Comment from debskatz

Excellent

hey brooke,

an exceptionally delightful poem. i truly hope Roisin comes around to read it. & your daughter must be thrilled! i only found one line where the meter is a little forced & a couple of rhymes were near, but still an outstanding poem. i love how you wrapped it up, being able to join in with the fairies. so you'll have to write another one about what you concealed!!

thank you for sharing your wonderful vision with us!!

smiles,

deb

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2009

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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2009

Thank you, Deb - yes, I would love for her to read this :-) Don't keep me in suspense - which line did you feel was forced?? As for near rhymes, I do those on purpose because I love near rhyme. Brooke :-)

Comment from mermaids

Excellent

Enjoyable adventure with the faerie folk. This series is so much fun, would be a great poem to have published with pictures. I admire your ability with this form of poetry.

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2009

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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2009

Thanks, I appreciate your lovely review :-) Brooke

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

Now I know what perfection is, so I can strive to met it. I see where the goal is set. It's scary, but I will strive to meet it. Great job, as always. All I can do is sigh in wonder.

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2009

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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2009

Thank you, Barbara. That is one helluva review, kind lady!!! Brooke :-)

Comment from prodigal

Excellent

Excellent ending, Brooke, especially the last line. "You'll never know what I haven't revealed" That is so clever. This poem has rhymed well throughout. I'm not a huge fan of fairy poetry, but i think you nailed this one. -Sam

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2009

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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2009

Thanks so much, Sam - I have lots of guys on my fan list who love the fairy poetry - manly men, even cowboys :-) Brooke

Comment from joan marie

Excellent

This really is a fantastic poetry form. You have done a wonderful job with it. A great story with a wonderful that came along with it. joan marie

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2009

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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2009

Thanks, Joan Marie - as always, I appreciate your visits and reviews :-) Brooke

Comment from Dave M

Excellent

Brooke,

Fanstory won't let me give this poem a six-star review, but it is exceptional. As usual for your work, the post is technically flawless. It also sets a vivid, imaginative scene. But the exceptional nature of this poem comes from your last line. It leaves me wondering...

Dave

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2009

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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2009

Thank you, Dave - I always appreciate your most generous comments even if the site won't allow a six! Brooke :-)

Comment from GregoryC

Excellent

A delightful tale filled with haunting images and enchanting, musical language. I find myself in a dreamworld filled with magical creatures and hope to discover what is truly concealed. Entertaining as it is mysterious.

Gregory

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2009

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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2009

I appreciate your most thoughtful comments, Gregory :-) Brooke

Comment from Gert sherwood

Excellent

So nice Brooke
You have he talent dear lady knowing how to write children fantasy with this very difficult form.

I really enjoyed reading your 3 part woodland poem

Oh yes dandelion wine not my best tasty wine
Smiles
Gert

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2009

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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2009

Thank you, Gert - I don't drink at all, so I don't know - I just know my grandpa used to make it. LOL brooke :-)

reply by Gert sherwood on 03-Oct-2009

Brooke you are welcome
Gert

Comment from malachi1206

Excellent

A great conclusion to a 'mini-epic' LOL well constructed great rhyme scheme and flow I am glad I had opportunity to read this excellent malachi1206

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2009

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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2009

Thank you, Malachi. Glad you enjoyed this mini-epic LOL Brooke

Comment from Steve Pantazis

Excellent

Exceptional once again. "dandelion wine" evokes wonderful thoughts...very creative. One nit: you have "fay" twice in close succession in your last stanza. I know you've used sprite already. "Nymph" and "dryad" are two additional choices, although dryad is two syllables, which would ruin your count.

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2009

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reply by the author on 02-Oct-2009

Thank you, Pantazis - sometimes it is difficult to avoid all repetition, and frankly, it doesn't bother me as much as it does some. :-) Brooke