Comment from Briergate

Excellent

This is so full of imagery and longing. I like it a lot. And, as a Yorkshire lass, the picture really appeals too. Well done with this tricky structure, it works really well.

 Comment Written 11-May-2016

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reply by the author on 11-May-2016

Thanks Briergate, for your great comments. This is my first triolet and I found it hard to put real emotion into it. It was a bit sing songy and trite when I finished. Thanks again for your kind thoughts.

Senyai

Comment from VaV-VOOM

Excellent

Awesome poetry my friend, I really like reviewing this poem. All the way through the poem, I got a since the write could see the future; With the line "Oh love, my love who'll stray twice more" was as if they knew what was up. Anyway, this poem to me flowed nicely, with only one, or two places where I stumbled. (me, not you) great read, thank you for sharing. VaV-VOOM!

 Comment Written 11-May-2016

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reply by the author on 11-May-2016

Thanks, VaV-Voom, for your great review. I attempted my first triolet and found it rather difficult to achieve real emotion in the poem. I have a long way to go on learning this form, but will keep trying, lol.

Thanks again,
Senyai

reply by VaV-VOOM on 12-May-2016

Your so welcome. VaV-VOOM!

Comment from Jim Lorson Sr

Excellent

A wonderful contest entry starting with this truly gorgeous artwork. This brings to life the words of this excellent poem and I wish you the best of luck.

 Comment Written 11-May-2016

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reply by the author on 11-May-2016

Thanks, Jim. Your words of encouragement are truly appreciated :)
Senyai

Comment from MacMhuirich

Excellent

This is a wonderful poem. Good form, structure and the repetition gives it a mournful feel. Good imagery and I love the picture, it reminds me of home in Scotland. Best wishes for the contest.
Bless you
John

 Comment Written 11-May-2016

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reply by the author on 11-May-2016

MacMhuirich, I would love to visit Scotland. You're lucky to have lived in such a lovely country. Thanks for your encouraging words and well wishes.

Senyai :)

Comment from Mary Wakeford

Excellent

Quite a sad yet feeling poem reflecting the ravage effects of mistrust in a relationship. The imagery for accompaniment is lovely.

 Comment Written 11-May-2016

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reply by the author on 11-May-2016

Thanks, Mary, for such a lovely review and kind thoughts. They mean so much. :)

Senyai

reply by the author on 11-May-2016

Thanks, Mary, for such a lovely review and kind thoughts. They mean so much. :)

Senyai

Comment from DonandVicki

Excellent

A beautiful and we'll composed poetic verse accompanied by an equally beautiful art work. Very nice and the poem is very smooth to read out loud.

 Comment Written 11-May-2016

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reply by the author on 11-May-2016

DonandVicki, I appreciate your time to review my work and found your words encouraging. Thank you.

Senyai

reply by the author on 11-May-2016

DonandVicki, I appreciate your time to review my work and found your words encouraging. Thank you.

Senyai

Comment from Rookette

Excellent

This is so beautifully articulated. How lovely your words are. I think that the line you chose to repeat was absolutely perfect. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. This is a fantastic entry!! xoLeslie

 Comment Written 10-May-2016

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reply by the author on 11-May-2016

Rookette, thanks for the excellent review and kind thoughts that mean so much.

Senyai

reply by the author on 11-May-2016

Rookette, thanks for the excellent review and kind thoughts that mean so much.

Senyai

Comment from Dawn Munro

Excellent

What a marvelous yet extremely sorrowful triolet, your repeat lines flowing into the rest beautifully, the language almost musical. When a poem has so many repeat lines it's not easy to make it as gorgeous as you've done - bravo, and good luck in te contest!

 Comment Written 10-May-2016

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reply by the author on 11-May-2016

Ideasaregems-Dawn, thank you for the review of my triolet. Your encouraging words and kind thoughts made my day:)

Senyai

reply by the author on 11-May-2016

Ideasaregems-Dawn, thank you for the review of my triolet. Your encouraging words and kind thoughts made my day:)

Senyai

reply by Dawn Munro on 12-May-2016

Oh, I'm glad you were pleased - it was very much my pleasure to read it!

Comment from jonathan1

Excellent

This is an entertaining piece. I love the structure and the repetition. It reads easily and flows very well. Nice imagery and it successfully tells a story that captivates the reader

 Comment Written 10-May-2016

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reply by the author on 10-May-2016

Thank you kindly, Johathan. You are very kind and generous with your review of my work. Thanks for your time and thoughts.

Senyai:)

Comment from InfinitePeace

Good

This feels very Gothic. The triolet form gives it a nice flow with effective use of the repeated lines. It is a very simple idea, but the patterns make it fun and enjoyable to read. The title pulled from the "heathered moors" line also raises questions as to the significance of that place, and allows the reader to look more deeply into the poem.

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 Comment Written 10-May-2016

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reply by the author on 10-May-2016

Hi InfinitePeace,
I thank you for the detailed review and thoughts on my work. I appreciate your time very much.
Senyai:)