Comment from Bobbi22

Excellent

Great poem. Lots of fun and noise that doesn't seem forced. Congratulations on winning the contest. Very well written. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2013

Thank you!

Steve

Comment from Doc Holiday

Excellent

Your poem sure has an earful to offer its readers.
What a fun read and a great accompanying picture that caught my eye. I would like to have one of these myself.
Congrats on winning the contest!

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2013

Yep, looks like a lot of fun - I never actually rode in one of these as a child - we had other ways of injuring ourselves!

Steve

Comment from Deniz22

Excellent

Excellent! Looks like you have a winner here. Nice mixture of sound and the whole piece runs as smoothly as your vehicle. Congratulations on your win!

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2013

Thank you!

Steve

Comment from Lovinia

Excellent

Hi Steve

A fabulous cacophony poem. Certainly lots of jinging, janging and jarring. Kids will love this .... they make loads of noise .... this makes them experts at loving 'noisy' poetry, Fabulous image and presentation. Great assonance throughout .... the echos add to the cluttery noise and whips the sounds back at each other.

A well deserved win .... wish I had seen it in time to vote....... though you didn't need my help to win. Congrats. A super poem ideal for kids.
Warm Regards - Lovinia xoxoxo

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2013

Thanks, Lovinia - actually it was a tie for first place.
Fun to write and even more fun to read aloud.

Steve

reply by Lovinia on 02-Feb-2013

Hey Steve

Damn ... can't I vote twice? LOL I am sending that to my little nieces, they will get quite a kick out of it. Their dad, my brother would so be into all that ..... made his own version in the day. Hugs - Lovi xoxo

Comment from rodea

Excellent

Wow! Very cool poem I love the Cacophony. Great use of words and noises. So much fun to read and picture everything that is going on in the poem. Each word creative a picture in my mind when I am reading and it is definitely a fun read.

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2013

Thanks - it was fun to write, too.

Steve

Comment from kcross11

Excellent

I knew this was a winner in the first stanza.

What an incredible job you've done here. It's an inspiration for me to think of other fun ways to bring sound into words. You did a great job, I'm very impressed.

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2013

Thanks for the kind words - yes, managed to snare a share of first place.

Steve

Comment from wordsareus

Excellent

This is a fantastic Cacophony poem. You are truly talented at writing this form of poetry. I would have loved to give you six stars but unfortunately I don't have any left.

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2013

Thank you - I'll take the virtual six!

Steve

Comment from McMurry903

Excellent

This is excellent, Steve. You wrote a perfect example of a cacophony poem here. I love the story, and intense sounds along the way. Well deserved win, Congratulations! Brian

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2013

Thanks, Brian.

Steve

Comment from ephraim crud, COS.

Excellent

excellent stuff, as always, Steve, and
is little wonder you won. congratulations,
well deserved.
it reminds me of a poem i did some years ago,
Hornpipe. i'll have to dig it out.

anyways, well done and thanks for sharing.
regards, eph.

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2013

Thanks!

Steve

Comment from dmt1967

Excellent

Its a cool poem so who cares if you broke the rules I remember my first co cart but we wont go there lol very well deserved win thank you for sharing

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2013

Thank you!

Steve