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Steve's Poems for Kids

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A collection of my children's poems

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Comment from alexgardiner
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I almost caught my Mom and Dad playing games in bed;
I really mustn't tell you all the horrid words they said.
I almost cooked the dinner; all the vegetables I choppeded;
Tell me why is Mommy googling 'How to get your child adopted?'

Great stuff Bonny Lad keep em coming wull yea know?

An' congratulations on yer win it wis inevitable.loved yer poem tae bits ah did.
The Auld Yin.

 Comment Written 01-Oct-2011


reply by the author on 02-Oct-2011
    Thank you so much for the kind review, Alex. The first prize was actually split four ways on this one.
    I seem to be on a hot winning streak with poems written from the point of view of a young child. I am baffled, but my wife says it makes perfect sense.
    Steve
Comment from TKField
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I found this lighthearted and charming.Definately from the "Family-Circus" school of domestic angst. The kid's a regular Dennis The Menace, but it's all in good fun. In real life they'd have him on Ritalin and under observation by a battery of shrinks. Still, with the whimsical tone and the clever rhymes (who cares if the meter is off a couple of times?) I think this would probably qualify as a minor classic.

 Comment Written 01-Oct-2011


reply by the author on 02-Oct-2011
    Thank you so much for the kind review.
    I seem to be on a hot winning streak with poems written from the point of view of a young child. I am baffled, but my wife says it makes perfect sense.
    Steve
Comment from babylonia
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roflmao again and again and again. LOL thank god most children don't do all of these things every day but i can see some doing a few. LOL made me smile and giggle. and giggle again. i'm glad you won.
love,
barbara

 Comment Written 01-Oct-2011


reply by the author on 02-Oct-2011
    Thank you so much for the kind review, Barbara
    I seem to be on a hot winning streak with poems written from the point of view of a young child. I am baffled, but my wife says it makes perfect sense.
    Steve
reply by babylonia on 02-Oct-2011
    steve,
    LOL i know what you mean. i have done that before. then there is the other side and people giving you a hard time cause the POV is from a child. LOL whatever.
    love,
    barbara
Comment from adewpearl
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Congratulations on your contest win :-)
Good use of steady cadence and strong rhyming couplets
love the million-squillion aisles :-)
Great humor in your illustrative examples
This kids sounds like one piece of work! LOL
love the choppeded/adopted rhyme and the huge laugh :-) Brooke

 Comment Written 01-Oct-2011


reply by the author on 02-Oct-2011
    Thank you so much for the kind review, Brooke. The prize was actually split four ways for this.
    I seem to be on a hot winning streak with poems written from the point of view of a young child. I am baffled, but my wife says it makes perfect sense.
    Steve
reply by adewpearl on 02-Oct-2011
    LOL
Comment from sgalletti
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Hah! Fabulous wit, satire, humor and play with words. I loved it, and can totally understand why this piece was a contest winner. Congrats! As you know, I haven't been spending much time on the site, because it is very painful for me to type. But, it was worth the pain to write this review. You can check out my latest post to learn more...Hugs, Sue

 Comment Written 01-Oct-2011


reply by the author on 02-Oct-2011
    Ha! Now I am picturing you looking like a pin cushion. Hope the acupuncture works for you, because you will be sadly missed here if you can no longer contribute - I think it was Milton who got his daughter to transcribe his poems when he went blind - anyone that helpful around??
    Or plan B
    Get one of those transcription programs so you can just read your poems into the computer.

    Don't think I could do either of those - there is just something special about pen on paper...

    Anyway thanks so much for taking the trouble to review this.
    I seem to be on a hot winning streak with poems written from the point of view of a young child. I am baffled, but my wife says it makes perfect sense.
    Steve
Comment from gsuarez
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Love the humor . Your modern day " Dennis the Menace " is quite the character. I found the poem engaging . The rhyme drove the poem very musically, a very enjoyable read.

 Comment Written 01-Oct-2011


reply by the author on 02-Oct-2011
    Thank you so much for the kind review.
    I seem to be on a hot winning streak with poems written from the point of view of a young child. I am baffled, but my wife says it makes perfect sense.
    Steve
Comment from HeavenlyDreads
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I think you must have met my youngest son. Lol! Actually, he's not quite that bad, but he is a character. This poem is too cute and endearing. I totally see why you won. If I had six stars I would have definitely given it to you. Anyway, awesome poem. :)

 Comment Written 01-Oct-2011


reply by the author on 02-Oct-2011
    Thank you so much for the kind review.
    I seem to be on a hot winning streak with poems written from the point of view of a young child. I am baffled, but my wife says it makes perfect sense.
    Steve
Comment from fairydancer
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Ha ha! This really had me smiling. You capture the wonders of toddlerhood so well. Extremely funny! Very cleverly thought out and written - Cally :)

 Comment Written 01-Oct-2011


reply by the author on 02-Oct-2011
    Thank you so much for the kind review.
    I seem to be on a hot winning streak with poems written from the point of view of a young child. I am baffled, but my wife says it makes perfect sense.
    Steve
reply by fairydancer on 02-Oct-2011
    Ha ha! And is this your second, third... or have you lost count? LOL :)
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2011
    Just the Tedy bear poem and this one - does that still count as a streak?
reply by fairydancer on 02-Oct-2011
    He he!...no, I meant childhood! ...second... third... or lost count! :)
Comment from Janie King
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I have a nephew that has three little boys (7,4, & 2)..there house is like this ALL the time..they're good kids but they are so full of energy and discovery that the unbelievable happens ALL the time. Great poem and it should have won, which it did. God bless.

 Comment Written 01-Oct-2011


reply by the author on 02-Oct-2011
    Thank you so much for the kind review.
    I seem to be on a hot winning streak with poems written from the point of view of a young child. I am baffled, but my wife says it makes perfect sense.
    Steve
Comment from snoopy lover
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What parent can't relate with this poem? What a very fun, free-flowing, imaginative short poem. Only saw one little thing but it may have been a play on words too.
self-defence. (defense)

 Comment Written 01-Oct-2011


reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011
    Thank you.
    I seem to be on a hot streak lately writing winning poems from a young child's perspective. It has me baffled, but my wife says she understands perfectly...
    defence/defense is a UK v US English thing...
    Steve
reply by snoopy lover on 01-Oct-2011
    I wondered about "defence". About your hot streak--can't beat 'em, join 'em! Karen