Last Words
Lost dessert.88 total reviews
Comment from R.A.Partin
This poem is short, but it has a lot of weight to them. In three lines, the story about the death of someone's uncle and how they died came shining through, with all the emotion to go with it. Good work.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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This poem is short, but it has a lot of weight to them. In three lines, the story about the death of someone's uncle and how they died came shining through, with all the emotion to go with it. Good work.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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Thank you, R.A.Partin, for your review and compliments on my short poem. I appreciate it.
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, a starkly realistic acceptance of what appeared to be inevitable, succinctly and soberly expressed - well constructed and perfectly presented with the perfect picture complement...
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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In my opinion, a starkly realistic acceptance of what appeared to be inevitable, succinctly and soberly expressed - well constructed and perfectly presented with the perfect picture complement...
Comment Written 31-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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Yes, evesayshi, this is a starkly realistic acceptance of the inevitable. There is no sugarcoating this. Thank you for your review.
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You are very welcome indeed...
Comment from His Grayness
It is nearly impossible to say much about something so very (intentionally) brief but this one hits the bulls eye dead on! It is packaged perfectly in photography and font and the message is spot on perfect! I loved it! HIS GRAYNESS
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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It is nearly impossible to say much about something so very (intentionally) brief but this one hits the bulls eye dead on! It is packaged perfectly in photography and font and the message is spot on perfect! I loved it! HIS GRAYNESS
Comment Written 31-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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Thank you, His Grayness, for your generous, six star review of my brief, spot on poem. I appreciate it..
Comment from Mark Valentine
First of all, What a cool picture! The two of you seem to have similar styles, and you can see the affection you have for him in your smile.
The prescience of people who know they are going to die is fascinating. Even to an outsider, the seemingly trivial admonition not to bring more teacakes seems to be laden with meaning. At any rate, it is a great line around which to frame this poem. Love it.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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First of all, What a cool picture! The two of you seem to have similar styles, and you can see the affection you have for him in your smile.
The prescience of people who know they are going to die is fascinating. Even to an outsider, the seemingly trivial admonition not to bring more teacakes seems to be laden with meaning. At any rate, it is a great line around which to frame this poem. Love it.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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Yes, Mark, many reviewers have remarked about the prescience of people who know they are going to die. I remember when my mother wrote in the postscript of a letter her love for a particular florist I should use. That made no sense that she would write that. A week later she died and I bought the flowers at the florist she mentioned in her letter.
Thank you for your review.
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
You managed to make this three line poem but heartrendingly sad and exceptionally funny, You are so good at doing that. Well done I am so sorry about the passing of your uncle Lee with deepest sympathies and kindness Meia x
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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You managed to make this three line poem but heartrendingly sad and exceptionally funny, You are so good at doing that. Well done I am so sorry about the passing of your uncle Lee with deepest sympathies and kindness Meia x
Comment Written 31-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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Thank you, Meia, for your generous, six star review and condolences. Yes, I combine humor and tragedy side by side.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, Andre,
Wow, you look like your uncle. I remember the story about the teacakes, it's wonderful to hear from your memories of your uncle again. Good luck with the contest. Good job honey.
Gypsy hugs
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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Hello, Andre,
Wow, you look like your uncle. I remember the story about the teacakes, it's wonderful to hear from your memories of your uncle again. Good luck with the contest. Good job honey.
Gypsy hugs
Comment Written 31-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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Thank you, Gypsy, for your review, condolences, and wishing me luck in the contest. I just remembered that I have an audio recording of my uncle telling family history, and I have notes from other visits. Don't be surprised if he reappears in future stories.
Comment from gsuarez
Awesome !!! I too had an uncle I was very close to. He just wanted us to play his Thelonius Monk albums. Thanks for the memory.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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Awesome !!! I too had an uncle I was very close to. He just wanted us to play his Thelonius Monk albums. Thanks for the memory.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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Thank you, gsuarez, for your review and for sharing your memories. I played Thelonius Monk as I responded to your review. Your uncle had great taste! Thanks.
Comment from Joan E.
I am sorry you lost your uncle, but I appreciate your memorializing him in this 3-line poem. I admired your 5-7-5 form and did not anticipate the final line. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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I am sorry you lost your uncle, but I appreciate your memorializing him in this 3-line poem. I admired your 5-7-5 form and did not anticipate the final line. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
Comment Written 31-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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Thank you, Joan, for your review, condolences, and contest best wishes. I saw it as significant when my uncle declined my teacakes after months of me baking them for him. Five days after my visit without teacakes he died. Thanks again for your thoughts.
Comment from TAB_that's me
Aw, nice picture of you and your uncle. Sad poem though. I guess he knew he was going to die. I think often older people do. I'm sorry for your loss.
Good luck in the contest.
teresa
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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Aw, nice picture of you and your uncle. Sad poem though. I guess he knew he was going to die. I think often older people do. I'm sorry for your loss.
Good luck in the contest.
teresa
Comment Written 31-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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Thank you, Teresa, for your review, condolences, and wishing me luck in the contest. Yes, I have heard from many reviewers who reported the actions and words of people who know they are going to die.
Comment from Caressa_08
Oh, very creative and yet sad, with a bit of humorous satire...it all being true as indicated in your notes and a nice photo to cherish of your Uncle spending a pleasant visit with him at probably one of his favorite' restaurants though, too, then realizing his love for teacakes diminished and you just knew, as maybe his health was also in decline then with his last words to you....Making though with all this...your poem come to life.
Thanks for sharing & Best Wishes for your entry....C.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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Oh, very creative and yet sad, with a bit of humorous satire...it all being true as indicated in your notes and a nice photo to cherish of your Uncle spending a pleasant visit with him at probably one of his favorite' restaurants though, too, then realizing his love for teacakes diminished and you just knew, as maybe his health was also in decline then with his last words to you....Making though with all this...your poem come to life.
Thanks for sharing & Best Wishes for your entry....C.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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Thank you, Caressa, for your review, heartfelt condolences, and wishing me the best in the contest. About a dozen reviewers have reported to me that they witnessed their dying loved once decline favorite foods hours or days before passing.
