Comment from AnnaLinda

Excellent

Dean,

This is a very interesting project you and Gypsy have taken on.
Wow, you think this haiku could be more alliterated? It works really well
and reads smoothly.

Your last line leaves readers in suspense and maybe a bit concerned.
Nefarious is a brilliant choice. Fantastic presentation as well.

Linda

 Comment Written 16-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016

Thank you very much for checking this out, Linda.
There's a link to a synopsis provided in my author's notes if you need to get up to date with what's been going on in the story.
It isn't very long.
Much appreciated.
~Dean :}

Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

She has arrived and found her daughter.
I know she was not a good mother so I wonder what she has in mind for her now.
I messed up the last one and tried to read something in that was not there. Haiku's still baffle me

 Comment Written 16-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016

Oh well, Barb. Haiku can do that to us sometimes.
There is a link to a synopsis of the entire story if you'd like to read it. It might help you better understand what's going on since from the very beginning.
Thanks again!
Take care,
~Dean :}

Comment from sandy montgomery

Excellent

Cool continuation. Awesome allieration. This is a great addition to your book. I love the artwork too. Good work. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 16-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016

Again, that you very much for reading and following along, Sandy.
It is appreciated.

Comment from sanejane

Excellent

A mother watches over her child, her only desire to draw her into the black arts.

Is this love, I wonder.

Great alliteration, beautiful presentation.

Dean and Gypsy, king and queen of of dark imagery on FS.

All the best,

Jane.

 Comment Written 16-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016

You've got it, jane.
And hey, if you need to het up to date with what's happened in the story so far, there is a link to a brief synopsis in my author's notes in case you'd like to read it.
All my best, and thanks again.
~Dean :}

reply by sanejane on 16-Nov-2016

I've already sneaked over there, and read them. I wasn't following Gypsy Blue Rose, so I've corrected that. It would be silly to only get half of the story.

Warmly,
Jane

Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

This one is definitely a team effort between artist and poet. The threat is clear both in the artwork and in the wording of the haiku. I was just now trying to expain in a review that a poet can and should use more than the simple dictionary meaning of his words. You use every device you can to give these short pieces the gravitas you intend them to have.

 Comment Written 16-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016

Thanks for reading, Jim.
Much obliged.
~Dean

Comment from Dawn Munro

Excellent

Here we go again - I must be doing it subconsciously or something - LOL. I am about to go back to bed and I wanted to visit your latest posting to be sure I'm not missing anything...anyway, now THIS is in my head. Thanks a whole LOT. (Heh, heh) Fabulous, Dean.

 Comment Written 16-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016

Hahaha, don't mention it, dawn.
What're fiends friends for?
Take care, and thanks again for reading.
Nighty-nite!
~Dean :}

Comment from William Ross

Excellent

A great ad to the book, the witch watches the child sleep while planning on teaching her the witchery trade. thanks for the share and have a great day

 Comment Written 16-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016

Thanks for reading, Will.
Much obliged.
~Dean

Comment from barkingdog

Excellent

Naamah has tracked her daughter who is now a vampire (surprise Mommie!)
to Bran Castle. Mirela has found her own calling and it's not in her
mother's footsteps. haha

Nice alliteration, Dean.
Fantastic addition to the story.

:) ellen

 Comment Written 16-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016

Thanks for reading, "e".
Much obliged.
~Dean

Comment from DR DIP

Excellent

Nice alliteration in this one Deano You and gypsy are obviously having a lot of fun with these When is the book coming out?

dip

 Comment Written 16-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016

Thanks for reading, Dip..
Much obliged.
~Deano

Comment from Aussie

Exceptional

Great Hora Haiku. The illustration was perfect for a watching wily witch. Sad to think supposed witches were hung because of ignorance. Healing women with gifts given to help the sick. Your witch is a bad mother - hope she doesn't capture her daughter for the dark arts!

 Comment Written 16-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 17-Nov-2016

Hello, Kay.
Thank you very much for reading and keeping up with this story. Both Gypsy Blue Rose and I greatly appreciate your support for this project, and I appreciate your enthusiastic reply and six stars.
Take care, my friend, and thanks again for reading.