Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Part Two Chapter One"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from dportwood
barbara,
This story reels the reader in and makes him want to protect Anna the way that Troy wants to. Well done with emotion and imagery.
You may want to revise this:
Troy placed a plate filled a ham and cheese sandwich
Duane
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2011
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barbara,
This story reels the reader in and makes him want to protect Anna the way that Troy wants to. Well done with emotion and imagery.
You may want to revise this:
Troy placed a plate filled a ham and cheese sandwich
Duane
Comment Written 16-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2011
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I have changed that sentence many times. I think Troy better quit feeding this lady. It's too difficult to get the sentence correct. (LOL) I will attempt to get it right this time.
Comment from Auroraboreal800
I loved this intriguing story! SO enjoyable! I hope they hit it off and can help each other. You are doing such a fantastic job with this story, abuse should never control ones life.
God bless you Barbara,
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2011
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I loved this intriguing story! SO enjoyable! I hope they hit it off and can help each other. You are doing such a fantastic job with this story, abuse should never control ones life.
God bless you Barbara,
Comment Written 16-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from WilliamDeen
Your story really grabs hold and paints a clear picture of an abusive cycle. Anna and Troy are interesting and intriguing characters. I look forward to continuing the read.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2011
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Your story really grabs hold and paints a clear picture of an abusive cycle. Anna and Troy are interesting and intriguing characters. I look forward to continuing the read.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from me_tudor
This is really coming along very well. I'm really hoping that Troy is for real. I'm betting that's probably the plan but it'll be fun to read how things unfold. M.E.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2011
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This is really coming along very well. I'm really hoping that Troy is for real. I'm betting that's probably the plan but it'll be fun to read how things unfold. M.E.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2011
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I hope they unfold very well. We shall see. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from misscookie
I TELL YOU THESES MACHINES HAS A MIND OF IT'S OWN MY JUST JUMPED A CLEARED EVERYTHING I WROTE YOU.
THIS STORY IS VERY INTERESTING IT HAD MY ATTENTION TO THE LAST WORD. THANKS FOR SHARING .
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2011
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I TELL YOU THESES MACHINES HAS A MIND OF IT'S OWN MY JUST JUMPED A CLEARED EVERYTHING I WROTE YOU.
THIS STORY IS VERY INTERESTING IT HAD MY ATTENTION TO THE LAST WORD. THANKS FOR SHARING .
Comment Written 16-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2011
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Thank you for your kind review. I agree I am not too happy with my computer, most of the time.
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your very welcome, take care.
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your very welcome, take care.
Comment from koneart
I hope you have your character 'beat' the situation with strong wits and a solid mind! Others who suffer abuse could use a good example to follow. Someone once said to me when I asked 'why do they stay', they said, "It's like being cornered by a rattle snake. All you have to do is grab it by the back of the neck and throw it out of the way. And, you could get bit, hurt and even die, but it's certainly better than living a life of fear! But how many of us are brave enough to grab a poisonous snake!" I agreed and totally understand now! I noted a mistake shown below. Just a little typo....well done.
"These are bruises." He pointed to the marks. "I won't pry, but I do care." He watchef [watched] for a reaction. "Is that why you're reading up on divorce?"
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2011
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I hope you have your character 'beat' the situation with strong wits and a solid mind! Others who suffer abuse could use a good example to follow. Someone once said to me when I asked 'why do they stay', they said, "It's like being cornered by a rattle snake. All you have to do is grab it by the back of the neck and throw it out of the way. And, you could get bit, hurt and even die, but it's certainly better than living a life of fear! But how many of us are brave enough to grab a poisonous snake!" I agreed and totally understand now! I noted a mistake shown below. Just a little typo....well done.
"These are bruises." He pointed to the marks. "I won't pry, but I do care." He watchef [watched] for a reaction. "Is that why you're reading up on divorce?"
Comment Written 16-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2011
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I will take care of that typo, I had worked on that line last night and still have an error. I like the visual you have me.
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You've got a good thing going here--there's such a need to encourage these abused people...Best wishes to you!
Comment from Tellis
What a great guy. I couldn't stand by and see someone going through that either. My dad never hit my mom in their fights, but my mom never held back. She usually hurt herself when she hit him, LoL. One time she kicked him in the shin and broka a toe. I thought my dad was pretty cool to keep his temper in check at those times. Good chapter and I enjoyed it.
Tellis
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2011
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What a great guy. I couldn't stand by and see someone going through that either. My dad never hit my mom in their fights, but my mom never held back. She usually hurt herself when she hit him, LoL. One time she kicked him in the shin and broka a toe. I thought my dad was pretty cool to keep his temper in check at those times. Good chapter and I enjoyed it.
Tellis
Comment Written 15-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2011
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I raised four boys and to be honest every once in a while I would have to swat their butts. I am 5'4" tall, all my boys were taller than me at a young age, and weighed more. The took their swats, but later teased because I usually got a bruised hand from it.
Comment from Fireshadow
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Barbara, this is a very well penned, captivating storyline. Anna's low self esteem is once more illustrated in her self doubts. I hope Troy becomes a good friend who can provide true support without any hidden agendas. The artwork you selected is a perfect match. Excellent work, my friend.
Ama
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2011
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Barbara, this is a very well penned, captivating storyline. Anna's low self esteem is once more illustrated in her self doubts. I hope Troy becomes a good friend who can provide true support without any hidden agendas. The artwork you selected is a perfect match. Excellent work, my friend.
Ama
Comment Written 15-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from amahra
I can relate to this. I was in a abusive relationship and this stuff is real. I love the way you put her thoughts into another font and size. It made for a much easier read. And I love that you made someone awar of this woman's problem. And I love the last paragrahy where he can't give her his number because her husband looks in her hand bag. That is so true. I know first hand that these abusive men are masters at totally isolating you from the rest of the world. Great writing.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2011
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I can relate to this. I was in a abusive relationship and this stuff is real. I love the way you put her thoughts into another font and size. It made for a much easier read. And I love that you made someone awar of this woman's problem. And I love the last paragrahy where he can't give her his number because her husband looks in her hand bag. That is so true. I know first hand that these abusive men are masters at totally isolating you from the rest of the world. Great writing.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2011
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Thank you for your kind review. I hope you stay with me, so you can keep me realistic.
Comment from SkyBluePink
Oh, this is getting so good.
You are doing such a fantastic job with this story. I am loving it!
I am so involved when reading your work. You have that special gift of pulling the reader right on in.
Thanks for sharing!
Keep Writing!
:)
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2011
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Oh, this is getting so good.
You are doing such a fantastic job with this story. I am loving it!
I am so involved when reading your work. You have that special gift of pulling the reader right on in.
Thanks for sharing!
Keep Writing!
:)
Comment Written 15-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
