Comment from Fleedleflump

Excellent

Afraid to dream too fervently,
he smiles always in shyness,
the fundamentals granted taken
skip him nonetheless;
His faith in anything but self,
eroded by the seasons
of fun had (always his expense)
is all he has for reason.

Within his mind the matter lurks,
awaiting death's salvation,
humour both profound and sharp
the train within his station.
His life upon the rails it seems
goes on out there forever;
no peace, no quiet desolation
sating sadness' hunger.

So into minf his vision flies,
a-seeking that of value,
mining gobbets bright and shiny,
officers salute:
This man will find the heaven path,
the link we have to endigs.
Heed his words of desperation:
life within his sendings.

Mike

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2009

Thank you, Mike - your mind always fascinates me! Brooke :-)

Comment from Adri7enne

Excellent

I admire everyone who prays to be of service. Imcomplete person that I am, I continue to seek peace for myself. I guess there are many roads that lead to awakening.
I love that word: "conduit" It has rhythm all on its own, doesn't it?
Your poetry makes me think, dear Brooke.

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2009

I wrote the entire poem so I could use the word conduit - I LOVE words like that!!! Thanks, Adrienne :-) Brooke

Comment from DecrepitOldBag

Excellent

Very engaging and poignant piece here, Brooke. I think it applies very well to you more than anyone else I know. Clearly, your wish has been granted!
Great write.
Warmest wishes
Kat

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2009

Thanks so much, Kat. That is really sweet of you to say :-) Brooke

Comment from Loyd C. Taylor, Sr

Excellent

A very good Monday morning to you poet friend! Brooke, those are words and drive that everyone should have for their motto and motive for life. Great poem and powerful message! Loyd

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2009

Good morning to you too, Loyd. And thank you!! Brooke :-)

reply by Loyd C. Taylor, Sr on 27-Jul-2009

You are welcome.

Comment from AlvinTEthington

Excellent

You know how much I like it when you write the traditional forms and this is a superb triolet. I can see people memorizing it and repeating it as a prayer. A wonderful post. A beautiful poem about what the Christian life is. Excellent work.

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2009

Alvin, I am truly honored by this review :-) Brooke
I wish I knew Spanish so I could read your Spanish posts :-)

reply by AlvinTEthington on 27-Jul-2009

Yes, unfortunately so much of my work in Spanish has a huge cultural context, which makes translation is difficult. But Spanish isn't a hard language to learn!

Comment from Mariea

Excellent

This is a beautiful poem. If only everyone could have these sentiments. Good structure and punctuation. Easy rhythm throughout and a good read. Regards Mia

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2009

Thank you so much, Mia, and good morning! Brooke :-)

Comment from NightWriter

Excellent

"A Little Kindness" is a beautifully written Spiritual Triolet. Impeccable rhythm and rhyme from beginning to end. Another well written poem!

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2009

Thank you, my friend, and good morning :-) You are always so gracious. Brooke

Comment from Arkine

Excellent

I'm not so much for the spiritual stuff, but this sounded good. Flowed well and easy to read. If more people were a little nicer to each other alot of the worlds problems wouldn't exist...or at least there would be less of them.

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2009

To me, being spiritual is being a good person who leads the kind of life God would have us live - so I'm glad you like this!! Brooke :-)

Comment from chaswriter

Excellent

Broooke - A wonderful poem/prayer about being unselfish and helping others in need. Well written and you are inspire me to reach. Enjoyed it. Charlie

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2009

Thanks, Charlie. Your warm comments mean a lot to me :-) Brooke

Comment from skye

Excellent

There is a lot of need out there, and allowing the Lord to direct our efforts, becoming His conduit, is a great aspiration.
Very well done.

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2009

Thank you, Skye, for a gracious and warm review :-) Brooke