Triolets: Traditional and Modified
Viewing comments for Chapter 48 "In Dreams I am a Gliding Swan"Poems employing this musical, repeating form
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Comment from connied
This flows and excellent use of form-- I really like it
I can empathize with the writer here- I think we all awake as ugly ducklings and dream as swans--or maybe not!
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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This flows and excellent use of form-- I really like it
I can empathize with the writer here- I think we all awake as ugly ducklings and dream as swans--or maybe not!
Comment Written 27-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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Thank you, Connied. I am glad you could relate to what I was saying :-) Brooke
Comment from meanlevee
It seems strange to review the top writer, and top reviewer on the site, but never mind.
I am not necessarily a swan in my dreams, but anyone can identify with the idea of being in an entirely different world when sleeping, and having reality hit within the first instance of waking.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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It seems strange to review the top writer, and top reviewer on the site, but never mind.
I am not necessarily a swan in my dreams, but anyone can identify with the idea of being in an entirely different world when sleeping, and having reality hit within the first instance of waking.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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You are five years younger than my daughter - just think of me as someone's friendly mom sitting at her computer! LOL Thank you for your kind review :-) Brooke
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Oh! The age card. Well I will see you as a friendly mom, but also a rival. I'll unseat you one day!(Joke).
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well done and made the reader think of their own dreams that they have that make them feel good, well written, good flow and an interesting form of poetry i haven't tried yet
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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this is very well done and made the reader think of their own dreams that they have that make them feel good, well written, good flow and an interesting form of poetry i haven't tried yet
Comment Written 26-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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Thank you, sweetwoodjax. I'm so glad you could relate to this, which is always my goal as a writer :-) Brooke
Comment from nancyjam
Gliding like a swan -It does sound
pleasant and dreamy - quite
a contrast to the harsh realities of life.
Your triolet is so serene with lovely
images floating through it. Loved it.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2010
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Gliding like a swan -It does sound
pleasant and dreamy - quite
a contrast to the harsh realities of life.
Your triolet is so serene with lovely
images floating through it. Loved it.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2010
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Thank you, Nancy, for your t houghtful response to this triolet :-) Brooke
Comment from rhymelord
Dear Brooke,
Beautiful dream, beautiful poetry. The placidity of your words and the sooth along gentle rhythm nearly had me dozing off. I don't know whether that's a compliment or not :<)
Regards
Reg
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2010
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Dear Brooke,
Beautiful dream, beautiful poetry. The placidity of your words and the sooth along gentle rhythm nearly had me dozing off. I don't know whether that's a compliment or not :<)
Regards
Reg
Comment Written 26-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2010
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Dozing off? I'm not sure either, Reg!! LOL Thanks, I think :-) Brooke
Comment from redrider6612
Beautiful work, Brooke! I love the visual of a "placid lake", and the thought of a graceful swan gliding on the smooth surface of the water. Gorgeous artwork--I just love Mino Yasue, such amazing colors and imagination in all of her pieces. Thank you for sharing.
Hugs,
diane
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2010
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Beautiful work, Brooke! I love the visual of a "placid lake", and the thought of a graceful swan gliding on the smooth surface of the water. Gorgeous artwork--I just love Mino Yasue, such amazing colors and imagination in all of her pieces. Thank you for sharing.
Hugs,
diane
Comment Written 26-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2010
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Thank you, Diane - I love her art, too. I'm pleased you enjoyed this triolet. Brooke :-)
Comment from Trybuck
I believe this is one of your favorite styles to do... well, next to the spainard.
I say keep dreaming after you wake
Don't let the dawn your peace take
Good one, Buck
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2010
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I believe this is one of your favorite styles to do... well, next to the spainard.
I say keep dreaming after you wake
Don't let the dawn your peace take
Good one, Buck
Comment Written 26-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2010
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Yes, Buck - I love this form :-) I love just about all the repeating forms :-) T hanks so much, my friend. Brooke
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:)- Is that because it's one or more less lines you have to come up with... or - don't hit me yet... or ist because it makes it more of a challenge to come with the right preceding and following lines? Now you can hit me :)
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the challenge answer is the right one, Buck - don't worry, I don't hit! :-)
Comment from mountainwriter49
As usual Brooke, you've penned yet another flawless
and beautiful poem. I love the imagery of this poem
and it offers such a nice thought as opposed to all
of this snow. A delightful read and a pleasure to review.
-ray
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2010
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As usual Brooke, you've penned yet another flawless
and beautiful poem. I love the imagery of this poem
and it offers such a nice thought as opposed to all
of this snow. A delightful read and a pleasure to review.
-ray
Comment Written 26-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2010
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thank you, Ray - I'm really glad you enjoyed this triolet :-) Brooke
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I really like the idea of being a swan on a placid lake. Wow, how relaxing. Just reading the poem makes me feel relaxed. That image is perfect.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2010
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I really like the idea of being a swan on a placid lake. Wow, how relaxing. Just reading the poem makes me feel relaxed. That image is perfect.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2010
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Thank you, Barbara - it is a relaxing image, isn't it? :-) Brooke
Comment from azwildrosa
adewpearl, your poem is beautiful. The pic, well chosen. And a swan, what a magnificent bird. I wonder what I might be while I dream. Never thought about it till now. Thanks for the great read!
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2010
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adewpearl, your poem is beautiful. The pic, well chosen. And a swan, what a magnificent bird. I wonder what I might be while I dream. Never thought about it till now. Thanks for the great read!
Comment Written 26-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2010
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Thank you, azwildrose - I appreciate your most thoughtful review :-) Brooke
