My Life with Dad
The first man I fell in love with. I called him Dad.33 total reviews
Comment from Marykelly
You are berating yourself for not including so much more about your father in the eulogy you delivered for him. No matter how much time passes from a father's death the emptiness is always there and you have filled your emptiness with wonderful detailed stories about your dad that are in writing not just in thoughts so they have a permanence to them.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2016
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You are berating yourself for not including so much more about your father in the eulogy you delivered for him. No matter how much time passes from a father's death the emptiness is always there and you have filled your emptiness with wonderful detailed stories about your dad that are in writing not just in thoughts so they have a permanence to them.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2016
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Thank you, Mary, for the RR&R, and continued support. Very much appreciated. Yes, this was a very personal piece that was written with permanence in mind for my children and theirs. I appreciate your words very much. Have a wonderful weekend.
Comment from Helen Bach
What a lovely, well written tribute to your father. Touching, sensitive and I was left with a sense that I actually knew your father at the end. I smiled at the bread and butter pudding and respected the integrity and decency and humour. If you ever find yourself missing your dad you can just read this piece again and it brings him back to life. A lovely piece and I'm pleased I came across it.
Not sure if 'as touching I have ever' needs 'as touching (as any) I have ever' or something.
My kindest regards xx
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2016
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What a lovely, well written tribute to your father. Touching, sensitive and I was left with a sense that I actually knew your father at the end. I smiled at the bread and butter pudding and respected the integrity and decency and humour. If you ever find yourself missing your dad you can just read this piece again and it brings him back to life. A lovely piece and I'm pleased I came across it.
Not sure if 'as touching I have ever' needs 'as touching (as any) I have ever' or something.
My kindest regards xx
Comment Written 15-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2016
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Thank you, Helen, for your kind read, review and rating. This was such a personal write and one that I hope will resonate with my children's children many years from now.
Thank you for the suggestion too, I have made a change to the entire sentence as a result of your keen. I am always surprised at how many obvious errors I seem to miss in my continual edits! Have a great weekend.
Comment from CEO2020
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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2016
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Hi. Good luck in the contest. I read your profile page. I'm an aspiring author and if you have the time I would like your review of my short story called Justifiable Delirium. I sense you are an intense reader and writer, and that your feedback will be helpful.
Thanks
Comment Written 15-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2016
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Thank you for the RR&R, ce02020. I very much appreciate you taking the time to review my work. I've made a note of your title and will take a look at it when I get a chance. Appreciate you stopping by and reviewing. Have a great Friday!
Comment from ioana.u
It's such an emotional eulogy, I'm not sure what I could say about it. You have captured and shared a wonderful life. If I may say, you are lucky you had the chance to say good bye to your father before his passing, even if it was also painful. I loved the idea of the first and the last man. Thank you for sharing these beautiful private thoughts!
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2016
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It's such an emotional eulogy, I'm not sure what I could say about it. You have captured and shared a wonderful life. If I may say, you are lucky you had the chance to say good bye to your father before his passing, even if it was also painful. I loved the idea of the first and the last man. Thank you for sharing these beautiful private thoughts!
Comment Written 15-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2016
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Thank you very much, Ioana, for your kind read, review, and rating. Very much appreciated. I thank my dad often for the gift of shaving him that morning. I will always have the memory of that tender moment. Have a blessed day.
Comment from AnnaLinda
Mary,
Now you have my eyes tearing...
This is a very touching piece about your dad.
April 12th this year and every year must be
a very emotional day for you.
I like how you offered a background on your father.
I remember the story of your mom and dad meeting on the train.
It's something that she may have helped him have hope to be
safe and come home from his service.
You have plenty of examples of his kindness and love for
you and his family. You were quite the little girl yourself.
You kept your parents busy it seems.
That last scene of you shaving your dad is very memorable
for your readers too. I'm sorry for your loss, yet happy that
you had such a loving dad.
I guess there are really not enough stars to give away for this
one.
Linda
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2016
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Mary,
Now you have my eyes tearing...
This is a very touching piece about your dad.
April 12th this year and every year must be
a very emotional day for you.
I like how you offered a background on your father.
I remember the story of your mom and dad meeting on the train.
It's something that she may have helped him have hope to be
safe and come home from his service.
You have plenty of examples of his kindness and love for
you and his family. You were quite the little girl yourself.
You kept your parents busy it seems.
That last scene of you shaving your dad is very memorable
for your readers too. I'm sorry for your loss, yet happy that
you had such a loving dad.
I guess there are really not enough stars to give away for this
one.
Linda
Comment Written 14-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2016
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Thank you so very much, Linda. I appreciate your words more than the stars. Good to hear from you and hope all is going well at beachside. I like your new profile picture...beautiful!
Thanks again for sharing your time and thoughts with me.
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My pleasure Mary. It's good to read what a good father is.
Comment from JTStone
You have an amazing story to tell of the man you called. 'Father'.
All the memories, all the love that you shared and held in your heart can't possibly be put into words that match the feelings you relay. You brushed the surface here as best as anyone could.
It is the space between the lines, the area water stained by your unseeing tears on my screen that is obvious to me. It's still heart wrenching all these years later. That was why you felt the need to write this down...because you still love and miss your dad.
I know it's been years, It's incredible how tight the bond remains.
Jimmy
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2016
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You have an amazing story to tell of the man you called. 'Father'.
All the memories, all the love that you shared and held in your heart can't possibly be put into words that match the feelings you relay. You brushed the surface here as best as anyone could.
It is the space between the lines, the area water stained by your unseeing tears on my screen that is obvious to me. It's still heart wrenching all these years later. That was why you felt the need to write this down...because you still love and miss your dad.
I know it's been years, It's incredible how tight the bond remains.
Jimmy
Comment Written 14-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2016
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Thank you very much, Jimmy, for your RR&R. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review a longer commitment. You have a great way of explaining the write. Thank you. My other intent is to place on paper for all those who follow, their family roots and stories. My own kind of geneology :) Thank you again for your generous rating. All the best, Mary
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Mary
what a very touching story about your love for your dad.
I'm sure being such a wonderful sounding dad he appreciates your thoughts of him now when he is Gods' heavenly home.
you wrote this year the 19th anniversary of him passing away.
Gert
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2016
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Hello Mary
what a very touching story about your love for your dad.
I'm sure being such a wonderful sounding dad he appreciates your thoughts of him now when he is Gods' heavenly home.
you wrote this year the 19th anniversary of him passing away.
Gert
Comment Written 13-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2016
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Thank you, Gert, for your rr&r, and lovely comments. Yes, I originally wrote this last year over coffee as I contemplated the date and thoughts of him. That is why I added the "Revised" ahead of title. I will likely post it every year on April 12th. Thank you again. Mary
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Thank you, Gert, for your rr&r, and lovely comments. Yes, I originally wrote this last year over coffee as I contemplated the date and thoughts of him. That is why I added the "Revised" ahead of title. I will likely post it every year on April 12th. Thank you again. Mary
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You are welcome Mary
Take care.
Gert
Comment from TallySally
Mary - Your father was a wonderful man, husband, parent, and friend. It is so obvious that you loved him - you should not beat yourself up for the original eulogy. Your last sentence in your author's notes gives the reason eloquently.
It fell to me to bring the message when my father's ashes were interred in the family crypt. My message was stiff and impersonal. My brain and heart couldn't handle anything more at the time. I've felt bad about that at the time and many times since - funny that my brother and my niece have told me, separately, in the many years since, that they were touched by my words.
Your piece is thoughtfully and lovingly written. The wording and presentation does perfect justice to your subject and demonstrates your considerable skill as a writer.
God bless and my best,
Relda
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2016
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Mary - Your father was a wonderful man, husband, parent, and friend. It is so obvious that you loved him - you should not beat yourself up for the original eulogy. Your last sentence in your author's notes gives the reason eloquently.
It fell to me to bring the message when my father's ashes were interred in the family crypt. My message was stiff and impersonal. My brain and heart couldn't handle anything more at the time. I've felt bad about that at the time and many times since - funny that my brother and my niece have told me, separately, in the many years since, that they were touched by my words.
Your piece is thoughtfully and lovingly written. The wording and presentation does perfect justice to your subject and demonstrates your considerable skill as a writer.
God bless and my best,
Relda
Comment Written 13-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2016
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Thank you very much, Relda, for your RR&R. I appreciate your experience and feelings of inadequacy in dealing with your father's death too, it must be a common thing we feel, owing so much to the parents who built us up. I am sorry for your loss.
Thank you so much for your compliments on my writing and this piece. <3
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Thank you very much, Relda, for your RR&R. I appreciate your experience and feelings of inadequacy in dealing with your father's death too, it must be a common thing we feel, owing so much to the parents who built us up. I am sorry for your loss.
Thank you so much for your compliments on my writing and this piece. <3
Comment from Douglas Paul
This is the most tender and touching story I have read on this site. You had my eyes teary by the time I finished. What a wonderful tribute to your father and the relationship the two of you shared. Just fantastic, Mary
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016
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This is the most tender and touching story I have read on this site. You had my eyes teary by the time I finished. What a wonderful tribute to your father and the relationship the two of you shared. Just fantastic, Mary
Comment Written 12-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016
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Thank you very much, Doug. Your continued reviews are very much appreciated. Have a great day.
Comment from chcbeck
Its the hardest thing to do when in the midst of grief. I am sure he knew all this anyway. Its a great tribute and an interesting tale to share, he certainly had a colorful life.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016
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Its the hardest thing to do when in the midst of grief. I am sure he knew all this anyway. Its a great tribute and an interesting tale to share, he certainly had a colorful life.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016
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Thank you very much, Chcbeck for the read, review and rating. Much appreciated! Yes indeed, a good man and a great life.
