Wash Day Never Ends
Reflective Quatrains97 total reviews
Comment from bard owl
I am sure that temptation is one of the sins that God is constantly petitioned to forgive. Your poem is short and very meaningful. Best of luck in the contest. Blessings, Linda
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2009
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I am sure that temptation is one of the sins that God is constantly petitioned to forgive. Your poem is short and very meaningful. Best of luck in the contest. Blessings, Linda
Comment Written 12-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2009
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Linda, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Adewpearl ....
This is a short but very enjoyable little poem and, as it is a Contest entry, I wish you well.
There is just one line which does not read too well - your last line .... if never gone astray ...
I suggest - if I'd not gone astray.
Thank you for sharing this with us.
With love from ..... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2009
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Hullo Adewpearl ....
This is a short but very enjoyable little poem and, as it is a Contest entry, I wish you well.
There is just one line which does not read too well - your last line .... if never gone astray ...
I suggest - if I'd not gone astray.
Thank you for sharing this with us.
With love from ..... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2009
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Nanette Mary, thank you for your gracious comments and thoughtful input. Brooke :-)
Comment from The Cowboy Poet
Yeah, I'll bet your're a real corker when it comes to committing sins, Brooke. I just don't see it happening. However, you have written a nice, tight little poem for those of us who do. Well expressed. I will try to heed your advice for a couple of hours while I'm sitting here typing. Rhymeman, the cowboy poet.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2009
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Yeah, I'll bet your're a real corker when it comes to committing sins, Brooke. I just don't see it happening. However, you have written a nice, tight little poem for those of us who do. Well expressed. I will try to heed your advice for a couple of hours while I'm sitting here typing. Rhymeman, the cowboy poet.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2009
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Yep, they're going to declare me the first Protestant saint! :-D Thank you, my friend. Brooke
Comment from marion
Hi there adewpearl.
So correct, so right! I like to think I don't keep Him busy at all now-a-days. I have become such a good girl compared to my wayward early years! Love the art and opening lines on this one. Marion
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2009
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Hi there adewpearl.
So correct, so right! I like to think I don't keep Him busy at all now-a-days. I have become such a good girl compared to my wayward early years! Love the art and opening lines on this one. Marion
Comment Written 12-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2009
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Marion, thank you - I'm sure God isn't falling over with exhaustion because of you :-) Brooke
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Very well done my friend this is very creative and reads very well telling us that Jesus does forgive our sins however long it takes and we should trust in him well done regards Fuller
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2009
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Very well done my friend this is very creative and reads very well telling us that Jesus does forgive our sins however long it takes and we should trust in him well done regards Fuller
Comment Written 12-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2009
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Fuller, thanks so much. Brooke
Comment from c_lucas
Man was never meant to be perfect. That why erasers are on pencils and white out is so popular. Very well written with good imagery and descriptive scheme.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2009
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Man was never meant to be perfect. That why erasers are on pencils and white out is so popular. Very well written with good imagery and descriptive scheme.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2009
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Nope, not a one of us is perfect - some are just really really content to be as imperfect as possible! LOL Thanks so much, Brooke
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You're welcome, Brooke. Charlie
Comment from Wendyanne
Hi Brooke. This is a very interesting piece of poetry in which you reflect on the price of sin. It cannot be scrubbed away like a dirty mark. Well done and good luck
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2009
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Hi Brooke. This is a very interesting piece of poetry in which you reflect on the price of sin. It cannot be scrubbed away like a dirty mark. Well done and good luck
Comment Written 12-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2009
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Thank you for your perceptive read :-) Brooke
Comment from Adri7enne
Ah, but to wish to have never sinned is to wish to be other but human, don't you think, Brooke? A fine poem with a deep yearning for the unattainable.
Good work.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2009
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Ah, but to wish to have never sinned is to wish to be other but human, don't you think, Brooke? A fine poem with a deep yearning for the unattainable.
Good work.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2009
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Oh, not to wish one had never sinned - just to wish one had listened to that voice more often and made right choices to begin with more often. Perfection comes to nobody, but many people seem so content to be as damned imperfect as possible! LOL Thanks, Brooke
Comment from rhymelord
Short, simple, powerful. The essence of good verse delivering a strong message. A whimsical title, which gives no hint of the poem's deep meaning. Beautiful work, Brooke.
Regards
Reg
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2009
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Short, simple, powerful. The essence of good verse delivering a strong message. A whimsical title, which gives no hint of the poem's deep meaning. Beautiful work, Brooke.
Regards
Reg
Comment Written 12-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2009
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Reg, thank you!! I was pleased with this title - I usually think my titles are sucky! LOL Brooke :-)
Comment from Fleedleflump
If we never went astray, we wouldn't understand the peacefulness of redemption, and would never know what we had. I guess there's no comprehension of the beauty of peace without the memory of cacophony.
Mike
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2009
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If we never went astray, we wouldn't understand the peacefulness of redemption, and would never know what we had. I guess there's no comprehension of the beauty of peace without the memory of cacophony.
Mike
Comment Written 12-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2009
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I agree, Mike - I just think we don't have to get so carried away with making the bad choices. :-) Thanks, Brooke
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Don't mind me, Brooke. I've been feeling disagreeable all day. Lack of writing! My apologies for the abruptness of my review. It's all being sorted now. One new chapter rapidly coming up ...
:-)
Mike
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Mike, smile!! I didn't think your review had anything wrong with it at all. I've received disagreeable reviews, so I know one when I read one. LOL :-)
