Savannah Love
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Comment from Taffspride
I really like how in your writing, you show rather than tell. You bring your reader right into the action. I feel part of the company.
Your dialog is so well done too. As I said in a previous post I particularly like the "non" use of many tags. They always seem to slow the reader down.
It is obvious to all, the sparks between Cash and Paige, although perhaps not to them at this time.
Keep these chapters coming, I am totally hooked, (also I am glad that nothing should prevent my continued reading)
Oh BTW on my vacation I encountered a ghost. (it is not the first time I have met this particular lady either).
Iechyd da
Ann
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2012
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I really like how in your writing, you show rather than tell. You bring your reader right into the action. I feel part of the company.
Your dialog is so well done too. As I said in a previous post I particularly like the "non" use of many tags. They always seem to slow the reader down.
It is obvious to all, the sparks between Cash and Paige, although perhaps not to them at this time.
Keep these chapters coming, I am totally hooked, (also I am glad that nothing should prevent my continued reading)
Oh BTW on my vacation I encountered a ghost. (it is not the first time I have met this particular lady either).
Iechyd da
Ann
Comment Written 13-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2012
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Where were you when you so the ghost. Since I have been writing this, I am having strange things happening in my house. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Auroraboreal800
Wow! You write dialogues so natural, that it seems very real to me. I enjoyed this new chapter, and just loved blue eyes eating pizza.
WONDERFUL JOB Barbara!!
:)
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Wow! You write dialogues so natural, that it seems very real to me. I enjoyed this new chapter, and just loved blue eyes eating pizza.
WONDERFUL JOB Barbara!!
:)
Comment Written 13-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Hi Barbara, This is a great post continuing this story. I really like the dialogue between the characters it seems at times witty and others serious with some sparks building.
No issues my end. I enjoyed this one and got a good laugh at the ghost eating pizza.....Excellent work my friend.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2012
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Hi Barbara, This is a great post continuing this story. I really like the dialogue between the characters it seems at times witty and others serious with some sparks building.
No issues my end. I enjoyed this one and got a good laugh at the ghost eating pizza.....Excellent work my friend.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
Comment Written 13-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and encouraging words.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
I'm amazed you found a ghost
eating pizza... great.
Cash and Paige seem to be growing closer
despite the banter between them.
He's bring two tents - I should think it's
really creepy out in the swamp and they'll
soon be close in the one.
A great chapter, Barbara
Margaret
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2012
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I'm amazed you found a ghost
eating pizza... great.
Cash and Paige seem to be growing closer
despite the banter between them.
He's bring two tents - I should think it's
really creepy out in the swamp and they'll
soon be close in the one.
A great chapter, Barbara
Margaret
Comment Written 13-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and encouraging words.
Comment from Janie King
Very good chapter. Are we going to see a ghost eat a piece of pizza? I know he/she/they are bound to show up soon..how is your school year going and how do you feel? Love ya and God bless.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2012
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Very good chapter. Are we going to see a ghost eat a piece of pizza? I know he/she/they are bound to show up soon..how is your school year going and how do you feel? Love ya and God bless.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and encouraging words. I am getting stronger all the time. I feel I can finally see the end of the tunnel.
Comment from Cumbrianlass
Love the artwork you chose! Good post. I like the wee bit of tension you created between Cash and Paige. As you say, North meets South! Well done.
Made me crave pizza. Yum.
Sure. He's gonna bring two tents. Sure. LOL!
Hugs, Av
Suggestion only: Paige shoved her hands into her()pockets.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2012
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Love the artwork you chose! Good post. I like the wee bit of tension you created between Cash and Paige. As you say, North meets South! Well done.
Made me crave pizza. Yum.
Sure. He's gonna bring two tents. Sure. LOL!
Hugs, Av
Suggestion only: Paige shoved her hands into her()pockets.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and encouraging words. Thanks for the suggestion
Comment from N.K. Wagner
I'm glad Paige is feeding ALL her guests. :D Some cute banter and potentially fun bets. Can't imagine why Cash would bring two tents. :) nancy
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2012
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I'm glad Paige is feeding ALL her guests. :D Some cute banter and potentially fun bets. Can't imagine why Cash would bring two tents. :) nancy
Comment Written 13-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and encouraging words.
Comment from missy98writer
Barbara,
Chapter Ninteen is wondrtfully written.
The art work you used of the sheet converted ghost eating pizza pie is charming.
Your narrative is great,
You show the reader instead of telling.
I look forewarned reading more.
I'd recommend your lates chapter to other readers a "must " read.
Keep on writing flawlessly, my friend.
Please have a lovely week,
Love ya,
Melissa.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2012
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Barbara,
Chapter Ninteen is wondrtfully written.
The art work you used of the sheet converted ghost eating pizza pie is charming.
Your narrative is great,
You show the reader instead of telling.
I look forewarned reading more.
I'd recommend your lates chapter to other readers a "must " read.
Keep on writing flawlessly, my friend.
Please have a lovely week,
Love ya,
Melissa.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and encouraging words.
Comment from irishauthorme
This is a good chapter that shows us more of your characters natures, and also lets us see that Paige and Cash are growing closer, despite the light banter. The little arguments over who will do what are a prelude to a much closer relationship. Good tension with the thump, and then Cash' explanation, makes us wonder, Hmmm...
irish
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2012
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This is a good chapter that shows us more of your characters natures, and also lets us see that Paige and Cash are growing closer, despite the light banter. The little arguments over who will do what are a prelude to a much closer relationship. Good tension with the thump, and then Cash' explanation, makes us wonder, Hmmm...
irish
Comment Written 13-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and encouraging words.
Comment from Nanashirley
I like the fun in the chapter,and the way your characters interact is easy nice to read. I like the set-up of the ghosts to come. I saw no need for editing, as usual.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2012
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I like the fun in the chapter,and the way your characters interact is easy nice to read. I like the set-up of the ghosts to come. I saw no need for editing, as usual.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and encouraging words.
