Ageless Apparition
the reaper61 total reviews
Comment from sierra scribbler
This is lovely and dark. Great choice of picture art, fits perfectly with your words. I was wondering if in your last line, it might read better if you wrote "in" instead of "with".
Just a suggestion.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2010
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This is lovely and dark. Great choice of picture art, fits perfectly with your words. I was wondering if in your last line, it might read better if you wrote "in" instead of "with".
Just a suggestion.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2010
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Yes, in does work very well. But I'm afraid I wanted to convey posession. thank U.
Comment from Curt Mongold
I'm not afraid of Death my friend, I will welcome him with a wink, take my boarding pass, slap him on the back and say, "Where the hell you been, buddy? I've been in an endless hurry forever!"
And yea, we'll both be smilin'.
Curt
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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I'm not afraid of Death my friend, I will welcome him with a wink, take my boarding pass, slap him on the back and say, "Where the hell you been, buddy? I've been in an endless hurry forever!"
And yea, we'll both be smilin'.
Curt
Comment Written 27-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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Curt, I'm convinced that death holds no fear for U. But what a price to pay to get there.
Comment from RobinWrites
I agree with you, it's time to slow down. I will do this and try to enjoy everything around me. Quite the image these few lines formed. Very well done. I found each sentence spoke volumes.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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I agree with you, it's time to slow down. I will do this and try to enjoy everything around me. Quite the image these few lines formed. Very well done. I found each sentence spoke volumes.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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Thank U Robinwrites from sparrow with fright.
Comment from connied
I think I'll walk-- death will come for us all--I'd rather keep him waiting
good job,
'Tis just his lot
to reap from us
the ones with endless hurry.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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I think I'll walk-- death will come for us all--I'd rather keep him waiting
good job,
'Tis just his lot
to reap from us
the ones with endless hurry.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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Thank U. Yes, I shall start walking, too.
Comment from fictionwriter
I don't want to be in a hurry either. I'd rather take my time and avoid that reaper if at all possible. I loved this. Well done.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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I don't want to be in a hurry either. I'd rather take my time and avoid that reaper if at all possible. I loved this. Well done.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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Thank U. It's probably refreshing to read a shorter one once in a while, no?
Comment from K. Suzanne
Very good. I like that you call us humans "the ones with endless hurry" because that is so true. We are always all in such a rush to do what we need to do before we die. I also like that you say that the reaper is just doing his job.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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Very good. I like that you call us humans "the ones with endless hurry" because that is so true. We are always all in such a rush to do what we need to do before we die. I also like that you say that the reaper is just doing his job.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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Thank U, Ms. Suzanne. Nice review and perceptive as well.
Comment from shonadennis
I like that line" the one to reap from us the one with endless hurry. We are very busy people and yes we reap the rewards of being to busy. Enjoyed it!
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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I like that line" the one to reap from us the one with endless hurry. We are very busy people and yes we reap the rewards of being to busy. Enjoyed it!
Comment Written 27-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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I thank U. And welcome to fanstory.
Comment from joemass
G'day, Victor Touche
Clever observation! I shall immediately stop worrying and start singing practice for when I join the heavenly choir :-)
Good job!
Joemass
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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G'day, Victor Touche
Clever observation! I shall immediately stop worrying and start singing practice for when I join the heavenly choir :-)
Good job!
Joemass
Comment Written 27-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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Thank U, Joe. Hey, pack a rope will U? A long one. I'm gonna need it.
Comment from MABarrett
Ok, very rarely do I make an attempt to guess what was on an authors mind when he wrote a piece, or to tell him what was on my mind when I read it. *Shrugs* Poetry is subjective. I'm breaking my own rules here. I "saw" the reaper standing smiling at the scene of a car crash here. One caused by speeding. LOL, none of this matters of course, just my way of saying you did a good job of presenting a platform for imaginary leaps. Thank you!
M.A.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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Ok, very rarely do I make an attempt to guess what was on an authors mind when he wrote a piece, or to tell him what was on my mind when I read it. *Shrugs* Poetry is subjective. I'm breaking my own rules here. I "saw" the reaper standing smiling at the scene of a car crash here. One caused by speeding. LOL, none of this matters of course, just my way of saying you did a good job of presenting a platform for imaginary leaps. Thank you!
M.A.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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I'll take that as a nice compliment. Which I know U meant it as. (aren't those two lines like a double negative?)
Comment from Joan E.
The cloaked reaper in the picture you chose was so synergistic with your words. I admired your use of alliteration and verb "reap" as well.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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The cloaked reaper in the picture you chose was so synergistic with your words. I admired your use of alliteration and verb "reap" as well.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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Thank U Joan. I'm tickled U liked the alliteration.