Tantalizing Eyes
Viewing comments for Chapter 38 "Chapter 10; part 4"Dishonesty VS Love. Which will win?
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Comment from Fleedleflump
Whilst I haven't read the rest of the story, I can tell that these characters are very well defined within your thoughts. They feel solid, and their interactions believable. My the rest of the story go well :-)
Mike
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2010
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Whilst I haven't read the rest of the story, I can tell that these characters are very well defined within your thoughts. They feel solid, and their interactions believable. My the rest of the story go well :-)
Mike
Comment Written 16-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2010
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Thank you for you kind review.
Comment from jadapenn
Now look who's throwing a cliff hanger in here. I liked this chapter. Love Ralph, he's such a caring daddy. Nice work here Barbara. Can't for the next chapter.
Luv jada
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2010
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Now look who's throwing a cliff hanger in here. I liked this chapter. Love Ralph, he's such a caring daddy. Nice work here Barbara. Can't for the next chapter.
Luv jada
Comment Written 16-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2010
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It will be the chapter you are waiting for, I hope. I am still revamping it. I am afraid, I've build up the passion and won't be able to produce the climax, so to speak.
Comment from Brindle.T
Hello you!
remember me?
back on line now after a sebatical and a little ring rusty for the purpose of any meaningful review, but i can say I rather ewnjoyed this ialogue exchange it was well crafted flowed well and i found no errors.
I hope you can forgive my long absence
Tony
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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2010
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Hello you!
remember me?
back on line now after a sebatical and a little ring rusty for the purpose of any meaningful review, but i can say I rather ewnjoyed this ialogue exchange it was well crafted flowed well and i found no errors.
I hope you can forgive my long absence
Tony
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Comment Written 16-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2010
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I will forgive you of anything. I hope you stay around to tear my posts apart, and I can't wait to read your posts. I have missed your store on Traflager.
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Oh I'll be around now for a while
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I am glad.
Comment from Solrac
HERE WE GO AGAIN. a CHAPTER FULL OF TENSION AND MOVEMENT, DIALOGUE WELL CREATED WITH CREDIBLE LINES. A GREAT SETTING AND A SUPER STORY
sOLRAC
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2010
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HERE WE GO AGAIN. a CHAPTER FULL OF TENSION AND MOVEMENT, DIALOGUE WELL CREATED WITH CREDIBLE LINES. A GREAT SETTING AND A SUPER STORY
sOLRAC
Comment Written 16-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2010
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Be still my heart!!!!!!!!!!!! Thank you so much for the 6, I can not tell you how much it means to me.
I am missing your posts. I hope you are busy writing. When I get kicked out of first place, I at least want to be kicked out by a pro.
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The production for the movie trailers for the book are going FULL BLAST and the reviewsw are more than I could ask for, but I miss the review of Barbara Wilkey. Will you honor me by writing a couple of words about my book that I can include in the trailer with your name attached so the entire world could see it?
Comment from Donna Thompson
So true that there are other ways to hurt someone. I am curious to read on about Leya and her meaning with that comment. Thank you for the ease of reading and interest captured within
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2010
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So true that there are other ways to hurt someone. I am curious to read on about Leya and her meaning with that comment. Thank you for the ease of reading and interest captured within
Comment Written 15-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2010
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Next post will reveal what she means. Thank you for your kind words.
Comment from Isaiah Ramesses
This is just as good as previous chapters I've read. But seems a little different. Like...maybe it moved along, a little too fast. But it was well written,and Leya--and her supporting cast--were as alive as always.
Good chapter.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2010
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This is just as good as previous chapters I've read. But seems a little different. Like...maybe it moved along, a little too fast. But it was well written,and Leya--and her supporting cast--were as alive as always.
Good chapter.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. This post is a scene building for what happens next.
Comment from Readywriter52
Leya grew up in an atmosphere of mistrust. It will take more than the word of Steven to assure her that he won't hurt her. He needs to build her trust.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2010
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Leya grew up in an atmosphere of mistrust. It will take more than the word of Steven to assure her that he won't hurt her. He needs to build her trust.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2010
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Great observation. Thank you for your review.
Comment from Frankeddy
You are moving along nicely with your story.S&G good. Easy to read and follow
right along. I am now looking forward to chapter 39.
Keep up the good work. Frankeddy
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2010
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You are moving along nicely with your story.S&G good. Easy to read and follow
right along. I am now looking forward to chapter 39.
Keep up the good work. Frankeddy
Comment Written 15-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2010
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Thank for your kind words.
Comment from ulster3
Hi Barbara.
The dialogue is so good. I struggle so when I try to erite dialogue. This was a smooth and interesting read. Your couple seems under a bit of a strain, or is that just me.
Thanks.
Rebecca
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2010
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Hi Barbara.
The dialogue is so good. I struggle so when I try to erite dialogue. This was a smooth and interesting read. Your couple seems under a bit of a strain, or is that just me.
Thanks.
Rebecca
Comment Written 15-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2010
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They are under a huge strain. That will be taken of soon. Thank you for your kind words.
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Thanks for letting me know. :)
Comment from FredCollingwood
I have a feeling Steven is going to other ways a person can hurt someone. Great read Barbara. I looked but found no spags.
Fred
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2010
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I have a feeling Steven is going to other ways a person can hurt someone. Great read Barbara. I looked but found no spags.
Fred
Comment Written 15-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
