Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

good use of rhyming couplets
good alliteration in bell and book/best
a fun look at what a day of play is like for little children
Brooke :-)

 Comment Written 23-Feb-2013

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013

thanks so much - love, jan

Comment from EMB

Excellent

Hmm. This sounds like it's coming from some kind of personal experience, but I think I get the gist of what's going on with this fun time with the little one. At any rate, it had wonderful rhyming and a joyous tone that I liked. :)

Nice, Jan. :)

 Comment Written 23-Feb-2013

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013

yes, I wrote it while Lexi and I were actually playing with the Little People written about in the story - love, jan

Comment from chasennov

Excellent

'Little People in Barbie House.' A very nice and well written AABB poem which rhymes as well as it bounds in rhythm. Barbie dolls have never stopped being popular. Well done.

 Comment Written 23-Feb-2013

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013

thanks so much - love, jan

reply by chasennov on 06-Mar-2013

You're very welcome, Jan.

Comment from Joyce Crowe

Exceptional

A beautiful picture of precious moments spent between nanny and child. Excellent visual language used throughout the poem and enables the reader to see those precious mooments which flee much too quickly.

 Comment Written 23-Feb-2013

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013

Thanks so much for this exceptional rating, Joyce. I wrote this as Lexi and I were playing with the named Little People as they went to the Barbie House. love, jan

Comment from Candyjean

Excellent

Absolutely loved this poem. It read so easy and the rhyming was just right and not forced. You did a great job with this one. Quite the talented poet.

 Comment Written 23-Feb-2013

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013

thanks so much - love, jan

Comment from Treischel

Excellent

A delightfully joyful poem with wonderful aabb rhyming scheme and clever, fast paced tempo of 7 syllable counts. Childs play on display. I can feel the laughter as they play.

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 Comment Written 22-Feb-2013

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013

thanks so much - love, jan

Comment from djsaxon

Excellent

Heartwarming write. The stress on the first syllable of each line and the simple (impeccable) AABB rhyming and language choice make for a very easy read which beautifully conveys the relationship between nannyand child. Cheers - DJ

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 Comment Written 22-Feb-2013

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013

thanks so much - love, jany