Luna's Form Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 37 "Dead Men Tell No Tales"a place to gather my poetic forms
32 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem. If there is something that one would like to hide, make sure there is nobody that can tell of the secrets that must stay unspoken.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2017
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A very well-written poem. If there is something that one would like to hide, make sure there is nobody that can tell of the secrets that must stay unspoken.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2017
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Dear Sandra,
Thanks for the kind review. Yes, some secrets must stay unspoken!
love,
jeni
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This is a well penned Double Etheree as the rules of form have been diligently adhered to throughout. Pirate imagery always works well in poetry and you made excellent use of that in this piece. Nicely done and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2017
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This is a well penned Double Etheree as the rules of form have been diligently adhered to throughout. Pirate imagery always works well in poetry and you made excellent use of that in this piece. Nicely done and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2017
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Well I thank YOU for the lovely words of review, and appreciate that you enjoyed the piece. Thanks for your ongoing encouragement, it means a lot to me.
Love,
jeni
Comment from Tracy Locklin
Fun poem with a nice presentation. I especially like the first 7 lines, and the references to all the pirate lore - Davy Jones locker, Long John Silver, etc.
One suggestion, the word "Thus" does not sound very "piratey" - so you could replace that word with an alternative.
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reply by the author on 29-Jan-2017
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Fun poem with a nice presentation. I especially like the first 7 lines, and the references to all the pirate lore - Davy Jones locker, Long John Silver, etc.
One suggestion, the word "Thus" does not sound very "piratey" - so you could replace that word with an alternative.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2017
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Dear Tracy, thanks for your read and review. I appreciate the suggestion and will take a look at the poem. Have a great Sunday.
jeni
Comment from robina1978
A great moving picture that complements your poem perfectly. When I checked, it is indeed a double Etheree. A form I like too. An original and interesting subject you took, writing about 'dead men tell no tales.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2017
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A great moving picture that complements your poem perfectly. When I checked, it is indeed a double Etheree. A form I like too. An original and interesting subject you took, writing about 'dead men tell no tales.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2017
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Thanks, robina, and I'm happy that you checked on me. I need to be kept straight. I'm really glad that you liked my poem and its presentation. Thanks for reading and leaving me this kind review.
Best,
jeni
Comment from Sis Cat
This is a fun pirate poem. I just read Treasure Island for the first time (gasp) two years ago and I understand all of your dialogue and pun which would be right at home in the book. Your Double Etheree is well shaped and your lines adapt to it while keeping up the fun and puns. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2017
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This is a fun pirate poem. I just read Treasure Island for the first time (gasp) two years ago and I understand all of your dialogue and pun which would be right at home in the book. Your Double Etheree is well shaped and your lines adapt to it while keeping up the fun and puns. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2017
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Hi, Sis Cat! Your reviews are ones that I always enjoy reading. I'm happy to know that all of my dialogue and pun would be right at home in the Book. Did you like Treasure Island? I loved it. Thanks for your kind words of review.
Best,
jeni
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Loved Treasure Island! I wish I had read it as a kid, but you are never too old to enjoy a good book.
Comment from papa55mike
Girl, you should have this one in a contest. This is very well written and I love the video and the font you chose. It really adds to the poem.
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2017
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Girl, you should have this one in a contest. This is very well written and I love the video and the font you chose. It really adds to the poem.
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 29-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2017
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Hi papa55mike,
I don't enter very many contests for a number of reasons. But I do enjoy writing just the same. I'm happy that you enjoyed this poem and the presentation. Thanks for your review.
Best,
luna
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Beware the pirate's code, maties.
Nicely formed and written poem that resonates across the ages.
Of course, we could extrapolate it to modern times and modern practices, take even the internet, where a mess-up could result in cyber bullying.
Lovely poem
Rhonda
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2017
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Beware the pirate's code, maties.
Nicely formed and written poem that resonates across the ages.
Of course, we could extrapolate it to modern times and modern practices, take even the internet, where a mess-up could result in cyber bullying.
Lovely poem
Rhonda
Comment Written 29-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2017
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Hey, woman!
Oh geez, let's not even think about taking it to the internet, there's enough cyber-bullying going on *smile*! I'm happy that you found my poem well written and resonating. Thanks, as always, for your review, my friend.
Best,
jeni
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Dead Men Tell No Tales, looks like a diatelle or another similar form that builds from one to ten syllables and back. The walk-the-plank scene reminds me that Pirates of the Caribbean will be weighing anchor soon. Nice poem.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2017
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This poem, Dead Men Tell No Tales, looks like a diatelle or another similar form that builds from one to ten syllables and back. The walk-the-plank scene reminds me that Pirates of the Caribbean will be weighing anchor soon. Nice poem.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2017
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Bill, it's a double etheree. You're right, it builds from one to ten syllables and then back from 10 to 1 syllable. I'm happy that you liked this poem and thank you for the review.
Best,
jeni
Comment from ProSongwriter
Hey Jeni,
You're rolling them out one after another! This was such a delightful, funny poem. All I need is a sword, wooden leg and a parrot and I'm ready to set sail!
Nicely done ... a great read! enjoy your Sunday!
Alan
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2017
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Hey Jeni,
You're rolling them out one after another! This was such a delightful, funny poem. All I need is a sword, wooden leg and a parrot and I'm ready to set sail!
Nicely done ... a great read! enjoy your Sunday!
Alan
Comment Written 29-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2017
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Alan,
I'm glad that you enjoyed this one. I had fun writing it. You enjoy your Sunday as well, and thanks as always for the review...I know I owe you a couple. I'm trying to answer a backlog of reviews and then ILL get to reviewing. Thanks for your patience.
Best,
jeni
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You are welcome! And don't worry about when you get mine ... they'll be there when you get to them! You're a busy lady!!!!
Alan
Comment from c_lucas
It is no good to live one's life only to find out it was wasted. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2017
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It is no good to live one's life only to find out it was wasted. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2017
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Thanks for the interesting review, charlie. I appreciate it.
Best,
luna
