That summer
Sonnet47 total reviews
Comment from RYME4U
Excellent! I got a chill reading this. The rhyme and rhythm of the sonnet are done in perfect form. What a lovely tale of summer love. great job
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Excellent! I got a chill reading this. The rhyme and rhythm of the sonnet are done in perfect form. What a lovely tale of summer love. great job
Comment Written 10-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2014
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Thank you!
Steve
Comment from mikemagine
The inescapable passage of Time. We get old and we wonder if we've really lived life or if there is any other things we can do. This is kind of sad, but it's a very fine poem!
Mike
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The inescapable passage of Time. We get old and we wonder if we've really lived life or if there is any other things we can do. This is kind of sad, but it's a very fine poem!
Mike
Comment Written 10-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2014
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Thank you. The older we get, the more time becomes important.
Steve
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Yes:-)
Comment from nancyjam
This is a fantastic Sonnet.
I love the vineyard theme that runs through
each stanza as metaphor for a blooming love
that withers and dies.
Excellent rhyme and meter, wonderful imagery,
A sad but powerful closing couplet.
Best of luck in the contest. Should do well. Nancy
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2014
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This is a fantastic Sonnet.
I love the vineyard theme that runs through
each stanza as metaphor for a blooming love
that withers and dies.
Excellent rhyme and meter, wonderful imagery,
A sad but powerful closing couplet.
Best of luck in the contest. Should do well. Nancy
Comment Written 10-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2014
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Nancy, thanks so much for the fantastic review and the six glittery stars.
I'm glad you got the vineyard theme - This went through several versions and some of the imagery got chopped and changed.
Steve
Comment from Louise Michelle
Hi Steve,
This was a pleasure to read, although melancholy. With such terrific meter, one can't help but get into the rhythm of your piece. The last stanza is really superb.
Hugs,
Lou
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2014
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Hi Steve,
This was a pleasure to read, although melancholy. With such terrific meter, one can't help but get into the rhythm of your piece. The last stanza is really superb.
Hugs,
Lou
Comment Written 10-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2014
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Lou, thanks so much for the warm review and the six stars. Yes, I seem to be on a dark and melancholy streak at the moment - I'd blame my muse if only I had one.
Steve
Comment from Dean Kuch
Wow, Steve. Such despondency resonates within each and every word of your wonderfully rhymed and well metered sonnet. The pangs of heartache and sorrow for a lost or unrequited love is truly morose and felt here as such.
The rhyming, timing, meter and cadence is perfectly suited to the sonnet form.
Simply brilliant, my talented friend!
Bravo...
Best of luck to you in the contest. I'm really glad I didn't enter this one now. :}
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2014
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Wow, Steve. Such despondency resonates within each and every word of your wonderfully rhymed and well metered sonnet. The pangs of heartache and sorrow for a lost or unrequited love is truly morose and felt here as such.
The rhyming, timing, meter and cadence is perfectly suited to the sonnet form.
Simply brilliant, my talented friend!
Bravo...
Best of luck to you in the contest. I'm really glad I didn't enter this one now. :}
Comment Written 10-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2014
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Thanks, Dean.
I seem to be on a dark and melancholy streak at the moment - I'd blame my muse if only I had one.
Steve
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Hey, you're welcome, Steve-oh, buddy!
You mean that you don't... have a muse, I mean?
Huh, that's interesting. How do you know for sure you don't have a muse, Steve? Or perhaps you yourself are your own muse. I got a muse, adewpearl's got a muse, Mikey Cahill's got a muse...all God's chil'ern got's a muse, heh-heh...
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But last I heard you were trying to get rid of yours!
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I didn't say I liked mine, especially. I just said we all have one. :}
Would you like mine? I'll send him right over...
Comment from Spitfire
Love the metaphor of food/drink:
Our passions overflowed upon the land;
We quaffed life's potent vintage to the lees.
The fruits of love
withered on the vine,
carefree harvest spill
bitter winter's chill seems to imply a sad end to this romance.
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2014
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Love the metaphor of food/drink:
Our passions overflowed upon the land;
We quaffed life's potent vintage to the lees.
The fruits of love
withered on the vine,
carefree harvest spill
bitter winter's chill seems to imply a sad end to this romance.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2014
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Thank you.
I seem to be on a dark and melancholy streak at the moment - I'd blame my muse if only I had one.
Steeve
Comment from royowen
I love the line "our passions overflowed on the land" the mind boggles. beautifully scribed sonnet, which I would think will do well in this comp. Beautifully worded poem, it fulfils all the criteria of the contest requirements, it has a nice cadence to it, the ababcc rhyming is near perfect, altogether, a good entry, well done, blessings Roy,
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2014
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I love the line "our passions overflowed on the land" the mind boggles. beautifully scribed sonnet, which I would think will do well in this comp. Beautifully worded poem, it fulfils all the criteria of the contest requirements, it has a nice cadence to it, the ababcc rhyming is near perfect, altogether, a good entry, well done, blessings Roy,
Comment Written 10-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2014
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Thanks, Roy.
Best not to go into that line too closely!
Steve
Comment from Veeb
Beautiful description of a summer romance. Very light and airy. Good description: "we roamed the sunburnt hillsides" (lovely). Great imagery: "fruits of love lay scattered in the dust" (romantic). Very good rhythm and an even flow throughout. The photo is a nice compliment. Everything here comes together nicely, and I wish you all the best in the contest. I enjoyed reading this very much.
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2014
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Beautiful description of a summer romance. Very light and airy. Good description: "we roamed the sunburnt hillsides" (lovely). Great imagery: "fruits of love lay scattered in the dust" (romantic). Very good rhythm and an even flow throughout. The photo is a nice compliment. Everything here comes together nicely, and I wish you all the best in the contest. I enjoyed reading this very much.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2014
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Thank you for the warm review.
Steve
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
This is a touching sonnet, well done in proper form with correct iambic pentameter. There is a good turn in the ninth line - something beyond the usual "but" or "yet". And I love the poignant final couplet.
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This is a touching sonnet, well done in proper form with correct iambic pentameter. There is a good turn in the ninth line - something beyond the usual "but" or "yet". And I love the poignant final couplet.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2014
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Jeanie, thanks for the warm review and the six stars.
Yes, I enjoy the feeling of a 'turn' without using the more common expression of it.
Steve
Comment from krys123
Steve;
excellent written composition, superb tempo and meter in this sonnet, brilliant romantic topic, imagination truly inventive and ingeniously descriptive, brilliantly metaphorical passages and most of all your excellent written similes and alliteration's are just but a few of what I considered and obtained from reading your sonnet as the forefront of your writing's specialities.
The rhyming was done excellently and neither forced nor labored as it also helped in the rhythmic flow with seem to flow so well throughout your writing.
Marvelous imagery that was so descriptive and expressive throughout your writing: "The deeds of summer withered on the vine, for autumn came as autumn always must." Going through the seasons to represent your relationship with an excellent representation of your love: "Those days we let the carefree harvest spill Are frozen now in bitter winter's chill." Excellent metaphor describing the end of your relationship.
Thank you so much for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you always Steve.
Alex
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2014
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Steve;
excellent written composition, superb tempo and meter in this sonnet, brilliant romantic topic, imagination truly inventive and ingeniously descriptive, brilliantly metaphorical passages and most of all your excellent written similes and alliteration's are just but a few of what I considered and obtained from reading your sonnet as the forefront of your writing's specialities.
The rhyming was done excellently and neither forced nor labored as it also helped in the rhythmic flow with seem to flow so well throughout your writing.
Marvelous imagery that was so descriptive and expressive throughout your writing: "The deeds of summer withered on the vine, for autumn came as autumn always must." Going through the seasons to represent your relationship with an excellent representation of your love: "Those days we let the carefree harvest spill Are frozen now in bitter winter's chill." Excellent metaphor describing the end of your relationship.
Thank you so much for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you always Steve.
Alex
Comment Written 10-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2014
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Alex, thanks so much for the great review of my sonnet and for the good luck wishes in your other message - I truly appreciate it.
Steve
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You are so sincerely welcome Steve. Peace to you always.
Alex
