No Elephants Live in Encino
a bit of poetic whimsy154 total reviews
Comment from Ben Colder
Good advice Sawyer. Ants are much more interesting. Besides they want step on you. Just the other way around. Well done Brooke. Made my day.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014
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Good advice Sawyer. Ants are much more interesting. Besides they want step on you. Just the other way around. Well done Brooke. Made my day.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014
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Ben, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from Leineco
LOL. . .even in your whimsical, light-hearted moments
you manage to entertain me with your skip-and-hop
merrily down the street atmosphere :-)
Very fun (and silly) poem to read. It went very nicely with my
mid-day coffee cake and tea!
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014
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LOL. . .even in your whimsical, light-hearted moments
you manage to entertain me with your skip-and-hop
merrily down the street atmosphere :-)
Very fun (and silly) poem to read. It went very nicely with my
mid-day coffee cake and tea!
Comment Written 18-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much, Leineco, for your kind response to my silliness :-) Brooke
Comment from Eric1
This is a very very humorous poem Brooke, I love the lovely way you have set it out, a poem that will appeal to all age groups, great rhyming and rhythm, and a lovely smooth flow.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014
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This is a very very humorous poem Brooke, I love the lovely way you have set it out, a poem that will appeal to all age groups, great rhyming and rhythm, and a lovely smooth flow.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014
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Eric, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
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You are welcome Brooke
Comment from Rummy500
very good poem and worthy of my 5 star review
and already is marked for greaatness and with 2 ribbons already
very good and 5 stars to you!
keep up the great work.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014
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very good poem and worthy of my 5 star review
and already is marked for greaatness and with 2 ribbons already
very good and 5 stars to you!
keep up the great work.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014
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Rummy, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from NicciFaye
Too cute! I love the 3rd stanza of looking straight into the elephant's knees. I also love how it ended off in the last stanza of looking for ants. A beautiful and embracing write Brooke!
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014
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Too cute! I love the 3rd stanza of looking straight into the elephant's knees. I also love how it ended off in the last stanza of looking for ants. A beautiful and embracing write Brooke!
Comment Written 18-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014
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NicciFaye, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from judiverse
This is a lot of fun, and it sounds like something a child would be thinking about--whether there are elephants living in the neighborhood. The observation that there aren't any bananas for it to eat is delightful. Looking at an elephant's knees is a wonderful observation, because that's what a child would be thinking. Great lead-up to the conclusion about looking for ants. Wonderful rhyme in this. judi
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014
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This is a lot of fun, and it sounds like something a child would be thinking about--whether there are elephants living in the neighborhood. The observation that there aren't any bananas for it to eat is delightful. Looking at an elephant's knees is a wonderful observation, because that's what a child would be thinking. Great lead-up to the conclusion about looking for ants. Wonderful rhyme in this. judi
Comment Written 18-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014
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Thanks so much, Judi :-) Brooke
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Very welcome. It was really fun to read. judi
Comment from dragonpoet
This is a cute easily rhymed poem that tells of a child's view of the world. It shows how easily they learn not to look for things that can't possibly happen unlike some adults. It also shows that taking time for the possible might make your world happier.
Sawyer seems to be looking with such scientisticly serious interest.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014
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This is a cute easily rhymed poem that tells of a child's view of the world. It shows how easily they learn not to look for things that can't possibly happen unlike some adults. It also shows that taking time for the possible might make your world happier.
Sawyer seems to be looking with such scientisticly serious interest.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 18-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014
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Joan, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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You are so very welcome, Brooke.
Joan
Comment from Hareem.S
This is a cute picture of your curious grandson examining the wonders of nature. I like the idea of elephant in the poem. Its very novel. Enjoyed reading the poem.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014
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This is a cute picture of your curious grandson examining the wonders of nature. I like the idea of elephant in the poem. Its very novel. Enjoyed reading the poem.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014
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Hareem, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from emrpoems
No elephants live in Encino --
there isn't the slightest chance --
so next time my mom takes me walking,
I guess I'll be looking for ants. --Loved this whimsical ending verse.i am sure this will be a good poem in a children's book
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014
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No elephants live in Encino --
there isn't the slightest chance --
so next time my mom takes me walking,
I guess I'll be looking for ants. --Loved this whimsical ending verse.i am sure this will be a good poem in a children's book
Comment Written 18-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014
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emrpoems, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from Curly Girly
Ah, this is such a cute poem. If you really want to see elephants walking in the streets, then the town you need to visit is called 'Phalaborwa', South Africa.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014
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Ah, this is such a cute poem. If you really want to see elephants walking in the streets, then the town you need to visit is called 'Phalaborwa', South Africa.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014
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Curly Girly, thanks so very much :-) That must be a very cool town! :-) Brooke