyed the story?poem very much. It has nice rhythm,and flow . This makes for an excellent read. I feel it deserves a six star rating.
Good luck in the contest. Mary
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2014
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I love this sonnet you have written for the contest. Well paired with photo. I enjoyed the story?poem very much. It has nice rhythm,and flow . This makes for an excellent read. I feel it deserves a six star rating.
Good luck in the contest. Mary
Comment Written 10-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2014
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Thanks, Mary. I guess sonnets are not often used to tell a story, but that's just the way this one developed.
Steve
Comment from Adri7enne
The summer love that flourished on "the sunburnt hillsides", "are frozen now in bitter winter's chill." It doesn't always end so coldly, but time dims the colors of love. When we're lucky, we're left with the warmth of glowing embers that will last through many winters.
Well done, Steve. Got me philosophying on a cold Monday morning.
Nice rhyming. I'm starting to recognize the Sonnet form. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2014
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The summer love that flourished on "the sunburnt hillsides", "are frozen now in bitter winter's chill." It doesn't always end so coldly, but time dims the colors of love. When we're lucky, we're left with the warmth of glowing embers that will last through many winters.
Well done, Steve. Got me philosophying on a cold Monday morning.
Nice rhyming. I'm starting to recognize the Sonnet form. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2014
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Thanks for the warm review.
Steve
Comment from Mark Valentine
Everything about this says "classic". Classic form, classic story (romance withering), classic point of view (looking back on youth), and classic language. The iambic pentameter is evident, but not so pronounced that it overwhelms the sonnet. I particularly liked the "We quaffed life's potent vintage to the lees" line. Up until the last couplet, it seemed more wistful than sad - a fond remembrance of past love - "bitter winter's chill" gives it an edge.
Great job - good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2014
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Everything about this says "classic". Classic form, classic story (romance withering), classic point of view (looking back on youth), and classic language. The iambic pentameter is evident, but not so pronounced that it overwhelms the sonnet. I particularly liked the "We quaffed life's potent vintage to the lees" line. Up until the last couplet, it seemed more wistful than sad - a fond remembrance of past love - "bitter winter's chill" gives it an edge.
Great job - good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2014
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Mark, thanks so much for your 'classic' review. Yes, that final couplet adds a bit of punch - I originally had those lines earlier in the poem, but then didn't have anywhere to go for an ending.
Steve
