The Ottava Rima
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Comment from Rama Rao
This short poem moved with a rare elegance. It had a fine structure and words flowed like a bubbling Brooke. Each line followed the othe seamlessly.
I appreciate your trust in the smile that lights your path.
It made an excellent read.
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This short poem moved with a rare elegance. It had a fine structure and words flowed like a bubbling Brooke. Each line followed the othe seamlessly.
I appreciate your trust in the smile that lights your path.
It made an excellent read.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2010
Comment from Joan E.
I quite enjoyed this entire poem in hyperbole. (What if the third line were "If bubbling brooks laugh not as..."?) I admired all your strong rhymes, rhyme and alliteration as well.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2010
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I quite enjoyed this entire poem in hyperbole. (What if the third line were "If bubbling brooks laugh not as..."?) I admired all your strong rhymes, rhyme and alliteration as well.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2010
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Thank you, Joan - I'll go back and reread that line :-) Brooke
Comment from ducilla
As a absolute novice at the structure of poetry, all I can do is read the words and visualize the emotional content I feel the author is trying to convey.Your tale of love is effective and quite clear to the uninitiated..I love to see the way wordsmiths see my artwork and I believe that your words make my photography better..Thank you for that...Dennis..(ducilla.)
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2010
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As a absolute novice at the structure of poetry, all I can do is read the words and visualize the emotional content I feel the author is trying to convey.Your tale of love is effective and quite clear to the uninitiated..I love to see the way wordsmiths see my artwork and I believe that your words make my photography better..Thank you for that...Dennis..(ducilla.)
Comment Written 25-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2010
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Thank you, Dennis - I so appreciate your gracious comments :-) Brooke
Comment from El.Marjie
Hi again, Brooke. Thanks again for explaining your poetic technique. I am trying to learn from this, and even repetition helps. This is a beautiful poem, as are all your poems. Something about this one makes me think of Job in the Old Testament, when he said, "Though He slay me, yet will I trust Him." I have the sense that as Job was, you are talking to God. Beautiful sentiments and faith. God bless you richly. Best Blessings! Marjie
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2010
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Hi again, Brooke. Thanks again for explaining your poetic technique. I am trying to learn from this, and even repetition helps. This is a beautiful poem, as are all your poems. Something about this one makes me think of Job in the Old Testament, when he said, "Though He slay me, yet will I trust Him." I have the sense that as Job was, you are talking to God. Beautiful sentiments and faith. God bless you richly. Best Blessings! Marjie
Comment Written 25-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2010
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Thanks, Marjie - I like the Job connection :-) Brooke
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
now, this is a poem of faith if I
have ever read one -- it does not
scream it out as some others do,
but it is so powerful in how you
ensnare the reader without them even
realizing it -- loved it -- love, jan
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2010
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now, this is a poem of faith if I
have ever read one -- it does not
scream it out as some others do,
but it is so powerful in how you
ensnare the reader without them even
realizing it -- loved it -- love, jan
Comment Written 25-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2010
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Thank you, Jan - I truly appreciate your insightful comments :-) Brooke
Comment from Trybuck
The old ottava rima you've chosen to deliver
Like an arrow out of the marksman quiver
It flies to land it's heart-stopping blow
Veering neither left nor right as it goes
But always and in all ways procuring attention
From its mission it will not allow any contention
Well done with the poem and notes, Buck
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2010
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The old ottava rima you've chosen to deliver
Like an arrow out of the marksman quiver
It flies to land it's heart-stopping blow
Veering neither left nor right as it goes
But always and in all ways procuring attention
From its mission it will not allow any contention
Well done with the poem and notes, Buck
Comment Written 24-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2010
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Thank you, Buck, for a great poetic response :-) Brooke
Comment from victortouche
Lovely. I was in the mood for something like this, and I thank U. I usually don't have a lot that comes to mind when I read U. Meaning criticisms or suggestions. But I think I have discovered one thing. This is the first time I have come to this realization. Nothing in ur poems ever jumps out at me, hence the nothing to say feeling. Now I think I know why. Just like a fine wine, ur poems are so well balanced that one doesn't notice flow, one doesn't notice just one stanza, one doesn't notice a word or phrase that stands out. Because that is how it should be I think. U do write beautiful poetry. P.S.- I bought 4 Joan Didion books. ( I didn't know if U got the other message.)
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Lovely. I was in the mood for something like this, and I thank U. I usually don't have a lot that comes to mind when I read U. Meaning criticisms or suggestions. But I think I have discovered one thing. This is the first time I have come to this realization. Nothing in ur poems ever jumps out at me, hence the nothing to say feeling. Now I think I know why. Just like a fine wine, ur poems are so well balanced that one doesn't notice flow, one doesn't notice just one stanza, one doesn't notice a word or phrase that stands out. Because that is how it should be I think. U do write beautiful poetry. P.S.- I bought 4 Joan Didion books. ( I didn't know if U got the other message.)
Comment Written 24-Mar-2010
Comment from HAWordsmith
This was lovely Brooke. From form and flow, rhythm and rhyme, to the alliteration, this was, from beginning to end, a pleasure to read. Thank you for this posting and many blessings.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2010
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This was lovely Brooke. From form and flow, rhythm and rhyme, to the alliteration, this was, from beginning to end, a pleasure to read. Thank you for this posting and many blessings.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2010
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Thanks so much, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment from Arkine
When the world crumbles (or seems to) around us, at least we have each other. Probably something too many couples/families forget these days. Anyhow, beautifully done! :)
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When the world crumbles (or seems to) around us, at least we have each other. Probably something too many couples/families forget these days. Anyhow, beautifully done! :)
Comment Written 24-Mar-2010
Comment from Ann Smith
I like the format of the poem and thank you for the author's notes. The imagery of the poem is lovely and has an element of resting and contemplating. I especially liked the couplet because it shows the depth of the feelings. ann
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2010
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I like the format of the poem and thank you for the author's notes. The imagery of the poem is lovely and has an element of resting and contemplating. I especially liked the couplet because it shows the depth of the feelings. ann
Comment Written 24-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2010
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Thank you, Ann. I appreciate your gracious review : -) Brooke
