The Animal Doctor
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Comment from emjaihammond
Nathan, like all soldiers who see combat, will probably never be fully the same. They always carry a piece of the fight with them. I like the way your story is told, it is easy to read an feels as if it travels well.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2013
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Nathan, like all soldiers who see combat, will probably never be fully the same. They always carry a piece of the fight with them. I like the way your story is told, it is easy to read an feels as if it travels well.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2013
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Thank you so much for reading and for this fine review. You're review has really helped me with my plot. You've really have helped my direction for next chapter.
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I'm so happy it helped. I'll be watching and waiting. I do love your story.
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Nathan has sure felt the brunt of war hasn't he?
I thoroughlly enjoyed this chapter and the reality of the war.
Well written and interesting with just a hint of romance flittering in.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2013
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Nathan has sure felt the brunt of war hasn't he?
I thoroughlly enjoyed this chapter and the reality of the war.
Well written and interesting with just a hint of romance flittering in.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2013
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Thank you seken58. I wanted to put more romance in this chapter, but it would be too long and my readers would complain. Thanks for enjoying the little bit I've included.
Comment from chasennov
The Animal Doctor. 'Of Love And War.' An excellent war story you have written here and I enjoyed very much reading this chapter. Well done.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2013
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The Animal Doctor. 'Of Love And War.' An excellent war story you have written here and I enjoyed very much reading this chapter. Well done.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2013
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Thank you chasennov. I hope you'll stay with me throughout my novella.
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You're most welcome.
Comment from Christof McTarnahan
While romance makes me gag(I am a horror guy), this kept my attention from beginning to end. I loved your character interaction and dialogue.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2013
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While romance makes me gag(I am a horror guy), this kept my attention from beginning to end. I loved your character interaction and dialogue.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2013
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Thank you horror guy; coming from you, that's quite a compliment. I appreciate you reading my Christof.
Comment from Ben Colder
Very good descripted story. You have a good way of building character. The time line is there and dialog is good. Mules were mostly Artillery carriers. 75 mm An officer by the name of Captain Harry Truman was all for making changes using animals. George Patton screamed replacement with tanks he imagined etc. I like Id the characters list etc. Well written. Nice job.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2013
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Very good descripted story. You have a good way of building character. The time line is there and dialog is good. Mules were mostly Artillery carriers. 75 mm An officer by the name of Captain Harry Truman was all for making changes using animals. George Patton screamed replacement with tanks he imagined etc. I like Id the characters list etc. Well written. Nice job.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2013
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Wow, thank you Ben. Are you a former military man? You really know your stuff; I appreciate you review my story. This has been a very valuable review.
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Yes. 8th Infantry, Post Korean. See my Bio and if you wish, Silver Star and Novel, So Dear To My Heart. Thanks again for a lovely story. Blessings
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Cool! and you're very welcome.
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Captain Harry Truman became the President of the U,S, April 1945. General George S Patton became the Genus for war leading our men through WW 2 victories. Thought you might wish to know.
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Thank you for the history listen. I really appreciate it.
Comment from writerwish
This is well written and kept me riveted to the page. I had never thought about the loss of animals in a war. How devastating and described well. Thoughts and speech as opposites was brought out well in last scene. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2013
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This is well written and kept me riveted to the page. I had never thought about the loss of animals in a war. How devastating and described well. Thoughts and speech as opposites was brought out well in last scene. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2013
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Oh thank you so much for the fine words of encouragement. I really appreciate this fine review.
Comment from c_lucas
War tales are some of the strangest to relate. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. Keep up the good work.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2013
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War tales are some of the strangest to relate. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. Keep up the good work.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2013
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Thank you lucas. Welcome back.
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You're welcome, Amahra. Charlie
Comment from marijmd
"The wound is infected. There's some neurological disorder as well." - Oh not good!
"My...my men..," he struggled to say. - well at least his memory seems in tack!
This war can't end too soon (for) me."
Still hung up over her after ll this time! ah that is sad
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2013
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"The wound is infected. There's some neurological disorder as well." - Oh not good!
"My...my men..," he struggled to say. - well at least his memory seems in tack!
This war can't end too soon (for) me."
Still hung up over her after ll this time! ah that is sad
Comment Written 04-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2013
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Thank you marijmd. I hate having to write my character into this war. But the story is set in that time period and it was no getting around it. I had to do research on WWI for hours and days on the accuracy of this war and still a reviewer pointed some things out which I had to correct. Believe me, I can't wait to end it.LOL
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I can imagine there are some ww1 buffs out there!
Comment from Zue65
I am so sad at how the love story of Margaret and Nathan ended up, how the war affected relationships, how the war killed so many soldiers with lives wasted and their stories ended just like that, the horses killed mercilessly, and limbs lost never to be repaired, the havoc of war is incomprehensible.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2013
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I am so sad at how the love story of Margaret and Nathan ended up, how the war affected relationships, how the war killed so many soldiers with lives wasted and their stories ended just like that, the horses killed mercilessly, and limbs lost never to be repaired, the havoc of war is incomprehensible.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2013
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Oh, I didn't mean to make you sad. Hang in there. This is not a story about war. It's about love in the early 20th century and the war just happen to come and disrupt lives. But I've got to get my characters out of this war and back to love. I'm making my readers sad. LOL
Thank you, my friend for reading. I really appreciate it.
Comment from barkingdog
Sad the view of war--all the suffering and death. You described it's gore and waste very well. I don't think I could write of all the animals suffering. I still see the one blown in half.
Suggestions:
-in the morning(,) and he felt a soft hand
-love my husband(,) and he's a good man and a good father."
- picture(,) and who was on the other side of the camera.
-I'll write your Mother and the Korens(,) if you'd like(,) and tell them I saw you(,) and you looked fine."
-fill her up with all the love he could stiff. (stiff?)
-"Margaret!" (skip a line)
She whirled around. "Yes."
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2013
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Sad the view of war--all the suffering and death. You described it's gore and waste very well. I don't think I could write of all the animals suffering. I still see the one blown in half.
Suggestions:
-in the morning(,) and he felt a soft hand
-love my husband(,) and he's a good man and a good father."
- picture(,) and who was on the other side of the camera.
-I'll write your Mother and the Korens(,) if you'd like(,) and tell them I saw you(,) and you looked fine."
-fill her up with all the love he could stiff. (stiff?)
-"Margaret!" (skip a line)
She whirled around. "Yes."
Comment Written 04-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2013
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Thank you dear, I made the corrections. I really did have to include the animal killings to show what animal-lovers like Nathan had to face in a war that included them. (animals) Hope you weren't turned-off. I tried to write it as delicately as I could.