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Love Poem Poetry Contest28 total reviews
Comment from humpwhistle
Ah, fickle time, the pickle! It teases us then robs us.
Oi, knock it off!
I like your light-hearted entry for the Love Poem contest.
The love is truly implied by the length of your affair, and the gentle way you can mock it.
Good luck, Steve.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
Ah, fickle time, the pickle! It teases us then robs us.
Oi, knock it off!
I like your light-hearted entry for the Love Poem contest.
The love is truly implied by the length of your affair, and the gentle way you can mock it.
Good luck, Steve.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 15-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
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Mocking, what mocking...
Thanks, lee.
Steve
Comment from Stephen Wolff
A very wry little poem! Well written and expressed and with some inventive structures and rhymes. A well-worn theme though.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
A very wry little poem! Well written and expressed and with some inventive structures and rhymes. A well-worn theme though.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
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Thanks, Stephen.
Steve
Comment from Paul Sienicki
When we first loved, my love, the flames
Raged hot with passion's torch.
These lines say it all. Love is like a fire burning and consuming, sustaining our days of life. And until the end the true love will persevere and those who did not believe in our love are put to shame. Thank you for sharing this profound piece of romantic literature.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
When we first loved, my love, the flames
Raged hot with passion's torch.
These lines say it all. Love is like a fire burning and consuming, sustaining our days of life. And until the end the true love will persevere and those who did not believe in our love are put to shame. Thank you for sharing this profound piece of romantic literature.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
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Thanks for reviewing.
'profound romantic literature' it's not!
Steve
Comment from visionary1234
oh you gave me a chuckle with this one Steve - love your distinctively Oceanic (meaning almost-good-enough-to-be-an-Aussie) sense of humor. Here was I, expecting to see the softer, gentler side of kiwi in those first two lines ... and then Oi!
A novel entry!
;)S
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
oh you gave me a chuckle with this one Steve - love your distinctively Oceanic (meaning almost-good-enough-to-be-an-Aussie) sense of humor. Here was I, expecting to see the softer, gentler side of kiwi in those first two lines ... and then Oi!
A novel entry!
;)S
Comment Written 15-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
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Yeah, started off to write something serious but couldn't keep it up (tee hee) and you'll have to tell me more about the novel entry!
Steve
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'novel' meaning 'unusual/ unique' dear! though knowing you, you could probably sustain it for the length of a novel, probably in perfect anapestic! :)))))
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'novel' meaning 'unusual/ unique' dear! though knowing you, you could probably sustain it for the length of a novel, probably in perfect anapestic! :)))))
Comment from Firead
That is very funny and clever. I love the colours and artwork you've chosen to present your poem. Good rhyme and repitition is well used. I enjoyed the ride through life with you.
Very clever and witty work.
Thanks.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
That is very funny and clever. I love the colours and artwork you've chosen to present your poem. Good rhyme and repitition is well used. I enjoyed the ride through life with you.
Very clever and witty work.
Thanks.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
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thanks for the kind words.
Steve
Comment from SaluteDobby
Aww.. this was simply fantastic, Steve. You paint a heart-warming picture in the 1st 3 stanzas...the passion shared between the couple made me smile. The ending is a bit sad.. But that's how it is, I guess!!
All the best with the contest!!
Regards,
Namratha
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
Aww.. this was simply fantastic, Steve. You paint a heart-warming picture in the 1st 3 stanzas...the passion shared between the couple made me smile. The ending is a bit sad.. But that's how it is, I guess!!
All the best with the contest!!
Regards,
Namratha
Comment Written 15-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
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Thanks, Namratha.
all good things must come to an end....
Steve
Comment from Dean Kuch
Ah,>/I> but that's where you're wrong, kiwisteveh. Your narrator obviously remembers, or he wouldn't have said it, LOL...
This was a great, lighthearted look at love, how it begins in the beginning to be a burning, white hot passionate thing, to a ripe, old age, where love is, well... you just gotta take it as it comes.
Excellent rhyming, great presentation with the flaming lettering.
Really great job!
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reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
Ah,>/I> but that's where you're wrong, kiwisteveh. Your narrator obviously remembers, or he wouldn't have said it, LOL...
This was a great, lighthearted look at love, how it begins in the beginning to be a burning, white hot passionate thing, to a ripe, old age, where love is, well... you just gotta take it as it comes.
Excellent rhyming, great presentation with the flaming lettering.
Really great job!
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Comment Written 15-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
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Thanks, Dean
You're not even going to allow the poor old guy a tiny bit of poetic licence???
yes, this is just a funny poem - there are all sorts of ways for older people to express love.
Steve
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Hah ha, I loved it, Steve!
Comment from barkingdog
Very funny. Just when you have all the time in the world, you've forgotten how. LOL
Your rhyming quatrains have a nice even tempo. It is a very enjoyable piece.
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reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
Very funny. Just when you have all the time in the world, you've forgotten how. LOL
Your rhyming quatrains have a nice even tempo. It is a very enjoyable piece.
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Comment Written 15-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
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Thanks, bd.
Steve