Caterpillar
four quatrains in tribute to my favorite insect71 total reviews
Comment from Nicnac
I've always found enchantment in its fuzz,
and hate to know we'll have to say goodbye - I loved these lines!
This is a charming poem.
Wonderful imagery.
Wonderful flow and rhyme.
This is a unique look at the transformation of this lovely creature. The beauty not only lies in the colorful winged outcome, but in the fuzzy body he was born with.
Bravo. This poem is exceptional in my eyes.
I LOVED it.
~Nic
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2009
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I've always found enchantment in its fuzz,
and hate to know we'll have to say goodbye - I loved these lines!
This is a charming poem.
Wonderful imagery.
Wonderful flow and rhyme.
This is a unique look at the transformation of this lovely creature. The beauty not only lies in the colorful winged outcome, but in the fuzzy body he was born with.
Bravo. This poem is exceptional in my eyes.
I LOVED it.
~Nic
Comment Written 28-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2009
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Nic, thank you so much for the most generous rating and for "getting" it - not everyone has - I've gotten remarks like - great poem about butterflies! LOL You're the best. Brooke
Comment from TinyTeena
It's always nice to show appreciation for things as they are, and not just for what they might eventually be. You have expressed this -
"I've always found enchantment in its fuzz,
And hate to know we'll have to say goodbye ..".
When it sheds its current shape to becme a butterfly is likened to someone dying, leaving this Earth and becoming like an angel - a butterfly. The poet says most people never worry about the caterpillar, as being worthy of anything. They are just waiting for the butterfly to emerge. But the poet describes the work of the caterpillar as being so worthwhile and appreciated by God that it is rewarded with being transformed (in the next life) to a butterfly.
Good steady rhythm and rhyme - giving feelings of the caterpillar crawling along. Reference to "the ugly duckling" turning from ugliness to beauty - similar to what the caterpillar experiences.
You have achieved a great tribute to your selected insect.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2009
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It's always nice to show appreciation for things as they are, and not just for what they might eventually be. You have expressed this -
"I've always found enchantment in its fuzz,
And hate to know we'll have to say goodbye ..".
When it sheds its current shape to becme a butterfly is likened to someone dying, leaving this Earth and becoming like an angel - a butterfly. The poet says most people never worry about the caterpillar, as being worthy of anything. They are just waiting for the butterfly to emerge. But the poet describes the work of the caterpillar as being so worthwhile and appreciated by God that it is rewarded with being transformed (in the next life) to a butterfly.
Good steady rhythm and rhyme - giving feelings of the caterpillar crawling along. Reference to "the ugly duckling" turning from ugliness to beauty - similar to what the caterpillar experiences.
You have achieved a great tribute to your selected insect.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2009
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I am so glad you like this poem and the true intent of the poem - you "get" it completely - thank you so much for a great review!! Brooke
Comment from NightWriter
"Caterpillar" is a beautiful poem about a beautiful creature. Perfect rhythm and reads smooth from beginning to end. Someone once told me how a caterpillar is like us on the planet living our daily lives and when we die, it's the butterfly flying to heaven. So when I read about caterpillars, that always comes to mind.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2009
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"Caterpillar" is a beautiful poem about a beautiful creature. Perfect rhythm and reads smooth from beginning to end. Someone once told me how a caterpillar is like us on the planet living our daily lives and when we die, it's the butterfly flying to heaven. So when I read about caterpillars, that always comes to mind.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2009
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thank you for sharing that lovely story! and for the review.
Brooke :-)
Comment from MJMuraco
I have always been fascinated by caterpillars. This was a sweet poem and your imagery was great. I noticed not photo but still got the image. Great luck with the contest. You write a lot of nice stuff.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2009
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I have always been fascinated by caterpillars. This was a sweet poem and your imagery was great. I noticed not photo but still got the image. Great luck with the contest. You write a lot of nice stuff.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2009
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Something has happened to my illustration - there used to be a pretty photo there!! Thanks, Brooke
Comment from Joan E.
I enjoyed your ability to cause us to see more in this creature than its "homely, hairy form" (plus an alliteration bonus). I appreciated how much explanation was involved in the few well-chosen words: "holding pattern mode". I got a little confused in stanza three regarding the antecedent of it, but that did not mar my pleasure.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2009
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I enjoyed your ability to cause us to see more in this creature than its "homely, hairy form" (plus an alliteration bonus). I appreciated how much explanation was involved in the few well-chosen words: "holding pattern mode". I got a little confused in stanza three regarding the antecedent of it, but that did not mar my pleasure.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2009
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Joan, happy you enjoyed - thank you! Brooke :-)
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I went back to re-read and found an extra space after "sun's" (not a big deal, but I imagine you're striving for perfection).
Comment from Gramma Kathy
I really like this poem. You have captured a childlike wonder regarding caterpillars, and I'd like to think you are right:
"But I prefer to think this creature finds
enjoyment as it feeds among the leaves,
that when the sun's rays fall upon its face,
a fine appreciation it receives."
Beautiful!
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2009
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I really like this poem. You have captured a childlike wonder regarding caterpillars, and I'd like to think you are right:
"But I prefer to think this creature finds
enjoyment as it feeds among the leaves,
that when the sun's rays fall upon its face,
a fine appreciation it receives."
Beautiful!
Comment Written 27-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2009
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I am so glad you like my caterpillar poem - thanks for telling me! Brooke
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
you know, adewpearl, I think the movie Shrek shed some
light on the subject about which you write. Not everyone
the world might think would like to trade places with
someone else is all that uncomfortable with being who
they are. We shouldn't assume people and animals, in
whatever form they occupy at present, are not happy as
they are. Great message, my friend.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2009
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you know, adewpearl, I think the movie Shrek shed some
light on the subject about which you write. Not everyone
the world might think would like to trade places with
someone else is all that uncomfortable with being who
they are. We shouldn't assume people and animals, in
whatever form they occupy at present, are not happy as
they are. Great message, my friend.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2009
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I'm so glad you got the message and like it - I swear some reviewers did not get it at all from their comments! Thanks, Brooke
Comment from Ru Otto
Very nice! We never stop to consider the joy a caterpiller might have just existing to eat and grow and bask in the sun. In the one line,"anticipating eagerly the day". I would switch the two words to "eagerly anticipating the day". And the line "a fine appreciation it receives" seemed forced to fit in the rhyme. Do we receive appreciation? More like something we give or feel. Otherwise very smooth and clever. Ru
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Very nice! We never stop to consider the joy a caterpiller might have just existing to eat and grow and bask in the sun. In the one line,"anticipating eagerly the day". I would switch the two words to "eagerly anticipating the day". And the line "a fine appreciation it receives" seemed forced to fit in the rhyme. Do we receive appreciation? More like something we give or feel. Otherwise very smooth and clever. Ru
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Comment Written 27-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2009
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Ru, thank you, Brooke
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Brooke,
why do I like this poem, because I have see a beautiful butter fly shed its cocoon and turn into to sight of wonder
My daughter runs a day care center and every year she collect caterpillars off of milk weed plants puts,
puts them in a jar and lets the children watch them develop in to a airborne butter fly
thank you for sharing your wonderful poem
Gert
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2009
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Hello Brooke,
why do I like this poem, because I have see a beautiful butter fly shed its cocoon and turn into to sight of wonder
My daughter runs a day care center and every year she collect caterpillars off of milk weed plants puts,
puts them in a jar and lets the children watch them develop in to a airborne butter fly
thank you for sharing your wonderful poem
Gert
Comment Written 27-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2009
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Gert, what a lovely project for your daughter to do for her "kids" thanks for sharing that!! Brooke
Comment from Lady & Louis
That's a nice way of seeing it, Brooke - especially when you think that most of its life is spent as a caterpillar; when it transforms to a butterfly, its life is nearly over.
Good luck in the contest!
Louise :))
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2009
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That's a nice way of seeing it, Brooke - especially when you think that most of its life is spent as a caterpillar; when it transforms to a butterfly, its life is nearly over.
Good luck in the contest!
Louise :))
Comment Written 27-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2009
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Louise, thank you! Brooke
