The Ephemeral Magic of the Muse
An idea inspired by a Sgaletti poem37 total reviews
Comment from Rasp E
I can't even think of superlatives that are right to describe it! Beautiful...just beautiful. And touching, actually, if that makes any sense to you at all. It's good. Very good. :) Don't take this the wrong way, please, but I'm a little in shock. Since I'm only managing to babble, I'll just say good luck and goodbye.
Erica
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2010
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I can't even think of superlatives that are right to describe it! Beautiful...just beautiful. And touching, actually, if that makes any sense to you at all. It's good. Very good. :) Don't take this the wrong way, please, but I'm a little in shock. Since I'm only managing to babble, I'll just say good luck and goodbye.
Erica
Comment Written 29-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2010
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Erica, you've put a great big smile on my face this morning :-). What a fantastic review! It's always a bit of a risk, putting totally free poetry up on FS, but this poured out in a rush and I just had to post it. What a wonderful response :-)
Mike
Comment from patmedium
Exceptional. If this is what you do when Sue triggers you off, I think I should trot along and read more of hers! LOL. I would love to hear you declaim this on 'Poetry, Please'. Pat. xxx
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2010
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Exceptional. If this is what you do when Sue triggers you off, I think I should trot along and read more of hers! LOL. I would love to hear you declaim this on 'Poetry, Please'. Pat. xxx
Comment Written 29-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2010
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lol, thank you, Pat :-). It was a great idea, writing of one's muse, and the perfect opportunity to just let my fingers go and see what came out. I think my free verse (hate that term; it's just a poem! why the need to come up with a category for 'uncategorised?!) are the ones that would benefit most from performance, simply because it would allow me to dictate the pace clearly. One day, perhaps!
Mike
Comment from rama devi
OH, Mike, i lOVE this---(hope i have a six)--as I have born witness to your muse's incredible responsiveness in poetic review too!
Loved so many lines! (and not nits noticed) though that picture's a bit intense! LOL Nonetheless, well presented with black background adn orange font. Creative presentation nicely enhanced by skillful spacing.
Favorite lines
undeniably unsure
under the sheen.
this stanza-
Then on the page I'll see a sage,
a poem penned; respected friend's
unveiling mystery,
and on into the electronic ether
I will type,
and snipe,
and coddle,
modelling the meddlesome inventions
masked by meter's
stale touch
and my mixed up intentions.
and this
Unto the crowds these spouting clouds
of dreams will find their way;
the only way I pray,
the fundamental
fright that my insight might go astray
and cast alight the pyre of blight
that burns my sight away.
Both are simply BRILLIANT and so finely rhymed with internal rhyme too.
Love the misconstrue commentary closing--
Bravo, witty you.
Love, rd
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2010
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OH, Mike, i lOVE this---(hope i have a six)--as I have born witness to your muse's incredible responsiveness in poetic review too!
Loved so many lines! (and not nits noticed) though that picture's a bit intense! LOL Nonetheless, well presented with black background adn orange font. Creative presentation nicely enhanced by skillful spacing.
Favorite lines
undeniably unsure
under the sheen.
this stanza-
Then on the page I'll see a sage,
a poem penned; respected friend's
unveiling mystery,
and on into the electronic ether
I will type,
and snipe,
and coddle,
modelling the meddlesome inventions
masked by meter's
stale touch
and my mixed up intentions.
and this
Unto the crowds these spouting clouds
of dreams will find their way;
the only way I pray,
the fundamental
fright that my insight might go astray
and cast alight the pyre of blight
that burns my sight away.
Both are simply BRILLIANT and so finely rhymed with internal rhyme too.
Love the misconstrue commentary closing--
Bravo, witty you.
Love, rd
Comment Written 29-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2010
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Aww, you spoil me with your wonderful comments! This was a proper streamer, straight from thought to screen via numb fingers, then a couple of tiny tweaks before posting. I really got caught up here, and I'm thrilled it came across so well :-)
Mike
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Usually i reserve sixes for super-polished work. But in this case, the energy of it required it to be free flow and spontaneous, as that was part of the theme, so it suits perfectly. :-)
Comment from Judian James
I'm out of sixers for you, but I would have easily given you another this morning for this gem. Your use of alliteration, perfect timing and pacing, spacing, metaphor and finally rhyme, was all brilliant PLUS I loved the final bit and the last, dangling line that could be "misconstrued"! lol Really supberb Mike
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2010
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I'm out of sixers for you, but I would have easily given you another this morning for this gem. Your use of alliteration, perfect timing and pacing, spacing, metaphor and finally rhyme, was all brilliant PLUS I loved the final bit and the last, dangling line that could be "misconstrued"! lol Really supberb Mike
Comment Written 29-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2010
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This one really came pouring out as soon as the 'muse' idea found its wsy into my skull. I'm glad you liked my little wink at the end ;-)
Mike
Comment from mchapman
very well done. I hope this was part of the contest. it would sure be a winner. filled with magical thoughts and emotions and imagery. thanks for sharing......mary
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2010
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very well done. I hope this was part of the contest. it would sure be a winner. filled with magical thoughts and emotions and imagery. thanks for sharing......mary
Comment Written 29-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2010
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Unfortunately I missed out on the conest, but the idea was a great one and I really enjoyed letting this poem flow out of me :-)
Mike
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you are welcome
Comment from sgalletti
And I love it Mike! Great observations about your own creative process. I most enjoyed where you chose to rhyme and your word choices throughout. Pausing and contemplative thought mixed with static energy, just as the mind works. I'm honored my poem inspired this wonderful piece. Sue
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2010
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And I love it Mike! Great observations about your own creative process. I most enjoyed where you chose to rhyme and your word choices throughout. Pausing and contemplative thought mixed with static energy, just as the mind works. I'm honored my poem inspired this wonderful piece. Sue
Comment Written 29-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2010
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Thank you so much, Sue :-). I'm thrilled you like it! It was great to have a chance to really self-indulge in some words.
Mike
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written with good form, good flow, good meter, a wonderful picture that makes me think of mischeviousness. we never know what we'll end up with when we start typing.
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reply by the author on 29-Jun-2010
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this is very well written with good form, good flow, good meter, a wonderful picture that makes me think of mischeviousness. we never know what we'll end up with when we start typing.
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Comment Written 29-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2010
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Thank you, SWJ :-). I'm glad you enjoyed my muse-inspired bit of free verse rambling!
Mike
