Tantalizing Eyes
Viewing comments for Chapter 33 "Chapter 9; part 1"Dishonesty VS Love. Which will win?
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Comment from Nicnac
Oh yeah! I LOVE it. Steven has admitted his love for Leya - and stupid Peggy is going to have her cover blown. Ohhh I can't stand that conniving woman. I KNEW she was the one causing the trouble. Little lying, two-faced skanky skunk. (LOL)
Fabulous chapter, Barbara. One of my favorites so far. Everything flowed well, tension is building, and I found no errors. The dialogue is fast-paced and kept my interest. No lagging areas.
Exceptional writing! Woohoo! I can't wait to read more. :)
***Six Stars***
Nic
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2010
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Oh yeah! I LOVE it. Steven has admitted his love for Leya - and stupid Peggy is going to have her cover blown. Ohhh I can't stand that conniving woman. I KNEW she was the one causing the trouble. Little lying, two-faced skanky skunk. (LOL)
Fabulous chapter, Barbara. One of my favorites so far. Everything flowed well, tension is building, and I found no errors. The dialogue is fast-paced and kept my interest. No lagging areas.
Exceptional writing! Woohoo! I can't wait to read more. :)
***Six Stars***
Nic
Comment Written 14-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2010
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Thank you for the stars and your kind review. I appreciate your continued support. I could not do it without you.
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Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Barbara,
So Peggy is taking an interest again - and someone is at last wondering!
Good story continuing and developing nicely toward the ultimate showdown.
Patrick
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2010
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Hi Barbara,
So Peggy is taking an interest again - and someone is at last wondering!
Good story continuing and developing nicely toward the ultimate showdown.
Patrick
Comment Written 14-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2010
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And there will be show down. I promise you. Thank you for your support.
Comment from Max Edon
I haven't read the previous chapters, but I enjoyed reading this. It had a nice, fast-paced flow, and the conversations and characters were believable.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2010
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I haven't read the previous chapters, but I enjoyed reading this. It had a nice, fast-paced flow, and the conversations and characters were believable.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2010
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Thank you for your revuew.
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You are welcome!
Comment from c_lucas
This is a very well written chapter and you have maintain the suspense throughout. You have steadily increased the emotions and magnetism between Steven and Leya. Good job.
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This is a very well written chapter and you have maintain the suspense throughout. You have steadily increased the emotions and magnetism between Steven and Leya. Good job.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and stars. I appreciate both.
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You're welcome, Barbara. Charlie
Comment from CKLA
Another wonderful chapter. You do a great job keeping the story flowing with your dialogue and great characters. I look forward to your next post.
Collette
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2010
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Another wonderful chapter. You do a great job keeping the story flowing with your dialogue and great characters. I look forward to your next post.
Collette
Comment Written 14-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2010
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Thank you for your kind words.
Comment from laurelp
Wasn't too long for me. I enjoyed the read. The story is complicated and full of intrigue. It is well done and has great characterizations. I don't trust Peggy either. Well done.
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Wasn't too long for me. I enjoyed the read. The story is complicated and full of intrigue. It is well done and has great characterizations. I don't trust Peggy either. Well done.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2010
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Thank you for your review and continued support.
Comment from Belinda
I think this is for the first time Steven admits to someone else that he love Leya. At the same time he does not know for sure that Leya loves her. I do not even realize this is longer than the usual ones, Barbara...
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2010
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I think this is for the first time Steven admits to someone else that he love Leya. At the same time he does not know for sure that Leya loves her. I do not even realize this is longer than the usual ones, Barbara...
Comment Written 14-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2010
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Thank you for the kind review. It's about 600 words longer than I usually post. Thank you for not noticing.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written. i enjoyed reading it and i am also a little bit sad because i know this is coming to a close. but never fear, i am sure you have something waiting in the wings for the fans
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this is very well written. i enjoyed reading it and i am also a little bit sad because i know this is coming to a close. but never fear, i am sure you have something waiting in the wings for the fans
Comment Written 14-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2010
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This novel has about 130 pages. It has a lot of action left to go. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Readywriter52
The doctor knows that Steven and Leya are in love. He arranged for Steven to see her more often. I think it's a huge leap of Matt to suspect that Peggy released the location of the safe house. He plans to test her. If she fails, it means she is a jealous traitor.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2010
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The doctor knows that Steven and Leya are in love. He arranged for Steven to see her more often. I think it's a huge leap of Matt to suspect that Peggy released the location of the safe house. He plans to test her. If she fails, it means she is a jealous traitor.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2010
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We shall see what Matt's discovers. Thank you for your continued support.
Comment from L.lora
Whoo-hoo, and finally maybe
Peggy is going to get her buns
in a twist... I guess we'll find
out if she's been the fly in the
ointment--so to speak. Very good
addition with wonderful descripive
narrations not to mention the delightful
dialogues that have provided so much info
as well as help to move us through the
story. Excellent read; looking forward
to your next post. no nits or spags. Lora
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2010
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Whoo-hoo, and finally maybe
Peggy is going to get her buns
in a twist... I guess we'll find
out if she's been the fly in the
ointment--so to speak. Very good
addition with wonderful descripive
narrations not to mention the delightful
dialogues that have provided so much info
as well as help to move us through the
story. Excellent read; looking forward
to your next post. no nits or spags. Lora
Comment Written 13-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
