Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Hello my friend

I like your poem about relationships. To be married to a man with anger issues must be very hard

I like the stanza



This problematic man of mine
creates a life of doom and gloom.
His mission is to find life's flaws
and suck the joy from ev'ry room.

LoL

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2016

Thank you for your understanding review Gypsy. Since I'm the 3rd wife, I should have seen the signs but what is the saying, "Too soon old, too late schmart".
He does have some anger issues but with some boundaries established, he's doing very well. it's been 3 years since we had the "come to Jesus meeting" and I actually think we are both happier.

Thanks again
Janet

Comment from Javed05

Excellent

I like this poem . I found it is engaging for the reader and it flows smoothly. language used is great and creates good imagery.thanks for sharing with us

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2016

Thank you for your understanding review.

Blessings
Janet

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

You did a great job with this poem. The picture is fitting. I like the way your lines flow smoothly with a great message about how this change happened.

[ his manners' like an angry bear.

the way manners' is written makes it seem as if it owns something, but manner's would be wring as that would need to be written manners are.

I would write it like this [but you are the author, I understand.--his manners are an angry bear.]

Thanks for sharing. I can clearly understand the conflict you faced & how a change for the better happened. Jan

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2016

Thank you for your understanding review and for your suggestion. I will definitely look at that line again.

Blessings
Janet

Comment from Thomas Bowling

Excellent

A great story. Some don't believe it but people can change. There is a limit, though. Some people enter into a relationship thinking that in time the can mold someone into what they want them to be. This rarely happens. Your blessing is the exception, not the rule.

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2016

Thank you for your understanding review Thomas. I believe people can change IF they want to. They don't change because someone else wants them to. So he may not have really change but....his behavior has changed and that works for me.

Blessings
Janet

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Hi there, so sorry to hear you'd had a struggle like this. Can't have been easy. A wonderful poem and I really like the comparison to the bear. Really put it all into perspective. All the best. Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2016

Thank you for your understanding review. It wasn't and still isn't always easy all the time but we have to stay the course. He's a good man but he has lots of demons to deal with and for the most part with the grace of God is overcoming them.

Blessings
Janet

Comment from BlueTiger

Excellent

Great job on this poem. The 'angry bear' is a good metaphor. You really nail the experience of living with this type of person, making this a relatable piece, but you write out of a spirit of love and hope rather than anger. I like the line, 'he took my words into the night'. Good work.

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2016

Thank you for your thoughtful and understanding review and for sharing the line that you liked.

Blessings
Janet

Comment from Sis Cat

Excellent

What a bear of a man! This is a fine, rhymed autobiographical poem about a problem which bedeviled you and you have now overcome. The line that touched me was

"His mission is to find life's flaws
and suck the joy from ev'ry room."

This is a sad and devastating analysis.

I am grateful that through God and prayer your family was able to get hope and survive. Thank you for sharing. I wish you and your family peace.

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 12-Nov-2016

Thank you for your understanding review. I am happy to say, I don't worry near as much today about his ruining the day with his sarcasm and mean spirit hat hurt loved ones. I'm not sure he has actually changed but he is learning self-control and that goes a long way.

Blessings
Janet.

Comment from Jasmine Salters

Average

I'm glad you were able to share something so close to your heart. I wish you and your man luck in the future, and feel free to write a poem about it 10 years from now and share it with us. :)

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 Comment Written 10-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2016

Thank you for your thoughtful and understanding review.

Blessings
Janet

Comment from Lena Borghi

Excellent

A true testament to commitment. I was so happy to read that last stanza of this poem. It is said that people don't change, but they sometimes do, when they have an important motivator and what better motivator than love? I can relate.

I enjoyed reading your well rhymed poem and I thank you for sharing it.

Best wishes for continues success.

Lena

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 12-Nov-2016

Thank you Lena for your understanding review. I am happy to say, I don't worry near as much today about his ruining the day with his sarcasm and mean spirit that hurt loved ones. I'm not sure he has actually changed but he is learning self-control and that goes a long way.

Blessings
Janet.

reply by Lena Borghi on 12-Nov-2016

It sure does. Baby steps!

Comment from nancy_e_davis

Excellent

Outstanding, Janet. Good job comparing your man to a Grizzly Bear...This problematic man of mine creates a life of gloom and doom. His mission is to find life's flaws and suck the joy from every room....Such a person does just that and can ruin everyone's day. Well done my friend. X Nancy

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 12-Nov-2016

Thank you Nancy for your thoughtful and understanding review. I always appreciate your comments.

Blessings and hope you are doing well.
Janet