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Viewing comments for Chapter 45 "Emptiness."Mostly romance.
39 total reviews
Comment from Seancuig
Hey Pili,
This is indeed a dark moment in time. Particularly the way you end it. It's an accomplished piece and an interesting mix with your normally more hopeful poems.
I know you write from experience, so I hope the dark moment passes soon.
I send a big Hug your way and hope it helps,
Take care,
Sean
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Hey Pili,
This is indeed a dark moment in time. Particularly the way you end it. It's an accomplished piece and an interesting mix with your normally more hopeful poems.
I know you write from experience, so I hope the dark moment passes soon.
I send a big Hug your way and hope it helps,
Take care,
Sean
Comment Written 23-Aug-2005
Comment from Jon Kuntz
There are other ways to deal with memories. I already heard you describe
some ways that seemed gracious to me. I say capture them, put them
in a bottle, examine them, put them to the light, and see which ones will stay.
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There are other ways to deal with memories. I already heard you describe
some ways that seemed gracious to me. I say capture them, put them
in a bottle, examine them, put them to the light, and see which ones will stay.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2005
Comment from bayley
The style of this poem suits the theme very well. It's as if each word is alone and feels the emptiness. The style means that we read each line as if it's the next thought in your process of examination of your being. I love it ~Sean
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The style of this poem suits the theme very well. It's as if each word is alone and feels the emptiness. The style means that we read each line as if it's the next thought in your process of examination of your being. I love it ~Sean
Comment Written 23-Aug-2005
Comment from fly4hi
Pain is a harsh master. Time heals but sometimes
it takes too much time and we feel we cannot endure
for so long.
Falling in love is awfully simple,
Falling out of love is simply awful.
Very sad and melancholy write.
Best to you Pili. :} jonn
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Pain is a harsh master. Time heals but sometimes
it takes too much time and we feel we cannot endure
for so long.
Falling in love is awfully simple,
Falling out of love is simply awful.
Very sad and melancholy write.
Best to you Pili. :} jonn
Comment Written 23-Aug-2005
Comment from DySaintDrama
Nice touch here Pili:
"the pain
is gone,
numbness
remains,
like cork
floating
around."
Good imagery - Jeff
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Nice touch here Pili:
"the pain
is gone,
numbness
remains,
like cork
floating
around."
Good imagery - Jeff
Comment Written 23-Aug-2005
Comment from Dreamdancer
Hi Miss P,
Wow... the undercurrent of emotions draws the reader into this piece. Memories of yesterday seem to still haunt the writer-- and this is something I can relate to. Thanks for sharing! Buddy
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Hi Miss P,
Wow... the undercurrent of emotions draws the reader into this piece. Memories of yesterday seem to still haunt the writer-- and this is something I can relate to. Thanks for sharing! Buddy
Comment Written 22-Aug-2005
Comment from Lisloh
This dark moment has passed I assume...
Your Soul is very obvious in this one Pili.
The depths we reach because of pain
is phenomenal.
You have portrayed it quite
eloquently here.
Thank you for creating this and sharing.
Take care & be safe
Lisloh
No nits. Awesome write!!!!
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This dark moment has passed I assume...
Your Soul is very obvious in this one Pili.
The depths we reach because of pain
is phenomenal.
You have portrayed it quite
eloquently here.
Thank you for creating this and sharing.
Take care & be safe
Lisloh
No nits. Awesome write!!!!
Comment Written 22-Aug-2005
Comment from shelley kaye
wow
i do believe this is the best one i have read
so full of emotion
sadness and emtiness
but with a light of hope as well
great job here!
thanx for sharing :-)
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wow
i do believe this is the best one i have read
so full of emotion
sadness and emtiness
but with a light of hope as well
great job here!
thanx for sharing :-)
Comment Written 22-Aug-2005
Comment from sengwriter
Simply mourning comes out of an utter darkness, darkness in the background of the presentation, darkness in the form of a painful moment of emptiness.
This emptiness is not fully void, not that frustrating as you come to the end to say that memories of joys and meriment are still there to treasure, let some light be focussed on those cherishable moments of memories and memories even it may be would be able to bring an empty heart some enlightenment.
So my dear poet, let there be light, let this emptiness be filled with some valued possessions. When you write your grief, your lines seem to drop tears and when you write about some joyous moments your words seem to be dancing with glee.
You're really so versetile.
I had to like this poem of darkness too for its intense depth. Keep it up.
Gautam
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Simply mourning comes out of an utter darkness, darkness in the background of the presentation, darkness in the form of a painful moment of emptiness.
This emptiness is not fully void, not that frustrating as you come to the end to say that memories of joys and meriment are still there to treasure, let some light be focussed on those cherishable moments of memories and memories even it may be would be able to bring an empty heart some enlightenment.
So my dear poet, let there be light, let this emptiness be filled with some valued possessions. When you write your grief, your lines seem to drop tears and when you write about some joyous moments your words seem to be dancing with glee.
You're really so versetile.
I had to like this poem of darkness too for its intense depth. Keep it up.
Gautam
Comment Written 22-Aug-2005
Comment from chihuahua
Good rhythm I like the way that your words were spaced together like a skeleton. It kept the flow of the poem going along. I am not saying that the pug didn't help things they usually do. Your poem, however was well put together.
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Good rhythm I like the way that your words were spaced together like a skeleton. It kept the flow of the poem going along. I am not saying that the pug didn't help things they usually do. Your poem, however was well put together.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2005
