The Butterfly and Lady Bug
contemplative quatrains91 total reviews
Comment from raimie
What a beautiful Ode to the butterfly. And a most beautiful golden angel the photgrapher has captured. So tiny and unassuming, yet one of the most beautiful of God's creatures!
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2009
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What a beautiful Ode to the butterfly. And a most beautiful golden angel the photgrapher has captured. So tiny and unassuming, yet one of the most beautiful of God's creatures!
Comment Written 19-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2009
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Thank you, Raimie - I appreciate your thoughtfulness. Brooke
Comment from Gail Allred
Aww! This was just so sweet. I enjoyed it very much. I love the pic and the color of the background. Good job as usual. Big hugs!!~MYSTERIA
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2009
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Aww! This was just so sweet. I enjoyed it very much. I love the pic and the color of the background. Good job as usual. Big hugs!!~MYSTERIA
Comment Written 19-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2009
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Mysteria, thank you! I appreciate your kind comments, Brooke
Comment from LauraKatherine
I can see why this photo inspired a poem. It is simply beautiful.
This story-poem flows well. I like the contrast between the desire for perfection and the realism of the disarray. Also, good contrast between the narrator and the lady bug; one is too busy working to enjoy the butterfly's happy dance and the other is restful and open to friendship. It is a sad poem about a lost potential friend because of the cares of life. An excellent moral to this tale.
The rhythm feel smooth and everything else looks like it is in great shape.
As always, good work.
Laura
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2009
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I can see why this photo inspired a poem. It is simply beautiful.
This story-poem flows well. I like the contrast between the desire for perfection and the realism of the disarray. Also, good contrast between the narrator and the lady bug; one is too busy working to enjoy the butterfly's happy dance and the other is restful and open to friendship. It is a sad poem about a lost potential friend because of the cares of life. An excellent moral to this tale.
The rhythm feel smooth and everything else looks like it is in great shape.
As always, good work.
Laura
Comment Written 19-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2009
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Laura, thank you - I wish I could forward your perceptive review to the lady yesterday evening who lectured me on how this poem was purposeless and meaningless. :-D Brooke
Comment from NadineM
Brooke, I enjoyed this playful poem about nature and the busyness we find in our gardens. Sometimes we're too busy to notice the little details. Perhaps the insects would rather be unnoticed...and so they carry on without our prying eyes!
Thanks for sharing this well-rhyming poem with me.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2009
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Brooke, I enjoyed this playful poem about nature and the busyness we find in our gardens. Sometimes we're too busy to notice the little details. Perhaps the insects would rather be unnoticed...and so they carry on without our prying eyes!
Thanks for sharing this well-rhyming poem with me.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2009
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Nadine, so nice to see you - thank you!! :-) Brooke
Comment from Adri7enne
So true that we get caught up in doing, and forget to just be. Butterflies and flowers are meant to remind us of living in present moment. I enjoyed the images of the busy gardener and the ethereal insects. Lovely rhymes. A fun read.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2009
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So true that we get caught up in doing, and forget to just be. Butterflies and flowers are meant to remind us of living in present moment. I enjoyed the images of the busy gardener and the ethereal insects. Lovely rhymes. A fun read.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2009
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Thank you - your perceptive comments are most appreciated. Brooke :-)
Comment from jadedgemini2
This was so cute to read!!! I think you did a wonderful job of tying together a poem with the picture. It told a wonderful tale with a very good lesson that everyone should heed. Life passes by in seconds, all to quickly for my taste, but it is what it is and because of that you need to enjoy every last minute of it. I hope your life garden is full of wonderful butterflies and no weeds:)
Jaded:)
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2009
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This was so cute to read!!! I think you did a wonderful job of tying together a poem with the picture. It told a wonderful tale with a very good lesson that everyone should heed. Life passes by in seconds, all to quickly for my taste, but it is what it is and because of that you need to enjoy every last minute of it. I hope your life garden is full of wonderful butterflies and no weeds:)
Jaded:)
Comment Written 19-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2009
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Thank you for a totally gracious and warm review!! Brooke
Comment from --Turtle.
I liked that this poem didn't have to get complicated to convey a nice image. I fell into the pattern of it without any noticed hiccups or tripping over any of the words.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2009
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I liked that this poem didn't have to get complicated to convey a nice image. I fell into the pattern of it without any noticed hiccups or tripping over any of the words.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2009
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thank you - you've noticed what I always try to do - write something meaningful without being obscure about it! Brooke
Comment from Lady & Louis
Lovely poem, Brooke, and it points its moral subtly rather than didactically, which is a bonus! I like the unexpectedness of the butterfly/ladybird meeting at the end (well, it was unexpected to me 'cos I didn't look at the photo first, lol).
No nits or suggestions, nice work!
Louise :))
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2009
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Lovely poem, Brooke, and it points its moral subtly rather than didactically, which is a bonus! I like the unexpectedness of the butterfly/ladybird meeting at the end (well, it was unexpected to me 'cos I didn't look at the photo first, lol).
No nits or suggestions, nice work!
Louise :))
Comment Written 19-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2009
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Thank you, dearest friend - see my PM about subtlety! Almost everyone picked up on it, just not everyone. LOL Brooke
Comment from Freeflyer
This is a great rhythmic poem. I love the rhyme and the simple story, so easy to follow. Thanks for sharing.
Freeflyer
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2009
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This is a great rhythmic poem. I love the rhyme and the simple story, so easy to follow. Thanks for sharing.
Freeflyer
Comment Written 19-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2009
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Thank you for yet another wonderful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Goinup
Hey adewpearl
This is very nice. Butterflies, Ladybugs and gardens make for a heddy mix. Very well written and easy to follow. I liked the read.
Great job.
Ian
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2009
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Hey adewpearl
This is very nice. Butterflies, Ladybugs and gardens make for a heddy mix. Very well written and easy to follow. I liked the read.
Great job.
Ian
Comment Written 19-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2009
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Ian, thank you - glad you enjoyed :-) Brooke
