Comment from garrymc5

Excellent

I was definitely involved in your story, so... success there. But I was stunned that you did not meet again! You convinced me that this was not fiction, so again, success. I really wanted 'you' to have the courage to continue to meet.
Good effort.

 Comment Written 19-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 19-Jan-2015

Thank you very much for sharing and your kind praise. Yes, this is fiction, and I thought about a happier ending until I realized Billy's ego & pride would trump any quick victory. Maybe when he's older (like me), he'll realize his mistake.

Comment from Dopeless Hopefiend

Excellent

This was a well written writing prompt! A short but well structured and well formatted story. The dialogue was written very well as well, very realistic. All in all I'd say this was a great contest entry and I wish you the best of luck!

Again, best wishes,

-D.H

 Comment Written 19-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 19-Jan-2015

Thank you so much, D.H. for sharing my story, your kind praise, and best wishes.

Comment from skye

Excellent

Wow. I never saw the ending coming like that. I thought this was going to be a "happily ever after" story, but no, fate stepped in once again, and both are left alone.
Excellent set up and writing.
Well done.

 Comment Written 19-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 19-Jan-2015

I am so pleased you shared and enjoyed my story. Thanks for your kind praise, too.

Comment from Eric1

Excellent

This is a wonderful story for this Fate competition, It is well written with good characterisation and good believable dialogue, great twist in the end, Good luck in the contest my friend.

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 Comment Written 19-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 19-Jan-2015

Thank you, Eric, for sharing my story and your wonderful praise.

reply by Eric1 on 20-Jan-2015

You are welcome my friend