Steve's Poems for Kids
Viewing comments for Chapter 18 "Almost..."A collection of my children's poems
87 total reviews
Comment from alexgardiner
I almost caught my Mom and Dad playing games in bed;
I really mustn't tell you all the horrid words they said.
I almost cooked the dinner; all the vegetables I choppeded;
Tell me why is Mommy googling 'How to get your child adopted?'
Great stuff Bonny Lad keep em coming wull yea know?
An' congratulations on yer win it wis inevitable.loved yer poem tae bits ah did.
The Auld Yin.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2011
I almost caught my Mom and Dad playing games in bed;
I really mustn't tell you all the horrid words they said.
I almost cooked the dinner; all the vegetables I choppeded;
Tell me why is Mommy googling 'How to get your child adopted?'
Great stuff Bonny Lad keep em coming wull yea know?
An' congratulations on yer win it wis inevitable.loved yer poem tae bits ah did.
The Auld Yin.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2011
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Thank you so much for the kind review, Alex. The first prize was actually split four ways on this one.
I seem to be on a hot winning streak with poems written from the point of view of a young child. I am baffled, but my wife says it makes perfect sense.
Steve
Comment from TKField
I found this lighthearted and charming.Definately from the "Family-Circus" school of domestic angst. The kid's a regular Dennis The Menace, but it's all in good fun. In real life they'd have him on Ritalin and under observation by a battery of shrinks. Still, with the whimsical tone and the clever rhymes (who cares if the meter is off a couple of times?) I think this would probably qualify as a minor classic.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2011
I found this lighthearted and charming.Definately from the "Family-Circus" school of domestic angst. The kid's a regular Dennis The Menace, but it's all in good fun. In real life they'd have him on Ritalin and under observation by a battery of shrinks. Still, with the whimsical tone and the clever rhymes (who cares if the meter is off a couple of times?) I think this would probably qualify as a minor classic.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2011
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Thank you so much for the kind review.
I seem to be on a hot winning streak with poems written from the point of view of a young child. I am baffled, but my wife says it makes perfect sense.
Steve
Comment from babylonia
roflmao again and again and again. LOL thank god most children don't do all of these things every day but i can see some doing a few. LOL made me smile and giggle. and giggle again. i'm glad you won.
love,
barbara
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2011
roflmao again and again and again. LOL thank god most children don't do all of these things every day but i can see some doing a few. LOL made me smile and giggle. and giggle again. i'm glad you won.
love,
barbara
Comment Written 01-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2011
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Thank you so much for the kind review, Barbara
I seem to be on a hot winning streak with poems written from the point of view of a young child. I am baffled, but my wife says it makes perfect sense.
Steve
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steve,
LOL i know what you mean. i have done that before. then there is the other side and people giving you a hard time cause the POV is from a child. LOL whatever.
love,
barbara
Comment from adewpearl
Congratulations on your contest win :-)
Good use of steady cadence and strong rhyming couplets
love the million-squillion aisles :-)
Great humor in your illustrative examples
This kids sounds like one piece of work! LOL
love the choppeded/adopted rhyme and the huge laugh :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2011
Congratulations on your contest win :-)
Good use of steady cadence and strong rhyming couplets
love the million-squillion aisles :-)
Great humor in your illustrative examples
This kids sounds like one piece of work! LOL
love the choppeded/adopted rhyme and the huge laugh :-) Brooke
Comment Written 01-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2011
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Thank you so much for the kind review, Brooke. The prize was actually split four ways for this.
I seem to be on a hot winning streak with poems written from the point of view of a young child. I am baffled, but my wife says it makes perfect sense.
Steve
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LOL
Comment from sgalletti
Hah! Fabulous wit, satire, humor and play with words. I loved it, and can totally understand why this piece was a contest winner. Congrats! As you know, I haven't been spending much time on the site, because it is very painful for me to type. But, it was worth the pain to write this review. You can check out my latest post to learn more...Hugs, Sue
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2011
Hah! Fabulous wit, satire, humor and play with words. I loved it, and can totally understand why this piece was a contest winner. Congrats! As you know, I haven't been spending much time on the site, because it is very painful for me to type. But, it was worth the pain to write this review. You can check out my latest post to learn more...Hugs, Sue
Comment Written 01-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2011
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Ha! Now I am picturing you looking like a pin cushion. Hope the acupuncture works for you, because you will be sadly missed here if you can no longer contribute - I think it was Milton who got his daughter to transcribe his poems when he went blind - anyone that helpful around??
Or plan B
Get one of those transcription programs so you can just read your poems into the computer.
Don't think I could do either of those - there is just something special about pen on paper...
Anyway thanks so much for taking the trouble to review this.
I seem to be on a hot winning streak with poems written from the point of view of a young child. I am baffled, but my wife says it makes perfect sense.
Steve
Comment from gsuarez
Love the humor . Your modern day " Dennis the Menace " is quite the character. I found the poem engaging . The rhyme drove the poem very musically, a very enjoyable read.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2011
Love the humor . Your modern day " Dennis the Menace " is quite the character. I found the poem engaging . The rhyme drove the poem very musically, a very enjoyable read.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2011
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Thank you so much for the kind review.
I seem to be on a hot winning streak with poems written from the point of view of a young child. I am baffled, but my wife says it makes perfect sense.
Steve
Comment from HeavenlyDreads
I think you must have met my youngest son. Lol! Actually, he's not quite that bad, but he is a character. This poem is too cute and endearing. I totally see why you won. If I had six stars I would have definitely given it to you. Anyway, awesome poem. :)
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2011
I think you must have met my youngest son. Lol! Actually, he's not quite that bad, but he is a character. This poem is too cute and endearing. I totally see why you won. If I had six stars I would have definitely given it to you. Anyway, awesome poem. :)
Comment Written 01-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2011
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Thank you so much for the kind review.
I seem to be on a hot winning streak with poems written from the point of view of a young child. I am baffled, but my wife says it makes perfect sense.
Steve
Comment from fairydancer
Ha ha! This really had me smiling. You capture the wonders of toddlerhood so well. Extremely funny! Very cleverly thought out and written - Cally :)
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2011
Ha ha! This really had me smiling. You capture the wonders of toddlerhood so well. Extremely funny! Very cleverly thought out and written - Cally :)
Comment Written 01-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2011
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Thank you so much for the kind review.
I seem to be on a hot winning streak with poems written from the point of view of a young child. I am baffled, but my wife says it makes perfect sense.
Steve
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Ha ha! And is this your second, third... or have you lost count? LOL :)
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Just the Tedy bear poem and this one - does that still count as a streak?
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He he!...no, I meant childhood! ...second... third... or lost count! :)
Comment from Janie King
I have a nephew that has three little boys (7,4, & 2)..there house is like this ALL the time..they're good kids but they are so full of energy and discovery that the unbelievable happens ALL the time. Great poem and it should have won, which it did. God bless.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2011
I have a nephew that has three little boys (7,4, & 2)..there house is like this ALL the time..they're good kids but they are so full of energy and discovery that the unbelievable happens ALL the time. Great poem and it should have won, which it did. God bless.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2011
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Thank you so much for the kind review.
I seem to be on a hot winning streak with poems written from the point of view of a young child. I am baffled, but my wife says it makes perfect sense.
Steve
Comment from snoopy lover
What parent can't relate with this poem? What a very fun, free-flowing, imaginative short poem. Only saw one little thing but it may have been a play on words too.
self-defence. (defense)
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011
What parent can't relate with this poem? What a very fun, free-flowing, imaginative short poem. Only saw one little thing but it may have been a play on words too.
self-defence. (defense)
Comment Written 01-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011
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Thank you.
I seem to be on a hot streak lately writing winning poems from a young child's perspective. It has me baffled, but my wife says she understands perfectly...
defence/defense is a UK v US English thing...
Steve
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I wondered about "defence". About your hot streak--can't beat 'em, join 'em! Karen