Lonely Hearts Meet
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Comment from Whym
Good chapter. :) Coming in this late in the game, it's often hard to get a good sense of the characters, but you've done a great job of catching the reader up to speed right at the beginning.
I liked both Anna and Troy immediately and could see the deep emotional turmoil that Anna has been through without going back to read it.
Keep writing..this should turn out to be a really good book :)
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Good chapter. :) Coming in this late in the game, it's often hard to get a good sense of the characters, but you've done a great job of catching the reader up to speed right at the beginning.
I liked both Anna and Troy immediately and could see the deep emotional turmoil that Anna has been through without going back to read it.
Keep writing..this should turn out to be a really good book :)
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from eliz100
This was a great read from beginning to end, as usual. Adding tension between Anna and Troy made for an interesting read. I look forward to seeing how it works out.
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This was a great read from beginning to end, as usual. Adding tension between Anna and Troy made for an interesting read. I look forward to seeing how it works out.
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from judiverse
Barbara, I've read previous chapters so was pleased to read this. You have a nice progression going from one chapter to the next. I must admit I get confused when too many characters are introduced too quickly. The lead-in to the scene in the grocery store is set up nicely with Anna seeing a TV report about a man who's murdered his wife and children. Her reaction to seeing Troy with the blonde (secretary, really?) is quite believable after what she's been through. She needs to take time and built confidence before she can trust another man, as you suggest. Interesting work. judiversse
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Barbara, I've read previous chapters so was pleased to read this. You have a nice progression going from one chapter to the next. I must admit I get confused when too many characters are introduced too quickly. The lead-in to the scene in the grocery store is set up nicely with Anna seeing a TV report about a man who's murdered his wife and children. Her reaction to seeing Troy with the blonde (secretary, really?) is quite believable after what she's been through. She needs to take time and built confidence before she can trust another man, as you suggest. Interesting work. judiversse
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Thank you for your kind review and the support.
Comment from Connie P
First you really scared me. I thought Troy was a cad there for a minute, even though he has every right to date. Now, Anna is refusing to think logically. I thought it was a little rude of her not to open the door, but she's at a tender place so I guess insecurity is driving her emotions.
Good chapter, I didn't spot any errors.
Connie
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First you really scared me. I thought Troy was a cad there for a minute, even though he has every right to date. Now, Anna is refusing to think logically. I thought it was a little rude of her not to open the door, but she's at a tender place so I guess insecurity is driving her emotions.
Good chapter, I didn't spot any errors.
Connie
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from peggles
I enjoyed reading another chapter
Of this excellent story
Anna really did not understand what
was happening with Troy
I am looking forward to the next chapter
Your art work sends a very strong message
The end part of your notes is quite sad to think about
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I enjoyed reading another chapter
Of this excellent story
Anna really did not understand what
was happening with Troy
I am looking forward to the next chapter
Your art work sends a very strong message
The end part of your notes is quite sad to think about
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from bob cullen
I'm never disappointed when I read your work. Your dialogue is real, the emotions conveyed are precise and your narrative provide enough detail to allow the reader to picture exactly what you describe.
You are a very good writer
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I'm never disappointed when I read your work. Your dialogue is real, the emotions conveyed are precise and your narrative provide enough detail to allow the reader to picture exactly what you describe.
You are a very good writer
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from N.K. Wagner
Barbara, you forgot to skip a line before "Anna sped away." The rest is clean. We do complicate our lives for the dumbest reasons, don't we? :D Nancy
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Barbara, you forgot to skip a line before "Anna sped away." The rest is clean. We do complicate our lives for the dumbest reasons, don't we? :D Nancy
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Cynthia Tee
Another good write with this chapter, Barbara. Poor Anna, jumping to the wrong conclusion about Troy's secretary. On the other hand, because of what she has been through it's no wonder she feels so insecure. Well done here my friend. Hugs and smiles, Cynthia
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Another good write with this chapter, Barbara. Poor Anna, jumping to the wrong conclusion about Troy's secretary. On the other hand, because of what she has been through it's no wonder she feels so insecure. Well done here my friend. Hugs and smiles, Cynthia
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from CALLAHANMR
Hi Barbara:)
How could Anna not suspect something. The only real experience she has ever had with me was with her low-life husband. No matter what she says Bobbie has stolen all Anna's self-assurance.
As Troy and his family rescued Anna from the hell, she lived in, it was only natural for her to form a strong, though unspoken romantic bond. Now her reaction to seeing Troy with a young and attractive blonde, she naturally thought that her chance at romance was gone.
How many relationships end before they start from an overactive imagination and small misconceptions? troy will never let this happen, but he may have to profess his own romanic thoughts and seek help frm his family and maybe his secretary. Could she be married?
Now for security. The open gate foreshadows a confrontation with Bobbie. Is that what will strengthen the bond between Troy and Anna?
I'm ready to see what happens when Bobbie gets out of jail.
One of your most realistic Chapters with no noticeable SPAG.
Roger
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Hi Barbara:)
How could Anna not suspect something. The only real experience she has ever had with me was with her low-life husband. No matter what she says Bobbie has stolen all Anna's self-assurance.
As Troy and his family rescued Anna from the hell, she lived in, it was only natural for her to form a strong, though unspoken romantic bond. Now her reaction to seeing Troy with a young and attractive blonde, she naturally thought that her chance at romance was gone.
How many relationships end before they start from an overactive imagination and small misconceptions? troy will never let this happen, but he may have to profess his own romanic thoughts and seek help frm his family and maybe his secretary. Could she be married?
Now for security. The open gate foreshadows a confrontation with Bobbie. Is that what will strengthen the bond between Troy and Anna?
I'm ready to see what happens when Bobbie gets out of jail.
One of your most realistic Chapters with no noticeable SPAG.
Roger
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Thank you for your kind review and your continued support.
Comment from dbmccarter
I like this chapter from Anna's point of view. She is changing and looking forward and now she is hurt. Good addition to the story.
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I like this chapter from Anna's point of view. She is changing and looking forward and now she is hurt. Good addition to the story.
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Thank you for your kind review.
