Comment from donaldww

Excellent

Excellent alliteration in luna luminates. Luminates used as a verb is usage I haven't seen often compared to illuminates, and the pairing creates a fresh poetic phrase.

Overhead, the universe is aa mystery. Until you watch Cosmos. (Sunday nights. LOL)

Cheers,
DW

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2014

Thank you so very much, Donald, my talented friend :-) Brooke

Comment from DALLAS01

Excellent

I like the rhyme scheme, it is so lyrical. Your poem has a touch of magic that appeals to all readers, both young and old. The art work is a nice enhancement.

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2014

Thank you so much, Dallas :-) Brooke

Comment from seaglass

Excellent

Nature is full of wonderful mysteries. Sawyer is a smart little boy to already be learning such scientific names. I like the rhyme AABBB,

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2014

Thanks so much, seaglass. :-) Brooke

Comment from mountainwriter49

Exceptional

Good Evening, Brooke

I don't know how you do it with your continued diversity of stellar, spot-on poetic form inspirations. This one made me think of Gravity, the new film with S. Bullock. I also enjoyed learning a new word for butterfly. This should do well in the contest. Best of luck to you.

Ray

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2014

Thanks so much, Ray - that is a film I plan to watch this week :-) I truly appreciate your graciousness and generosity. How is your course proposal coming? Can't wait to read it. Brooke

reply by mountainwriter49 on 16-Mar-2014

just posted it in the thread. a draft, of course. You'll enjoy Gravity. The scenes of Earth are just "out of this world!"
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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

Beautifully written, ABC poem, Brooke, reading it, you wouldn't think is was one, it flows so naturally. My home in Spain was called, La Casa de la Mariposa, we had some lovely colourful butterflies around our garden. I did enjoy this poem, and I am sure Sawyer will too. Lovely illustration. xsx Sandra

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2014

Sandra, what a gorgeous name. Sawyer would have been in seventh heaven there :-) Thanks so much. Brooke

Comment from words

Exceptional

I do so agree, Brooke. We must lift our eyes to SEE.

Such a simple sentiment, but something too many just fail to do.

You always uplift and inspire.

Each and every time that I read you, I know that you deserve to be number one.

Hugs, d

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2014

Thank you so very very much, my insightful and generous friend :-) Are the twins in love with butterflies too? Brooke

Comment from Marillion

Excellent

I notice that you're utilizing trochaic meter lately, Brooke, and I like it. A poet I'm reading a lot right now has been doing the same, and it's making me want to break out of iambic for a bit. Nicely done, especially that last line.

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2014

Thank you, Dave - yep, sometimes my mind wants to break away from my habits :-) Brooke

Comment from mstad55

Excellent

Gee, thanks for the education. As always I have learned something new. All these years I thought mariposa was the girl I took to my first Jr. High sock hop. I guess it's fitting, she was a bit of social butterfly. Great poem. mike

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2014

Thanks so much, Mike, for the laugh and the review :-) Brooke

Comment from juliaSjames

Excellent

Charming write with clever word use, "Luna luminates" and "Mariposa". I see that you personify the butterfly which is truly delightful.

The philosophical section of the write blends seamlessly with the whimsy.

Great ABC poem.

Best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2014

Julia, thank you so very much :-) Brooke

Comment from Janet Foor

Exceptional

What a wonderful picture for you ABC poem. How fun when little ones start to put words and thoughts together. Good use of alliteration with Luna luminates. As always, Brooke this was a pleasure to read.
Blessings
Janet

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2014

Janet, thank you so much :-) I truly appreciate your gracious and generous response to this poem. Brooke